"Focus", Verse Challenge

[tosca1390]

Title: Focus
Author: Tosca ( tosca1390 )
Rating: PG (shock! awe!)
Challenge: From the Verse Prompts: your slightest look easily will unclose me
though i have closed myself as fingers, e.e. cummings

Comments

[madeof_stars]

Lovely as always dear, but I have to admit I am disappointed by the ending. Oh yes, it's very in canon of Harry - specifically this part...

He hated it. He didn’t want people to know his feelings, or to understand his motives. He just wanted to get through all this, hopefully still living. Feelings and attachments were something he just didn’t have time or energy for.

That's very Harry. I just... I *want* the happy ending in fan fic or at least...the end of the misunderstanding. Real life's too hard; I need the snog or the moment of understanding in my fiction. But again, that's me. I'm sure others will disagree and say more angst the better. ;)

Regardless, as always, your talent shines.

[poseida9]

I looooooooooooooove this. Abso-bloody-lutely amazing! Really. :)

As a reader, I wish you had had a different ending or were considering a sequel, but as a writer, I definitely understand why the choice to leave it as is.

Oh God that sounded uber-pretentious. But I am just trying to say I like it lots and would welcome a sequel, but it's amazing right now, alone, too. :)

[reallycorking]

AGH HARRY. You stubborn foooool! aka: that was brilliant! And heartbreaking. So lovely though, a great contribution. :)

[quidditchpup]

I agree with what was said in another comment, it is very canon...especially Ginny punching him. I really liked it.

[the_vagrant]

That is my favorite e.e. cummings poem and I know it like the back of my own (clentched) hand. So I have to say that this fic does it justice. I loved it and it really protrayed it nicely.