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Ugh, I feel itchy. Word of advice: Never shear goats. The hair goes everywhere. *desperately tries to rub fur off*
This is an early Wednesday sporking! Yay, sporks!
Title: Daughter of a Seven
Culprit Author's Name: The Doctor's Assisstant My Sue sense are tingling
Rating:
Full Name:
Luna "Loon"
Sola
Species:
Luna - Powered up Human
Sola - Human
Hair Color:
Luna - Not mentioned
Sola - Blonde
Eye Color:
Luna - Not mentioned
Sola - Blonde
Markings: None yet.
Possessions: Sola is rich *sighs* and Luna is...loony
Origin: Daughter area of Mary Sue Hell
Connections to Canon: Luna is the daughter of Kamiya Minoru, a.k.a. The Doctor. *headdesk*
Special Abilities: Can cut people with her nails and psychic abilities...even though Kamiya never had any psychic abilities.
Pros: I'll have to give her credit for having Miss Luna be The Doctor's daughter instead of Kurama's or Yusuke's. Most of the words are spelled right, grammar is okay, and there isn't many capitalization problems.
Cons: Unfortunately, there is a giant hole in this suethor's logic. According to Absolute Anime, Kamiya Minoru is 29 years old. I doubt a doctor would have a child at that young of an age (he was more than likely 25-26). Also, his powers aren't genetic. They were just magnified with the increase of power from the Makai. The entire story is bland and boring and the dialogue is not something anyone would say. The names are not Japanese in the slightest. Then I see all the logic that vanishes as how her mother knew where Kamiya was or that he worked for Sensui. I'm still at a loss on how anyone except our Tantei, Reikai, and the still living Seven knows. Damn Sue Logic.
Sample:
“What I have planned” Sola started “is that on the day of the dance we get there earlier then everyone else and get this up.” She mentioned over to a banner that was laying on her bed. ...yes, okay then. She moved closer brushing Sola with a finger nail. FEMSLASH!
“Ow!” Sola said. “Luna you cut me.” I'd be like, "What the hell! You cut me with your fingernail!
Luna saw a small cut on Sola’s arm but there was no way her finger nails could have done that. Sure there is. If my goat can scratch me up with his hoof, your fingernail can draw blood They were short. Then Luna felt again the feeling of being watched but it was more intense. The hell? Damn grammar
“I-I better leave…” Luna said nervously moving towards Sola’s closed bedroom door. But before she could open it the door flew open by itself. Okay, now I know Doctor couldn't open doors without touching them.
Luna knew that somehow she had done it and the accident with cutting Sola…somehow she knew that was her doing as well. Naw, it's the ghost, you moron She ran from the room, down the stairs, and out the front door. She did not stop running till she was home. Opening the front door she was about to run up the stair I wish I had one stair when her mom called her.
“Luna home so soon,” then she saw the nervous and confused look on her daughters face. “What happened?” Besides what I think did happen?
“I-I don’t know,” Luna said. “First I cut Sola with a finger nail but the cut looked like no finger nail could have done it and then…then when I was leaving the door opened by itself.” She was glad she was telling someone this. “But maybe Sola’s house is haunted. Its no big deal.” Uh, yeah it is. You ran away.
But she could see that her mother was not convinced. “Luna…like I said before you went to Sola’s there is something I need to tell her…I fear you are getting powers like those of your father.” Of course, the daughter didn't stay so she gets punsihed for not listening. Die bee-yotch!
“My…father has powers,” Luna said shocked. “What kind of team or whatever did he join?” What the hell? Why would you ask that? What does that have anything to do with having powers?
Her mother calmed her down and then said. “Have you heard about The Seven?” You know, the group that no one knows about but us?
Luna nodded. “You told me the stories, mom. I know.”
“Did you know your father is one of them?” her mom continued. *gasp*
Luna was again shocked. Her father one of the seven and the strange happenings over at Sola’s mansion. It all made sense. It does? Luna looked to her mother and said the one question on her mind. “Which of The Seven is my father?”
Her mother looked scared but she needed to tell. In a shaky voice she said her answer.
“Doctor is your father.” BUM BUM BUMMM!
This is an early Wednesday sporking! Yay, sporks!
Title: Daughter of a Seven
Culprit Author's Name: The Doctor's Assisstant My Sue sense are tingling
Rating:
Full Name:
Luna "Loon"
Sola
Species:
Luna - Powered up Human
Sola - Human
Hair Color:
Luna - Not mentioned
Sola - Blonde
Eye Color:
Luna - Not mentioned
Sola - Blonde
Markings: None yet.
Possessions: Sola is rich *sighs* and Luna is...loony
Origin: Daughter area of Mary Sue Hell
Connections to Canon: Luna is the daughter of Kamiya Minoru, a.k.a. The Doctor. *headdesk*
Special Abilities: Can cut people with her nails and psychic abilities...even though Kamiya never had any psychic abilities.
Pros: I'll have to give her credit for having Miss Luna be The Doctor's daughter instead of Kurama's or Yusuke's. Most of the words are spelled right, grammar is okay, and there isn't many capitalization problems.
Cons: Unfortunately, there is a giant hole in this suethor's logic. According to Absolute Anime, Kamiya Minoru is 29 years old. I doubt a doctor would have a child at that young of an age (he was more than likely 25-26). Also, his powers aren't genetic. They were just magnified with the increase of power from the Makai. The entire story is bland and boring and the dialogue is not something anyone would say. The names are not Japanese in the slightest. Then I see all the logic that vanishes as how her mother knew where Kamiya was or that he worked for Sensui. I'm still at a loss on how anyone except our Tantei, Reikai, and the still living Seven knows. Damn Sue Logic.
Sample:
“What I have planned” Sola started “is that on the day of the dance we get there earlier then everyone else and get this up.” She mentioned over to a banner that was laying on her bed. ...yes, okay then. She moved closer brushing Sola with a finger nail. FEMSLASH!
“Ow!” Sola said. “Luna you cut me.” I'd be like, "What the hell! You cut me with your fingernail!
Luna saw a small cut on Sola’s arm but there was no way her finger nails could have done that. Sure there is. If my goat can scratch me up with his hoof, your fingernail can draw blood They were short. Then Luna felt again the feeling of being watched but it was more intense. The hell? Damn grammar
“I-I better leave…” Luna said nervously moving towards Sola’s closed bedroom door. But before she could open it the door flew open by itself. Okay, now I know Doctor couldn't open doors without touching them.
Luna knew that somehow she had done it and the accident with cutting Sola…somehow she knew that was her doing as well. Naw, it's the ghost, you moron She ran from the room, down the stairs, and out the front door. She did not stop running till she was home. Opening the front door she was about to run up the stair I wish I had one stair when her mom called her.
“Luna home so soon,” then she saw the nervous and confused look on her daughters face. “What happened?” Besides what I think did happen?
“I-I don’t know,” Luna said. “First I cut Sola with a finger nail but the cut looked like no finger nail could have done it and then…then when I was leaving the door opened by itself.” She was glad she was telling someone this. “But maybe Sola’s house is haunted. Its no big deal.” Uh, yeah it is. You ran away.
But she could see that her mother was not convinced. “Luna…like I said before you went to Sola’s there is something I need to tell her…I fear you are getting powers like those of your father.” Of course, the daughter didn't stay so she gets punsihed for not listening. Die bee-yotch!
“My…father has powers,” Luna said shocked. “What kind of team or whatever did he join?” What the hell? Why would you ask that? What does that have anything to do with having powers?
Her mother calmed her down and then said. “Have you heard about The Seven?” You know, the group that no one knows about but us?
Luna nodded. “You told me the stories, mom. I know.”
“Did you know your father is one of them?” her mom continued. *gasp*
Luna was again shocked. Her father one of the seven and the strange happenings over at Sola’s mansion. It all made sense. It does? Luna looked to her mother and said the one question on her mind. “Which of The Seven is my father?”
Her mother looked scared but she needed to tell. In a shaky voice she said her answer.
“Doctor is your father.” BUM BUM BUMMM!