I don't think America is OOC. The only OOC bit was the morning after. Because, well, when drunk, people tend to have all kinds of different personalities, so I can totally see this happening.
On the other hand, the way America apologised, and the way France reacted to the whole situation, since the part where America told him that he's 'an easy lay', or something among these lines, was VERY OOC, and kind of angered me, because I don't think France will take that shit from anyone, not without saying a thing. Maybe if he tried to resist, and America raped him forcefully.
Also, I don't think America would be forgiven that easily. France isn't like that-- He's a drama queen, and he's smart, and he lost his trust in America. I can't see anyone other than Canada (Maybe not even Canada) acting that way.
It was all angsty and nice, but you should really consider the way the characters react to some of the situations.
Sorry if my words hurt you in any way, anon!author. Don't give up on writing-- Just try again, until you get better. That's what I do with my drawings, even when they turn out horrible.
I actually really appreciate the criticism. I'm slightly new to Hetalia fandom, thus characterization FAIL :P I'm going to work on it a lot more. Not my finest piece of work buuuuuut I'm getting there :) I agree with the France not taking shit thing, btw. If I could rewrite and make it so, I totally would. (Hmmm, maybe I should? nahh.) Thank you for the critiquing, though :D
I don't think America is OOC. The only OOC bit was the morning after. Because, well, when drunk, people tend to have all kinds of different personalities, so I can totally see this happening.
On the other hand, the way America apologised, and the way France reacted to the whole situation, since the part where America told him that he's 'an easy lay', or something among these lines, was VERY OOC, and kind of angered me, because I don't think France will take that shit from anyone, not without saying a thing. Maybe if he tried to resist, and America raped him forcefully.
Also, I don't think America would be forgiven that easily. France isn't like that-- He's a drama queen, and he's smart, and he lost his trust in America. I can't see anyone other than Canada (Maybe not even Canada) acting that way.
It was all angsty and nice, but you should really consider the way the characters react to some of the situations.
Sorry if my words hurt you in any way, anon!author. Don't give up on writing-- Just try again, until you get better. That's what I do with my drawings, even when they turn out horrible.
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I actually really appreciate the criticism. I'm slightly new to Hetalia fandom, thus characterization FAIL :P I'm going to work on it a lot more. Not my finest piece of work buuuuuut I'm getting there :) I agree with the France not taking shit thing, btw. If I could rewrite and make it so, I totally would. (Hmmm, maybe I should? nahh.) Thank you for the critiquing, though :D
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