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[dancequeen8690]

hey i read this story!!! it sounds so familiar.... oooo it makes me want to cry, it's so sad, you just need grammer tips, because the way you are writing it just lays out the story in plain english, you need to spread it out more make is more suspending but not like action suspending.... i'll send you a story that i wrote the other day
but it a nice sotry and its sad

[monkeysturnmeon]

good story