Exercises in Truth and Listening/Three Column Prompt Challenge

[jennifergale]

Author: pirateginny
Title: Exercises in Truth and Listening
Challenge: Three Column Prompt Challenge--Summer After 6th Year/Misuse of Muggle Artifacts Office/Tube of lipstick or gl(o)ss in Vixen Red
Summary: Ginny gets curious.
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Fluff, humor, minor angst
Word Count (optional): 3,600
Notes/Warnings: A Special thanks to hyacinthgirl_36 for her great beta

Comments

[backseat]

Very nice! I liked this alot; especially the thing about the ears. I think you portrayed all the characters accuratly. Good job.

[jennifergale]

Thanks. :) I hadn't really written with Arthur yet (and he's one of my favorite characters!), so I'm glad that he came accross well. And, heehee, the ears amused me as well. :D

[chaotick]

Too Funny! Poor Ginny Poor Harry... devious Dad... WICKEDLY well done, m'dear.

[jennifergale]

Why thank you. :) One thing lacking in fanfic are more devious Arthur stories (and you know that he is!). ;) I thought I'd help fill the void a little.

[mary_v]

BRILLIANT! Abso-bloody-lutely brilliant!!! I'm sooo adding this to my memories. Best part: Mr. Weasley being the culprit. Rarely is Mr. Weasley the prankster- it's usually Mrs. Weasley in fics. That's probably what I like most (aside from the fluff:P)
I hope to read more from you!
~Maria~

[jennifergale]

Aw. :blushing: Thanks, Maria! Heh. I've always seen Arthur as the source of mischief in that family (love potions aside). ;) I'm glad that you liked that aspect. Actually, I'm even more pleased about the fluff coming accross well! This was my first serious attempt at writing a kiss, and it drove me nutty. :P

My stuff is out there, at Phoenix Song and SIYE....(plug-plug-plug)...and, for some reason, I keep writing more. :P (Though, I should probably fold my laundry sometimes, too)

-Jenn

[tunxeh]

Wow, what a brilliant piece. I especially love the middle Harry/Ginny conversation part, and the way Harry's gut-punched expression leads Ginny to the conclusion that she should tell the truth with or without the lipstick, but the punchline at the end is fun too. Harry's line "I meant the part where I don’t really think there will be an afterward" confused me a little, since he didn't say anything like that to Ginny earlier, but I guess it relates to how he said he was a head taller?

[jennifergale]

Aw, thank you! :) It's always so nice to know what worked--the conversation started out much longer, but I trimmed and trimmed and tried to focus on the emotional pacing--so I'm especially glad that Ginny's declaration didn't seem too abrupt. :) And, of course, all of that trimming probably contributed to your confusion with the "afterward" line. It was in reference to an after-the-relationship afterward, but your confusion is completely warranted. :)
-Jenn

[nellie_darlin]

This is a sweet fic. One thing - personally, I think the narrative voice wouldn't call Mr and Mrs Weasley "Mum" and "Dad" unless it was first person from Ginny's point of view. As a result, the "dad"s are a bit jarring. But otherwise, a good read.

[jennifergale]

Sure, I understand. :) We all have different preferences for these things. I was writing in tight third, and I usually try to keep all of my words (adverbs, adjectives, nouns, the setting details) tightly keyed to how my viewpoint character would see them. [Just think what different names Harry has for the various adult characters] Though Mom/Dad is seldom used in fanfic, you see it a lot elsewhere. Heehee. In fact, everytime I read Arthur/Molly in a third person from Ginny's perspec, I get jarred the first few times, but I get acclimated after a while. :P

Heh. That got a bit rambly, didn't it? ;) Anyhow, thanks for the review and concrit! :)