Field of Mars

[hopeful_fiction]

Sequel to On the banks of the Tiber
Supernatural, AU, John, PG-13 (gen).

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I've done a 'DVD commentary' for this fic, which you can find here.

Comments

[anonymous]

*sniffles* Poor John. He's lost his whole family. I was kind of hoping they'd make him into a werewolf too. *sob*
-Aya

[angstslashhope]

I was kind of hoping they'd make him into a werewolf too.

all that alpha might cause some kind of Winchester-implosion, though!

... I can't believe I've given that consideration. la la.

Thanks for the feedback :)

[tabaqui]

Oh, that was lovely and sad, totally heartbreaking. He knows, and they know, and they were *there* but they didn't talk, didn't...connect, except in the most tenuous way.
*sniffle*

Lovely stuff.

[angstslashhope]

they were *there* but they didn't talk, didn't...connect, except in the most tenuous way.

possibly I'm psychotic like that. but... couldn't really see it happening any other way. heh.

Thank you - I'm glad you liked it :)

[tabaqui]

Nah, not psychotic!
We each have our own 'visions' of things - and that's cool. Did i want to see the boys, all lean and scarred, tanned so dark, hair grown out and dirt under their nails, standing in the dappled light of trees. Wary and easily startled, part of the forest now - part of something *else* and not his boys, not really, not anymore...

Oh, yis, i did. And John try to talk and them try to talk - say *something* but...yeah.

But that's *my* vision, and this is *your* story. Heh. So - all, all good.

[angstslashhope]

Your vision does sound exceedingly lovely. *happily integrates into own vision*

:)

[quellefromage]

Gods. That was...I...wha...guh. That was amazing. I had chills. Finding the car...aughh! And the journal...and...and...I have to go read the Tiber story now. Gah!

Oh, and thank YOU so much for this. It's...geez, where are my powers of speech when I need them? Oh, I forgot. This story stole them.

[angstslashhope]

I am totally fascinated by the fact that you read this before you read Tiber. It must be... different. :D

Glad to see it still worked despite (or thanks to?) that, though!

Thank YOU for the lovely feedback - I'm really glad you enjoyed this :)

[tsuki_no_bara]

i kept wondering how it was going to turn out, wondering if john was going to shoot the two wolves without knowing, even after he and caleb found the den and caleb left, and then they led him back to the stream and i figured it would be ok. "ok" in this case meaning "no one had to die." the boys took care of john and he buried his bullets so he wouldn't have to shoot them. probably the only way it could have ended without them all being dead. heartbreaking, but beautifully written, especially all the descriptions of the forest and john and caleb's trails and camps.

>>Nothing was missing, he writes, then strikes it out.<<

...because something IS.

[angstslashhope]

Thank you for the lovely feedback. It took a while to wrap my head around how to go about writing this ultimate outcome, and then a while longer to wrap John's head around it. I'm really glad it worked for you :)

Thanks again :)

[liptonrm]

Wow, I think this broke me.

*stares at computer blankly, overcome*

I can't even begin to delineate everything I loved about this but the one thing I can't get away from is the idea that John knew, deep down, the entire time, he just didn't want to believe it.

And that line. Oh my fuck. The ending, everything, is overwhelmingly amazing. Wow, just ... wow.

[angstslashhope]

the idea that John knew, deep down, the entire time, he just didn't want to believe it.

... and that ties into what I believe is at the core of John's character - because canonically he's already thrown his life away in the pursuit of a goal he can never obtain - getting Mary back.

but anyhoo. This feedback made me grin stupidly. I'm really glad you liked it! Or, were broken by it, which is almost better :D

Thanks so much for commenting :)