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Drabblet: Without as Within; Remus/Sirius, PG

Oct 26, 2005 08:26

Drabblet: Without as Within
Author: sheafrotherdon
Pairing: Remus/Sirius
Rating: G
Summary: The autumn after Sirius falls. Loosely related to the prompt for day twenty-five at scarvesnhats. 204 words.

( Be still, he'd whispered . . . )

remus lupin, sirius/remus, titles: m-z, sheafrotherdon, sirius

Comments 10

glass_wishes October 26 2005, 09:04:46 UTC

Beautifully done!! Brava!! This is poignantly visceral and done with so few words!

sheafrotherdon October 26 2005, 14:35:11 UTC

Thank you! :D

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sheafrotherdon October 28 2005, 21:40:15 UTC

Thank you! I'm fascinated by what it must have been like for him to be left so wholly behind . . .

paranoidsistah October 28 2005, 00:31:51 UTC

This is tight. Both expressive and so moving. No sentence is wasted.

"stillness he’d craved to swallow the whispered footfalls of Sirius’ agitation."

"a yawning absence that held him fast and plucked at his composure with cruel persistence"

I love these lines. Great writing. Thank you so much for posting.

sheafrotherdon October 28 2005, 21:42:08 UTC

thank you so much!

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sheafrotherdon October 28 2005, 21:44:11 UTC

wow - thank you for such great feedback! I appreciate it so much - especially hearing what you could *see* as you read it. thank you!

medicinal_mirth October 28 2005, 14:09:37 UTC

He’d had no idea that stillness could rage until now.

Yes. Absolutely. I have no articulate words to tell you how much I love this. It just makes sense in my head. Thank you.

sheafrotherdon October 28 2005, 21:44:43 UTC

Thank you!