Field of Mars

[hopeful_fiction]

Sequel to On the banks of the Tiber
Supernatural, AU, John, PG-13 (gen).

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I've done a 'DVD commentary' for this fic, which you can find here.

Comments

[kitsune_red]

This hurt to read, all the way through. So beautiful. The imagery much more clean and vibrant than in Tiber. The stag thundering through the woods toward John, and the boys hunting. Oh, man. The wind moving through the forest..

This one is amazing.

Towards the end, you know, kinda embarrassing to say, but I had tears, just a steady flow of them - the kind you don't even notice, and then don't want to wipe away when you do.

So beautiful it hurts.

*is hardcore fangirling this fic*
Definitely in my top five, fancy lady.

[angstslashhope]

Thank you for the lovely feedback :)

I think this comes through cleaner and tighter than Tiber (admittedly, yeah) for a couple of reasons I can think of - I thought about this one a lot more, put off writing it a lot more before I actually got it down; whereas Tiber just came out on its own, I had no idea where it was going. Secondly, it was freaking hard work to write John in this! It's easy enough to bumble on with the boys, but John tends to need more careful handling. So I'm so glad it worked out!

Thank you again! I've come to um, quite adore you brain in the past week, so your hardcore fangirling makes me very pleased.

[kitsune_red]

Oh John.

I have so much love for John, and I think you got him, perfectly. He's a hard character to write -- not just because we haven't seen much of him, but because he's very much oldschool Guy, you know? Very unavailable with his emotions and his thoughts, and a lot of him is hidden, even from himself.

I like your Caleb, and I love the spare dialogue between him and John. They both know what they'll find, but neither one is going to come out and say it; John won't admit to it until he finally has to.

So many nice touches in this. Thank you for writing this one. It's so evocative and rich and interesting, I'll be remembering it for a long time. And I honestly really suck at feedback, but just so you know -- I hardly ever leave it at all, anymore; and I don't gush unless I'm seriously in love. :)

[angstslashhope]

not just because we haven't seen much of him, but because he's very much oldschool Guy, you know? Very unavailable with his emotions and his thoughts, and a lot of him is hidden, even from himself.YES, EXACTLY. That’s where the trickiness is in this. I don’t actually feel like there’s not enough of John in canon to create a solid characterization in fic, it’s that he is incredibly emotionally unavailable, even to himself! Hell, yes. And I didn’t even think I was a huge John fan (though I’m not anti-John), but I’ve been writing a lot more of him since this

[kitsune_red]

I’m in the middle of an epic John fic set in 1984

Writing one, you mean? Or reading one?

[angstslashhope]

Writing one! I think it'll be about 20,000 words when I'm done. I started with the idea of writing it episodically (so structured like a typical episode, with the freak of the week, investigation, resolution etc) - but, yaknow, set when John was just starting hunting.

[kitsune_red]

Oh yay! How exciting. :)
*claps hands like a little girly*