Concrit Post 17

[hmd_me]

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[kanapima]

discedo
Noble Heart Horse - Care Bears: cousin_founder
Marx - Kirby: maruku_soul
Slowking - Pokemon: icouldusepants(also pokedressing)
The Shredder - Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles: is_an_utrom

mayfield_rpg
Professor Oak - Pokemon: theoakmiester(also pokedressing)
Wart - Super Mario: veggiephobe
Rosalina - Super Mario: starbits_addict
Ribbon - Kirby: iheartcrystals

[kanapima]

I know this isn't crit, but your Slowking is brilliant. Your Oak is also fun to stalk on occasion. I have absolutely no complaints about any of your characters I'm familiar with.

[invisibill]

I have no crit, for I adore all your characters and love sending my two talk to them. Okay, so they haven't actually talked to Marx or Shredder yet.

But I really like the way both Noble Heart and Slowking are developing in Discedo as they face some of the nastier parts of the game.

[invisibill]

I really have no advice to offer on characterization for Noble Heart. I can't remember anything specific about his character from my carebear days. But I do like all the stress you've put on trying to make Discedo change for the better even when he's running into doubts. And I really liked his most recent conversation with Takato. Though I have to admit that that kind of philosophical conversation is one of my favorite kinds of conversations to play Takato in.

Slowking... he seems to be right on target from what I remember of that movie. And the current post has cemented his place on the list of people Danny will never stop worrying about now.