Awww, so sweet! I wondered why no one had written a post with Sleeping!Reese and baby for that ep yet.
And for English not being your first language? I've seen native speakers who didn't write as well as you do. These aren't criticisms, but I'm assuming you want to improve your English? It's a difficult and non-entirely logical language... (If not, completely ignore me!) A few small things i noticed:
Third sentence - Finch stopped in his traks That should be "tracks."
Finch put the bags on one of the desks; holding back the impulse of call for Reese I think you want to say "the impulse TO call for Reese."
He sounded asleep with his arms protectively surrounding Leila's small frame He was sound asleep....
The sharp lines on the corner of his mouth and eyes The sharp lines AT the corner...
(And I was really busy this week. I would have read and commented sooner if your post included a word count so I knew how long it would take me to read it. Work was soooo busy I had to wait until the weekend to get caught up.)
Thanks so much for the amazing feedback and corrections, I really appreciate them :D
I would have read and commented sooner if your post included a word count
Thanks for the tip, while be adding it next time I post a fic. Oh, and I will definitely be writing more, I have plenty of plot bunnies in my head, just need to find the time to sit down and write them :P
Yeah, it's kind of maddening. There are moment when I had Reese and Finch voices playing the fic in my head or I'm pretty much developing the whole story in my mind. Obsessed pretty much? lol!
And for English not being your first language? I've seen native speakers who didn't write as well as you do. These aren't criticisms, but I'm assuming you want to improve your English? It's a difficult and non-entirely logical language... (If not, completely ignore me!) A few small things i noticed:
Third sentence - Finch stopped in his traks That should be "tracks."
Finch put the bags on one of the desks; holding back the impulse of call for Reese I think you want to say "the impulse TO call for Reese."
He sounded asleep with his arms protectively surrounding Leila's small frame He was sound asleep....
The sharp lines on the corner of his mouth and eyes The sharp lines AT the corner...
(And I was really busy this week. I would have read and commented sooner if your post included a word count so I knew how long it would take me to read it. Work was soooo busy I had to wait until the weekend to get caught up.)
Please keep writing! =)
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I would have read and commented sooner if your post included a word count
Thanks for the tip, while be adding it next time I post a fic. Oh, and I will definitely be writing more, I have plenty of plot bunnies in my head, just need to find the time to sit down and write them :P
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I have the same problem. I have two or three ideas that I reallyw ant to work on, but real life is a bit hectic at the moment. =(
I look forward to reading your next fic!
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Thanks :D
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