no one knows what it's like to be the bad man

[hth_the_first]

So this is just a little snippity thing for a friend of mine, involving a character that I'd like to get around to writing one of these days. Enjoy it for whatever it's worth.

Comments

[dcaspall]

I've re-read this a couple of times now, and I think it's great. I admit to having some trouble coming up with any worthwhile comments beyond that one, but I'll do my best.

Pros:
- I like this concept; it's not something I expected from the theme (Terra Incognita).
- I keep trying to find an articulate way to say this, and it seems to be beyond me. I'll stumble on regardless. I am, and always have been, impressed by the rhythm of language in your work. There's a flow to it, a cadence that keeps me reading to the end. It's very present here. Good stuff.

Obligatory Con:
- You used the word 'psychocriminologist'! You used the word 'psychocriminologist'! Now we must fight... to the death!

[hth_the_first]

Thanks! I think it's cool to have to condense concepts and world-building ideas into small packages, because that's what I really need to be better at doing -- conveying totally new information in a way that's not too overwhelming. The thing about having a seven-year fanfiction career is that it hones that verbal style you were talking about to a fine point, but it also spoils you, because there's so much you don't have to tell people; they already know. When you write original stuff, they know NOTHING! They are FOOLS! So I'm looking forward to writing stuff for you guys and figuring out if I can make it make any freaking sense.

[elfiepike]

i read your post complaining about the workshop group first, so obviously i had a bit more context, but i really like it. (possibly because i am, in fact, imagining jason as played by jason momoa, only with no hair? hm.)

i really like how he's a coward now, because you go into so many reasons why, and the repetition with twists keep it interesting. i like how before the surgery, he was a man free of everything: morals, fear, etc, but imprisoned by the law, and now he's a man free by the law but imprisoned by all these things invisible restraints he never had before, and how the feeling of restraints on his wrists (or their evidence, which is again, invisible) is one that doesn't leave even though he knows they're not there

[linaerys]

This is very cool (and totally science fiction BTW--and you can take that back to the jackass in your creative writing class). I'm really fascinated by the damage done in the name of society's safety, and this story is quietly horrifying--a tiny holocaust in one man's brain. Fascinating work.

[palebluebell]

Please excuse lateness, I haven't quite got the hang of not missing important things in my friendlist-thing