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[bitterfig]

Title: Wanted
Characters: Teddy (T-bag)/Susan Hollander
Chronology: Set immediately before the events in "Brother's Keeper",
3 years before the Prison Break series
Word Count: 1480
Rating:NC-17
Warnings: I decided to try something really off kilter for my first T-bag story- consentual hetrosexual sex.
Don't worry, I'm not planning on making a habit of

Comments

[rhymeswithghoti]

This was really nice, in a kind of creepy way.

On their eighth date he kissed her and she realized she had been starving for the past three years.

Nice line. The whole description of her experience with her divorce and her feelings about men and T-bag and particular were very well done.

And I was really creeped out during the opening couple of paragraphs. Good job.

[ferrynheit]

Yeah, I just read rhymeswithghoti's comment and was trying to figure out if this was meant to be creepy at all or just nice. I mean, It was nice, and it was done well, but does he havea hidden agenda or is it genuine? I like to think there's a hidden agenda, but that maybe a small part of him enjoys it and likes that someone accepts him. (That part was good, by the way, where she says she accepts him.)

But maybe you meant for it be that way, to make people wonder. Because there are parts of this story that can seem very creepy and chilling if you think of him having hidden motives. I love the way he talks here. You wrote him well.

I love her thoughts too. I love how she suddenly realizes that she was pursuing him all this time, even though she never thought about dating.

Although I'm a slash fan, luckily I am not scared off by het. Nicely done!

[such_things]

aww, this was no nice. i loved it.

[bitterfig]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it. This was my first fanfic, written right after the "My brother's keeper" episode aired.