I really liked that piece, and the format you used for it. I understand it must be hard to write, but you managed to pull it off in a way that lets the reader fill the gaps between the memories.. and it was so touching too! *sniffs*
See?? Bobek Loves You Oogles
anonymous
December 1 2005, 07:40:28 UTC
Well you told me and thus, here I am :p I loved this one, even though it had to kill Duo in the process and leave poor Widowed Heero hanging in the balance. The format was actually 'quite superb my friend'. Even with the flashes stated in the text, it still leaves that uneasiness... no, more like tension until the end when the reasons of why you picked out these specific scenes become clear. Now I am so glad that you did do first person because for this, third person wouldn't have left a really big impression and would have collided with the format. That and this sounds prettier ^_^ I also liked the fact that you didn't rush the wording. Sometimes with flashbacks and foreshadowing, some writers tend to rush through it or loose the power that they had through the story, or they make it really boooooorrrrring >_< So Im sitting here in the dark, listening to the wind rolling through the trees and I decide to check on your Lj because you'd yell at me.. again.. So Im sitting here, reading, and I hear this car pull up outside. It sounded
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Re: See?? Bobek Loves You Oogles
anonymous
December 3 2005, 01:13:45 UTC
I'll call everyone when I get back from the snow/tree killing and we'll see what is what for Sunday or you guys decide while I am gone and fill me in when I get back. Either or cause I don't care... I'll be on aim/msn later if you wanna chat. Ja mata!
))izumiiris for aim ))izumi_iris_7@yahoo.com for msn
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Thank you! It was difficult trying to give just enough. I ended up cutting a lot of material that didn't need to be in it. I'm glad you liked it!
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