lyric help
so....i need some feedback:
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-moving out-
i set the alarm clock across the room
so I’d have to rise to hush it.
instead I just learned to pretend
or sleep through its crying out.
I hope the new york you find
is the one you were always looking for
it wasn’t when I was searching
but it should be now that I’ve left
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-war and peace-
oh, the war is over. yeah, the future won.
the machines declared, didn’t know how right
‘this has happened before and will again.’
who know they meant it was peace?
the math added up and they calculated
god was in the loopholes and the paradoxes.
so the riddles ain’t worth solving soon abated
no need to think if someone’s there.
the past fought hard to gain ground, it thought
as the future lost it would grow (on and on)
but the past won better than it’s foregone conclusion
turns out it and the future work in collusion
-----wedding photos-
you were so pretty at the wedding
smiled like I’d not seen in years
wish I was there to enjoy it with you
but glad you never saw the tears
the photos showed you up and dancing
you had bright flowers wove in your hair
more often than not I sit and think of
where vacancy crept into my stare
couldn’t I just see?
I hope it’s alright to say ‘I miss you’
I know it’s not alright to feel
I guess it’s wrong of me to love you
after skipping out on all the bills
I don’t mind if I am your weapon
in the war against my heart
but I can’t stand the silence
bearing down on me now that we’re apart
couldn’t I just see?
this is for the best
this is for the best
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are they moving or thoughtful or disjunct and off the mark?