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hollyrose_hime

Repose

Aug 30, 2009 01:06

Repose [FF.NET]

Disclaimer: I don’t own any of the characters from Axis Powers Hetalia!

Summary: “Europe tears itself to pieces around us, yet here we sit.”

( Straightening his tunic and brushing down his breeches, Ludwig stopped himself before he could run a hand through his golden, neatly brushed back hair. Regardless of the state of his mentor’s appearance, he knew that his own must be pristine when addressing the older man. )

c:germany, fanfiction, f:hetalia, c:prussia

Comments 4

derivatizing August 30 2009, 14:26:29 UTC

This was very well written, the interplay between Prussia and Germany is very solid in it's characterization, and it's always nice to see the two just being brothers, especially back in the day.

As such, the only thing I can say that I didn't totally enjoy was the ending. Your characterization and writing was so good that I really wanted mored! To me the ending, therefore, seemed a little abrupt but that's really a minor thing I think reflects more on my enjoyment of the fic than lack thereof.

Keep up the good work. ♥ I look forward to reading more of your fics in the future.

hollyrose_hime September 4 2009, 18:04:48 UTC

Thank you for commenting (and sorry for the somewhat late reply)! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it =D

I agree that the ending was probably too abrupt, but I was stuck in a rut with tying it off and didn't want to hold off on posting it for too long since I'd probably forget I'd written it otherwise ^^'

Again, thank you for the feedback! Hopefully it'll help me improve for the next fic ^^

whitewings9 October 20 2009, 23:35:26 UTC

Man this was awesome! So much going on, your notes at the end were helpful. It's done so well, the way you incorporated history into the characters. So well done :)

fictatious November 28 2009, 02:00:15 UTC

Good fic, and ooh, I like your layout.