epitaph help!
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i need your help!!
i have to do epitaphs for my english class (the things that go on gravestones.....). They are just fictitous, but I don't know if this one is good. I feel like it's missing something. so please please please help me make it better!!
I am Ace,
A man of many sorrows.
But I lived my life
Exactly how I dreamt
I lived my life upon that stage,
To perform in front of millions.
And when I was upon that stage,
My heart felt complete.
With the bright lights,
And the cheering fans,
I felt as if it were home.
But my warm heart was so fragile,
Because ever since you came into my life,
I never wanted anything more than to be with you.
I loved you, dear.
Loved you so much.
But never could I
Express how I felt.
Because that one day,
I lived my dream
Performing upon that stage.
A gun shot rung in my ears,
Until it pierced me in my heart.
My ever so fragile heart
Was bursting with blood.
As I fell to the floor,
I gasped for air,
And I saw your precious eyes,
As they looked into mine that one last time.
So today you said goodbye to me
And left me with a kiss
That will last forever
In my broken heart.
thanks for any help!
love,
heather