Jean/Roy/Riza for 30threesomes [theme #5; emperor]

[hysteric_blue]

Title: Counterbalance [theme # 5; emperor]
Author: galuxkitty
Fandom: Fullmetal Alchemist
Pairing: Jean Havoc/Roy Mustang/Riza Hawkeye (Roy as pivot)
Rating: PG
Word Count: 1200
Warnings: Episode 51 spoilers.
Disclaimer: Fullmetal Alchemist is the rightful property of Hiromu Arakawa. This is a fanwork written purely for both your entertainment and mine

Comments

[havocmangawip]

LOVE it!

Found one teensy oversight:
"Hawkeye always kissed like it was the last they would _every_ share together;"

[ceasefire]

Thanks you! :B

Already fixed, my dear ♥ Thanks!

[fallia]

I like the way you juxtaposed Riza and Jean in almost every paragraph.

I especially liked the one contrasting their goodbyes. You describe Hawkeye so elegantly, and Havoc reminds me of a puppy dog, and the counterbalance is striking.

I found one teeny tiny mistake in the 4th paragraph:

This was the extent of Havoc culinary skills - that should be Havoc's

[ceasefire]

Thanks! I wanted them to each fill a different role in his personal life.

*nodnod* Hawkeye is carefully affectionate and Havoc's just loveable and wants to he touched; I think they'd both be exactly like that in relationships, actually.

Fixed! Sorry about that T_T;; 11:45pm self-beta is not good, GK.

Thanks for your comment!

[brightygurl]

You did a fabulous job *hearts* these three are totally my OTP3

[anat_astarte]

Loved it- also loved that Roy had the best of both and in the end he couldn't keep either of them.

[ceasefire]

Well, he did keep them. They just left coz they have their own lives to lead day-by-day... can't stay 24/7 with him in the hospital. XD;; But thank you!

[anat_astarte]

Oops yeah, missed that the first time reading it and too late to correct it in the comment now, hehhhee! Still a lovely fic <3

[spirit_wolf8356]

That was just awesome. I love how you contrasted the two of them.

[ceasefire]

Thank you very much!

[raja815]

That was amazing. <3 I love how Roy reacts to both of them, how they each bring out a different aspect of his personality. You win at fanfic.

[ceasefire]

Thank you ^_^ *GLOMPPOUNCES* Back to our collab, right? ♥