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fic: the slow unraveling of me (KMS #4)

Mar 03, 2010 17:38

Title: the slow unraveling of me
Author: hoosierbitch
Rating: NC-17
Series: #4 in Kink Meme, follows: i thought i was someone else (someone good)
Warnings: BDSM, angst, spanking, rough sex, consent issues, edgeplay. This is not an example of a healthy BDSM relationship.
Notes: Title is taken from the Indigo Girl's song "Soon to be Nothing"
Summary: 5,000 words of ( Read more... )

fandom: white collar, fic, series: kink meme

Comments 21

secretsolitaire March 4 2010, 01:35:47 UTC

Eeep. This was so intense, Neal's feelings so raw, that I almost had to stop reading. (Which means this was some very vivid writing. *smile*) I was expecting them to talk before having sex again -- I almost felt like Neal was barely in any shape to consent, if that makes sense? -- but I suppose the sex ended up being the conversation in the end. The last line was lovely.

elrhiarhodan March 4 2010, 02:21:55 UTC

You know, we laugh and joke and call this porn - but it's not.

The sex writing is great, but that's not what reaches inside of us and grabs hold of our heart, stops our breath and makes us THINK - wow.

This is human study - the breakdown of personality and emotion, the breaching of the armor of three very strong people. And rebuilding each of them.

Thank you.

asimaiyat March 4 2010, 02:57:47 UTC

That was pretty amazing. Really hard to read in some parts, and like amazingly hot in others, and sometimes both at the same time.

Neal not wearing the hat because he thinks Peter doesn't like it broke my heart. And also the part where he wants to say "red" but can't. Ow. :(

I love that in this series I can really sympathize with everyone and see how they all love each other, and yet, they're still hurting each other and don't really know how to stop. It's painful and it feels really honest and, I guess, adult. I hope that the series continues and that eventually they find a way to communicate that works.

And also I just really want to give Neal a hug. Which is so different from the way I usually feel about him. So points for that. :D

jrosemary March 4 2010, 04:24:31 UTC

This was a breath-taking read, but it was almost equally disturbing. Neal is insecure and hurting and guilt ridden--and he can't even bring himself to believe that Elizabeth and Peter find him beautiful (let alone good.)

I hope these three will spend a lot of time building each other up and talking things out . . . starting when they wake up entangled with each other.

Please continue!

anonymous March 4 2010, 05:28:14 UTC

Ouch! That was out and out painful. Beautiful, but painful. They definitely need to sit down and have a talk. Poor Neal. You made me cry for him. They should have never asked him to push his limits that far without negotiating it. Things like that can be really damaging, a sub has to trust their Dom and a Dom has to be able to read their sub.