Spock was wrong--logic can go to bat for emotion! I'm glad you liked the addition although the little Jack Sparrow aka Johnny Depp in my head is looking at me incredulously and saying, "You're giving me explication?!"
*Be quiet and say your lines, Johnny!*
Thank you for the beta help and the comments. I enjoyed providing a little motivation for Will's admission of love to Elizabeth--and he had to find out a little about how Elizabeth had come to be engaged to someone else.
Hee! This made me giggle in multiple places. Perfect Jack voice and thought processes all through. And Will's thoughts on sailing, too. This was an especially wonderful bit:
Will remembered watching from the main topgallant yard of the Interceptor, spellbound as the dawn rose blushing and golden over a jewel-toned sea. Jack had sent him up with the instructions that he wasn’t to come down until he’d figured out why he’d been ordered up there. There was a touch of the poet in that scallywag of a pirate.
Lovely description, and I definitely can see Jack doing that. He does have a touch of the poet--as do you.
"...She handled being marooned like a bloody pirate. No vapours, no whining. Lots of bad language," he grinned.
LOL. And at the embroidery floss, too. And lots of other little moments. I love it.
*bounce* Made you laugh! I'm so glad you found so much that was smile worthy--I feel I've contributed to bettering the universe then! :D
Jack's point of view on society is such fun to write. He looks at social conventions like one would look at a strange snake--hmmm, I wonder if it's poisonous. Let's just assume it is.
Thank you for letting me know the parts you liked best. I do like to sneak in a little sea/ship/poetry love into my PotC fics. And I do appreciate your comments.
Yes, youth is a fine thing to have once so one can get some good pictures, but I wouldn't want to stay there. Childhood on the other hand, I never plan to get out of.
Ah, Will's struggle is not with Elizabeth, but with himself. However, I'm not surprised you'd suggest that.
Thank you so much for commenting. You know, when I think about it, Jack was always giving Will little bits of advice on life: The what a man can do/can't do speech Not all treasure is silver and gold Wait for the opportune moment Don't do anything stupid He's a regular advice column.
oh, i do so love ficlets where jack is in character and will isn't a complete nitwit. lovely characterisations and dialogue all around!
Will remembered watching from the main topgallant yard of the Interceptor, spellbound as the dawn rose blushing and golden over a jewel-toned sea. Jack had sent him up with the instructions that he wasn’t to come down until he’d figured out why he’d been ordered up there. There was a touch of the poet in that scallywag of a pirate.
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“How many times do I have to tell you, whelp?” Jack continued, tacking firmly back to his original course. “You have to treat a fine lady like a ship. Don’t assume you know what she should do. Don’t try to tell her what is best for her. Let her tell you what she wants.”those were perhaps my two most favorite bits. Will realising that a ship isn't just a keel and a hull and a deck and sails, and Jack waxing all wonderfully (and accurately) metaphorical. man might be constantly fending off hordes of angry womens, but he seems to know where he's going somewhere down
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Thank you so much for your lovely, thoughtful comment. I'm glad you liked how I handle these characters. I do like writing Jack's point of view, and after my exploration of Will's character in Worthy of His Steel, I really found the forces that mold his actions fascinating. I've even converted a few diehard Will-dislikers. It's all in the movie if you look for it. Will is so beaten down by life; his tension is the only thing holding him together. He has no status whatsoever. How does one change the world when one has no power? Nothing in his society would give him reason to hope for Elizabeth's love
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Will is so beaten down by life; his tension is the only thing holding him together. He has no status whatsoever. How does one change the world when one has no power?
Exactly! How can you accomplish feats of derring-do until you have the actual opportunity to do so? It was nice to see you write Will a little more self-centered than in the movie, too - he's human, he's not ALWAYS going to be thinking of saving someone else or what's best for someone else. Occasionally, we all have to think of Number One!
At this point, he's finished saving Elizabeth. He's succeeded in accomplishing his goal. And he hasn't yet recognized the need or the possibility to try to save Jack. So, finally he has enough down time to remember all he's lost, to regret returning to the chains that he'd slipped for such a brief time.
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Will smiled. That did sound like the Elizabeth he loved. “Why embroidery floss?” he asked Jack.
“Because it was the most ridiculous item I could think of,” Jack explained, momentarily side-tracked. “Now don’t interrupt.”
Will gave an amused snort.
I join Will in that -- excellent Jackish explanation.
As I said before, very plausible scene, with impeccable logic. Your dialogue flows beautifully. Great work!
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*Be quiet and say your lines, Johnny!*
Thank you for the beta help and the comments. I enjoyed providing a little motivation for Will's admission of love to Elizabeth--and he had to find out a little about how Elizabeth had come to be engaged to someone else.
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Will remembered watching from the main topgallant yard of the Interceptor, spellbound as the dawn rose blushing and golden over a jewel-toned sea. Jack had sent him up with the instructions that he wasn’t to come down until he’d figured out why he’d been ordered up there. There was a touch of the poet in that scallywag of a pirate.
Lovely description, and I definitely can see Jack doing that. He does have a touch of the poet--as do you.
"...She handled being marooned like a bloody pirate. No vapours, no whining. Lots of bad language," he grinned.
LOL. And at the embroidery floss, too. And lots of other little moments. I love it.
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Jack's point of view on society is such fun to write. He looks at social conventions like one would look at a strange snake--hmmm, I wonder if it's poisonous. Let's just assume it is.
Thank you for letting me know the parts you liked best. I do like to sneak in a little sea/ship/poetry love into my PotC fics. And I do appreciate your comments.
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Something we've all uttered a time or three, yes ...
(But, if Will's having such a struggle with Elizabeth, he could just chuck the matter out, save Jack, and run off with him!)
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Ah, Will's struggle is not with Elizabeth, but with himself. However, I'm not surprised you'd suggest that.
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Yeah, I'm just having a bit of fun. ;-) Actually, I don't mind W/E stories, especially when they're as well-written as what you do.
However, I'm not surprised you'd suggest that.
My slashiness never passes up an opportunity to rear its pretty head ...
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My slashiness never passes up an opportunity to rear its pretty head
I did notice.
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The what a man can do/can't do speech
Not all treasure is silver and gold
Wait for the opportune moment
Don't do anything stupid
He's a regular advice column.
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Will remembered watching from the main topgallant yard of the Interceptor, spellbound as the dawn rose blushing and golden over a jewel-toned sea. Jack had sent him up with the instructions that he wasn’t to come down until he’d figured out why he’d been ordered up there. There was a touch of the poet in that scallywag of a pirate.
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“How many times do I have to tell you, whelp?” Jack continued, tacking firmly back to his original course. “You have to treat a fine lady like a ship. Don’t assume you know what she should do. Don’t try to tell her what is best for her. Let her tell you what she wants.”those were perhaps my two most favorite bits. Will realising that a ship isn't just a keel and a hull and a deck and sails, and Jack waxing all wonderfully (and accurately) metaphorical. man might be constantly fending off hordes of angry womens, but he seems to know where he's going somewhere down ( ... )
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Exactly! How can you accomplish feats of derring-do until you have the actual opportunity to do so? It was nice to see you write Will a little more self-centered than in the movie, too - he's human, he's not ALWAYS going to be thinking of saving someone else or what's best for someone else. Occasionally, we all have to think of Number One!
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