The only one I can see room to improve on is Sephiroth. NOW HEAR ME OUT, because I fucking love this Sephiroth, BUT I do feel there's something that can be done one better.
He needs to tl;dr.
Some of his FINEST MOMENTS in the original game is where he goes on and on fucking with Cloud's head presenting contradiction after contradiction to his memory and constantly placing logic in his evil speeches that made it seem, at times, that he really was right to do what he was doing. It's what makes him an amazing villain.
This is what I think you can do to take an AMZING Sephiroth and just push him that one small step more towards GREATNESS!!!
This is exactly what I wanted to hear. I knew I was fucking up somewhere with him, and I just couldn't place what it was. I made the mistake of not re-playing the game before apping him, so I'm still kind of rusty. I want to spend my next day off completely re-reading the script so I can improve him for you guys.
Thank you so much. UGH. He's the one I've been worried about most, and now that I know what's wrong, I will be taking the time to fix him!
jhksjdh thank you so much. I really appreciate that. I really appreciate your honesty on the whole; your concrit is always helpful without making me feel shitty about what I'm doing. concrit, ur doin' it right.
First up, I love Wolverine, Fai and Edgeworth. I think Edgeworth is amazing and Fai is also great! I haven't seen a lot of Doumeki yet and I don't know much about Zoro.
I really like how you do Edgeworth's objections and submit evidence and the like. It really gives a feel for the game and thus enhances the character portrayal.
I only have one thing to say about Fai, and I hope this doesn't come across as weird or anything... but, it feels like most of his interactions are within the CLAMP cast, and I totally understand why he would have heavy interactions with them! Hell, this isn't even just him, but, it feels like sort of you guys talk to each other more then anyone else? Now I could totally be wrong too! I don't stalk everything written or anything. So... yeah I don't know.... I hope I made sense.... u.u;;;
And I love it when he and little!Fai interact, it's cute.
Thank you so much! ♥ I need to actually do something with Doumeki. I'm working on some plot stuffs for him so I can get him out more.
With Fai, I can't say I disagree. Though, a lot of the non-CLAMP people he used to be friendly with are gone, and we've gotten SO MANY new CLAMP people that he's trying to satisfy his friends. Plus a 5 month long inter-CLAMP plot will kind of do that. I try my best to tag a lot of people with Fai, but I'll definitely try my best to consciously tag outside of the CLAMP cast.
I understand how that can happen, especially with the complex plot going on. Just sort of, pointing it out because sometimes you just don't see it when you're on the inside? No big deal really.
He is! You all do make me want to app a CLAMP character.
Yes, I need to figure out what to do. I've kind of been taking it slow and re-reading canon a bit~
Either way, I appreciate it! I don't want to be someone who only hangs with their cast; but the sudden growth and the massive plot kind of just overwhelmed poar little fai-san.
While I'm familiar with most of your characters, Zoro is really the only one I really know.
What can I say, you got him spot on. He's a total hothead but still keeps that zen-like calm to him which is just so Zoro. Only thing I can say I really miss (or..y'know, might just not have noticed) is that he doesn't seem to be as focused on training and honing his skills, but that's a minor thing that could just be happening "off-screen" idk.
Baw, thank you darling. ♥ I wouldn't say it's not there, it's just kind of... lol unspoken? He was kind of beat to shit after the heaven smile thing (three days of killing shit, wooo~), but he's on the hunting team with Goten and he went hunting with Umi the other day.
And he's working on sparring partners and whatnot. So rest assured, it's something that will be coming up more in the future!
He also spent like nearly a month perpetually lost in the woods, when he was trying to find Northern Lights. So. 8| LMAO.
Either way, I'll be sure to make a conscious effort to mention it a bit more often! Thank you for the input bb<3
Your Edgeworth is AMAZING. I love him and sdlghg. I can TOTALLY hear his game voice here! I love how every conversation with him is like playing the game over again and I can hear the background music and everything. That tells me how SO WELL you have his voice, when it feels like I have the Nintendo DS in my hands and we're playing it. Holy crap.
I think my only real critique is that I notice a buttload of ellipses with Sephiroth. Whhhyyy is that? This may have changed recently, but I noticed that a lot when he started posting.
jhdsjdh omg thank you. I'm so speechless. He's one that I always worry about, but I'm always glad that bit the bullet and decided to play him. He's a ton of fun and I'm just glad anyone could even think that of my portrayal. ♥
IDK, FF+Ellipses=OTP, but I know I went overboard, orz. I've cut down on them a whole lot. I'm still feeling him out and getting into the swing of things. I need to replay the game after I move (orz the game is packed in a box somewhere hahaha). But yes, in his tag since then, he's been less... ellipses-y? It'll show through when I actually write something more than like 5 words, I guess.
I'm going to second what Yume's said about the CLAMP cast being sort of insular--it's definitely more of a combined-cast-trait than a problem with Fai, though, so just making note of it. ;)
Vegeta has always been amazing--I know that with Gohan dropping, he's sort of lost his plot point, so I don't have any further comments for now except good luck with him. :O
And I haven't seen that much with Zoro yet. XD I love his interactions with Umi, and his general GD IT LUFFY, but I think he needs more time and development for me to get a better picture. :D
And I'm enjoying Edgeworth so far. XD I think I must be missing his more epic threads, or something, but his voice is coming through pretty clearly for me, too. (: I'll be sure to stalk him more.
FFFFff oh, re: Sephiroth. XD I have to admit his ellipses sort of drove me nuts trying to read them--they've gotten better, so. XD I know it's canon (although I don't know the canon wat), but it's great to have them toned down a little. ♥;;
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The only one I can see room to improve on is Sephiroth. NOW HEAR ME OUT, because I fucking love this Sephiroth, BUT I do feel there's something that can be done one better.
He needs to tl;dr.
Some of his FINEST MOMENTS in the original game is where he goes on and on fucking with Cloud's head presenting contradiction after contradiction to his memory and constantly placing logic in his evil speeches that made it seem, at times, that he really was right to do what he was doing. It's what makes him an amazing villain.
This is what I think you can do to take an AMZING Sephiroth and just push him that one small step more towards GREATNESS!!!
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This is exactly what I wanted to hear. I knew I was fucking up somewhere with him, and I just couldn't place what it was. I made the mistake of not re-playing the game before apping him, so I'm still kind of rusty. I want to spend my next day off completely re-reading the script so I can improve him for you guys.
Thank you so much. UGH. He's the one I've been worried about most, and now that I know what's wrong, I will be taking the time to fix him!
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I really like how you do Edgeworth's objections and submit evidence and the like. It really gives a feel for the game and thus enhances the character portrayal.
I only have one thing to say about Fai, and I hope this doesn't come across as weird or anything... but, it feels like most of his interactions are within the CLAMP cast, and I totally understand why he would have heavy interactions with them! Hell, this isn't even just him, but, it feels like sort of you guys talk to each other more then anyone else? Now I could totally be wrong too! I don't stalk everything written or anything. So... yeah I don't know.... I hope I made sense.... u.u;;;
And I love it when he and little!Fai interact, it's cute.
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With Fai, I can't say I disagree. Though, a lot of the non-CLAMP people he used to be friendly with are gone, and we've gotten SO MANY new CLAMP people that he's trying to satisfy his friends. Plus a 5 month long inter-CLAMP plot will kind of do that. I try my best to tag a lot of people with Fai, but I'll definitely try my best to consciously tag outside of the CLAMP cast.
XDD i love bbfai. Big Fai is such a mommy.
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I understand how that can happen, especially with the complex plot going on. Just sort of, pointing it out because sometimes you just don't see it when you're on the inside? No big deal really.
He is! You all do make me want to app a CLAMP character.
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Either way, I appreciate it! I don't want to be someone who only hangs with their cast; but the sudden growth and the massive plot kind of just overwhelmed poar little fai-san.
Ugh. You should. Needs moar CLAMP for epic tiems~
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What can I say, you got him spot on. He's a total hothead but still keeps that zen-like calm to him which is just so Zoro. Only thing I can say I really miss (or..y'know, might just not have noticed) is that he doesn't seem to be as focused on training and honing his skills, but that's a minor thing that could just be happening "off-screen" idk.
We need more Strawhats interaction imho. :|b
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And he's working on sparring partners and whatnot. So rest assured, it's something that will be coming up more in the future!
He also spent like nearly a month perpetually lost in the woods, when he was trying to find Northern Lights. So. 8| LMAO.
Either way, I'll be sure to make a conscious effort to mention it a bit more often! Thank you for the input bb<3
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I think my only real critique is that I notice a buttload of ellipses with Sephiroth. Whhhyyy is that? This may have changed recently, but I noticed that a lot when he started posting.
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IDK, FF+Ellipses=OTP, but I know I went overboard, orz. I've cut down on them a whole lot. I'm still feeling him out and getting into the swing of things. I need to replay the game after I move (orz the game is packed in a box somewhere hahaha). But yes, in his tag since then, he's been less... ellipses-y? It'll show through when I actually write something more than like 5 words, I guess.
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Vegeta has always been amazing--I know that with Gohan dropping, he's sort of lost his plot point, so I don't have any further comments for now except good luck with him. :O
And I haven't seen that much with Zoro yet. XD I love his interactions with Umi, and his general GD IT LUFFY, but I think he needs more time and development for me to get a better picture. :D
And I'm enjoying Edgeworth so far. XD I think I must be missing his more epic threads, or something, but his voice is coming through pretty clearly for me, too. (: I'll be sure to stalk him more.
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