Arthur lifted his face from where it was buried in Alfred's stomach and licked his lips in a suggestive enough manner that made Alfred's cock twitch in interest; fuck if that didn't shut him up and pay attention. "Let me make it up to you, then~ Oh, and-" Arthur made his way back up Alfred's body, although a hand strayed down to open his belt and pull down the zipper (one-handed, Alfred's mind noted) and find its way inside his boxers and oh. Alfred exhaled quite loudly.
"Alfred", was breathed against his lips, and Alfred couldn't help but whimper and clutch at the other's waist and hips, at the combination of Arthur's slow, confident, very very good -oh god, this was really happening, wasn't it- strokes and the look on his face. "I never quite got over it, you know; never could-stop being in love with you. I told you, didn't I? I would never be able change such a big part of me. I knew that."
"Arthur."
"You never even came close to losing your 'chance', idiot. I'll regret boosting your ego later, but let me tell you this."
Alfred grabbed the back of Arthur's thigh for leverage, thrusting his hips helplessly into Arthur's fist, but it was so maddeningly slow, and he was so hard, if he could just-
"I", Arthur used a harder stroke to punctuate his words- "Am. Completely and utterly-"
Alfred's whole body twitched at the change in pace, and he couldn't help moaning, wrapping his other arm around Arthur's neck to drag him down for a messy kiss that involved a lot of tongue.
"Yours, you idiot. Took you bloody long to figure it out. And not even on your own, for Christ's sake."
Alfred laughed out loud, and came so hard he couldn't see straight.
NOTES; Alright, yes, that's it; this author!anon is reluctant to continue, not only because she could never really write explicit sex scenes, but also because she is afraid of dragging this on. I also never really like 'Iloveyous' in fiction for some reason, but I gathered Arthur and Alfred are the type that need to say and hear it back. For all historical references in Arthur's diary entries, you can check out every subsequent year on Wiki. the notes would be as long as the fic, otherwise. and thank you for reading, all of you jhsghj ♥♥♥♥ 8D
Oh god, you have NO IDEA what a giant grin that ending just pasted all over my face. FFFFHAHAHHALSKDJSLKJDLSJ PERFECT. PERFECT ENDING EVER. I loved Arthur going devious and taking control and totally blowing Alfred's mind and yes. A beautiful wrap to a splendid fic, and oh god I'll just uh. Be over here rereading like crazy and continuing to smile until my face hurts. ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥
(And I'll leave a tiny bit of crit after all the gushing, since I loved the fic but could see some places to be improved! Al calling Arthur 'Iggy' kind of brought me up short, since 'Iggy' is derived from the Japanese word for England, or 'Igirisu', so anyone other than Japan or possibly Greece using it is strange.
Arthur also seemed to overuse Britishisms in his speech--lots of 'bloodys' and 'wankers'--enough that this silly American kind of noticed, so in the future maybe cut back on those a bit. Some sentences/dialogue here and there were also constructed awkwardly.
But none of that managed to detract from the sheer emotional win of the piece, so I definitely have to commend you on that. You managed to capture their personalities, emotions and interaction in such a way that--I'll admit I'm normally very picky about my reading--I just didn't care about the imperfections. Great job! Please keep writing. ♥)
eeeeh, this whole comment put a smile on my face! ♥♥♥ I'm glad you liked the ending, sadfd, I was just not sure it would do to end it like this after all the angst, but I wanted to end it on a happier note; plus, I cannot really see Arthur as anything other than a hot old experienced bastard, so of course he would take control, especially their first time. As for 'Iggy'; I wanted Alfred to bastardize one of Arthur's names to annoy him, and honestly, I thought canon was safer than attempting something on my own.
Ahaha, I can't help the Britishisms, sometimes; I tend to think that way, so I don't even notice; I'll try to keep track of them in the future. I also tend to think in Greek as well (greek!anon is greek) so maybe that's why some of the sentences sounded awkward in english. My translation skills aren't the best. I'm glad you think my characterizations are okay, though! It's the hardest part to get right; the other things can be improved, but if you can't get the characters right it's..difficult.
...Oh. Oh so sweet and romantic and lovely and perfect. You have them so well done and in character and still loving and adorable and...gah. YOU HAVE MY LOVE AUTHOR!ANON.
author!anon that was so sweet and perfect and in character and just pole vaulted it's way up my list of favorite fills. I'm so glad you gave Arthur and Alfred a happy ending :)
Oh God, author!anon, this completely took my breath away - literally. How did you do that, I mean the emotions, the feeling, both so real and surreal? It's just so amazing...I have no other words to describe how I felt about it^^
AAAAH lovelovelove for you anon, for figuring it out! My sister wanted King Arthur mentioned in there somewhere, and I thought it would be strangely...well, fitting with the tone of Arthur's diary entries. Not to mention my crazy love for the arthurian legends ♥♥♥
and thank you for your kind words, sdfddf, I don't deserve that much praise but 8D
"Alfred", was breathed against his lips, and Alfred couldn't help but whimper and clutch at the other's waist and hips, at the combination of Arthur's slow, confident, very very good -oh god, this was really happening, wasn't it- strokes and the look on his face. "I never quite got over it, you know; never could-stop being in love with you. I told you, didn't I? I would never be able change such a big part of me. I knew that."
"Arthur."
"You never even came close to losing your 'chance', idiot. I'll regret boosting your ego later, but let me tell you this."
Alfred grabbed the back of Arthur's thigh for leverage, thrusting his hips helplessly into Arthur's fist, but it was so maddeningly slow, and he was so hard, if he could just-
"I", Arthur used a harder stroke to punctuate his words- "Am. Completely and utterly-"
Alfred's whole body twitched at the change in pace, and he couldn't help moaning, wrapping his other arm around Arthur's neck to drag him down for a messy kiss that involved a lot of tongue.
"Yours, you idiot. Took you bloody long to figure it out. And not even on your own, for Christ's sake."
Alfred laughed out loud, and came so hard he couldn't see straight.
NOTES; Alright, yes, that's it; this author!anon is reluctant to continue, not only because she could never really write explicit sex scenes, but also because she is afraid of dragging this on. I also never really like 'Iloveyous' in fiction for some reason, but I gathered Arthur and Alfred are the type that need to say and hear it back. For all historical references in Arthur's diary entries, you can check out every subsequent year on Wiki. the notes would be as long as the fic, otherwise. and thank you for reading, all of you jhsghj ♥♥♥♥ 8D
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(And I'll leave a tiny bit of crit after all the gushing, since I loved the fic but could see some places to be improved! Al calling Arthur 'Iggy' kind of brought me up short, since 'Iggy' is derived from the Japanese word for England, or 'Igirisu', so anyone other than Japan or possibly Greece using it is strange.
Arthur also seemed to overuse Britishisms in his speech--lots of 'bloodys' and 'wankers'--enough that this silly American kind of noticed, so in the future maybe cut back on those a bit. Some sentences/dialogue here and there were also constructed awkwardly.
But none of that managed to detract from the sheer emotional win of the piece, so I definitely have to commend you on that. You managed to capture their personalities, emotions and interaction in such a way that--I'll admit I'm normally very picky about my reading--I just didn't care about the imperfections. Great job! Please keep writing. ♥)
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Ahaha, I can't help the Britishisms, sometimes; I tend to think that way, so I don't even notice; I'll try to keep track of them in the future. I also tend to think in Greek as well (greek!anon is greek) so maybe that's why some of the sentences sounded awkward in english. My translation skills aren't the best. I'm glad you think my characterizations are okay, though! It's the hardest part to get right; the other things can be improved, but if you can't get the characters right it's..difficult.
aaaalso. you sound familiar, I think~
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And...Arthur was writing to King Arthur, yes?
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and thank you for your kind words, sdfddf, I don't deserve that much praise but 8D
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I LAUGHED. I CRIED. I LAUGHED AGAIN. SO SWEET!
I feel fantastic, thank you!
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