The Brightest
Callie squinted, scrutinizing her smoldering reflection in the bathroom mirror, twirling left and then right, inspecting her makeup and hair before spritzing her abundant cleavage with the perfume Erica bought her for Christmas. The perfume's potency morphed Erica into a clothes-ripping savage. Satisfied with her sultry image, Callie shut off the
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My favorite part is this:
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"Callie marveled at how the lights gleamed off Erica's marble blue eyes, two blue globes now with their own constellation of stars. Callie's girl had stars in her eyes."
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I love those little details!:) And i love all those things you write which make it so obvious they adore each other. Like:
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"She was unaccustomed to unadulterated adoration from anyone. No one had ever looked at her the way Callie did. Callie's honest eyes radiated love. Erica liked herself a whole lot better through Callie's eyes."
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You write everything so sweet and authentic! I can picture it so well, it's so believable that it really happened that way:)
And Callie's speech is so sweet:
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Oh! And your hair was falling in your eyes. And you did this thing, you hooked your hair behind your ears and I just...I had never wanted to kiss someone more right then. The smallest gesture and I was smitten. Anyway! When I was walking to you, I happened to look up at the stars. And they shone brighter that night. I've been looking at stars my whole life and suddenly they were brighter. The world was different. The world was new and sparkly. Because you were in it.
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It's just so Callie. And so wonderful! Exactly the thing i'd love to hear her say if i were Erica.
Thank you so much for this adorable, wonderful read! That was a great bedtime story to read just after midnight;) Now i can go to sleep, thinking about Erica and Callie and dream sweet dreams about Callica... :)
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