I am so happy now.
anonymous
September 2 2011, 23:43:38 UTC
An Italian wouldn't drink wine first thing in the morning, not even with orange juice. Mimosa is Italian, but it's something that one drinks typically just before dinner, to wet your appetite. Drinking wine in the morning is a true no-no, especially if you need to have all your wits about you like Roma does here.
I'm nitpicking this in case you decide to correct this before you deanon, because it is seriously the only thing that I didn't like in this fic. Yeah, this small, tiny, silly nitpick is the only thing. The rest, the characterization, the setting, the slow pace, the descriptive but not extra-flowery writing style, the sun drenching everything, the description of food - which is an important part of Mediterranean life! - Spain being carefree but not stupid, Romano being competent and still grumpy but kind and obviously in love, the absurdly sensual lovemaking, all those thousand small touches like the fact that they're still worried about the economic situation, or that they're at Romano's house for a change, or that they're actual people who have lives and a job beside each other...That, I loved every second of that.
Oh, wait, fettuccine cook way fast, like 4 or 5 minutes tops, spaghetti or even better penne would work better there. Here, that's it. The only other wrong thing. The rest is perfect.
Damn, I envy those two so much. Also, what book is that they're reading? I totally should know, shouldn't I?
A!A is not worthy
anonymous
September 3 2011, 01:07:25 UTC
o///o oh goodness, thank you kind anon for your comment! Trust me, I fully appreciate the crits. I not only a) have family in Italy/am Italian, Ive b) been to Italy. (There was a day where we had wine with every meal, and it was a Saturday. That's where it came from!) but I will remember that. As for the pasta... eh I just didn't think about timing very well.
But I'm really glad you liked it! I tried to reach outside the box with them, I really feel like Romano is a very passionate person and, if he were with someone it's because he really loves them and wouldn't be able to help showing how much he loves his partner. Y'know? Fics where it's just abuse abuse abuse make me sad, because they're such a lovely couple. Again, thank you so much!!!
Oh, and er
anonymous
September 3 2011, 01:56:54 UTC
The book they're reading isn't real, I just made it up. When I was writing this part I was listening to a song called "Jar of Hearts" and that's what I based the random short story on. :D
I'm nitpicking this in case you decide to correct this before you deanon, because it is seriously the only thing that I didn't like in this fic. Yeah, this small, tiny, silly nitpick is the only thing. The rest, the characterization, the setting, the slow pace, the descriptive but not extra-flowery writing style, the sun drenching everything, the description of food - which is an important part of Mediterranean life! - Spain being carefree but not stupid, Romano being competent and still grumpy but kind and obviously in love, the absurdly sensual lovemaking, all those thousand small touches like the fact that they're still worried about the economic situation, or that they're at Romano's house for a change, or that they're actual people who have lives and a job beside each other...That, I loved every second of that.
Oh, wait, fettuccine cook way fast, like 4 or 5 minutes tops, spaghetti or even better penne would work better there. Here, that's it. The only other wrong thing. The rest is perfect.
Damn, I envy those two so much. Also, what book is that they're reading? I totally should know, shouldn't I?
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But I'm really glad you liked it! I tried to reach outside the box with them, I really feel like Romano is a very passionate person and, if he were with someone it's because he really loves them and wouldn't be able to help showing how much he loves his partner. Y'know? Fics where it's just abuse abuse abuse make me sad, because they're such a lovely couple. Again, thank you so much!!!
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