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Nov 13, 2008 00:03

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evangelic November 13 2008, 07:14:50 UTC
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- Mona Lisa, onceahuman
- Nozomi Weaver, awomanstouch
- Samus Aran, chozoraised
- Larxene, thunderknives
- Raven, fearsnoevil

amatomnes
- Morrigan Aensland aensland_love
- Bad Girl averybadgirl

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evangelic November 13 2008, 08:14:00 UTC
I know that you've been told this before, but nothing has exactly changed since then.

All of your characters sound the same. I'm familiar with most of the canons on that list, and it's disarming to not be able to tell who's really who. If the icons weren't there, I wouldn't be able to distinguish them all from one another, so I think that it's something you need to work on.

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evangelic November 13 2008, 16:39:00 UTC
I have, and I've been trying to remedy this, but I guess I just haven't done a good enough job.

Is it really all of them that sound the same? Can you specify the ones it's most apparent in?

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evangelic November 13 2008, 18:43:38 UTC
It's most apparent in... well, all of them. The other anons are putting it more eloquently than me, but you are a good RPer. It's just that lately they've all seemed bland and generic. Like I said, if the icons weren't indicators of who they were, I'd have no idea who they were supposed to be.

On the other side of things, though, I appreciate that when you're active, you tag around a great deal. It's nice to see someone doing that.

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evangelic November 13 2008, 14:40:27 UTC
Second the first anon. The voices of your characters are not coming through, and I'm in both RPs. I immediately noticed a similarity in how dull they sound (and wondered if it was the same mun) - not essentially out of character, just boring and lifeless. You should work on that.

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evangelic November 13 2008, 16:39:58 UTC
Which ones need the most work?

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evangelic November 13 2008, 16:44:28 UTC
I don't know Morrigan's canon, but I don't find her voice very distinctive. Same for Mona; you also usually tag entries very late and when you do, it's just a very generalized reply. Have them say something interesting.

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evangelic November 13 2008, 18:33:50 UTC
I'm in agreement with the other anons; I've RPed with you for awhile, and I remember when your characters used to have a little bit of life in them.

Now it just seems none of them are distinct at all. They're a row of bodies and faces that look different but sound the same. Nothing about them seems very unique at all. They really give basic responses and don't seem very lifelike. When I read them, I don't have a unique voice for them in my head -- they're just so... trite.

You're not a bad RPer or a bad writer, but they're just so blah and bland. :/ Try to imagine the character's voice actor or something as you write the characters? That usually helps me.

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evangelic November 14 2008, 08:11:36 UTC
I've got a question more than anything. Why... is Nozomi doing (this)?

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evangelic November 14 2008, 08:26:48 UTC
It was something I noticed while replaying her operations in Trauma Center. Letting us know what she's thinking and such, so I thought I could incorporate that in how I handle her?

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