Wait, What? (6/6) - with SUPER ULTRA CLICHÉ ENDING for your pleasures
anonymous
January 6 2011, 18:48:53 UTC
America could feel his heartbeat pounding in his ears and stared off into the distance. He had two choices. He could either go to the meeting, hand over the paper and pray that he wouldn’t be forced to acknowledge England’s existence in any way, or he could find the nearest closet and hide in it forever.
Somehow, against everything his mind was screaming at him, he chose the former - even knowing that he could never look his ally in the face again, and that he would have to sit there for hours knowing that England’s come was still inside him.
He just had to wait for his feet to unglue themselves from the ground.
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In the back of an unmarked van parked inconspicuously across the street, three figures huddled around a glowing monitor. A set of speakers crackled softly.
“Glad I entertain you so much, mister Judgmental Asshole,” said the man on the screen, just before the lights went out.
After a long stretch of silence, Hungary turned to her companions. France was grinning like a maniac, and Japan was shielding his face, leaving just enough space to peek between his fingers.
The plan had not gone exactly as they had anticipated.
“So…that was weird,” she said, interrupting the quiet.
France grunted indifferently, still smirking at the screen. Japan didn’t say anything.
“At least it worked. Kind of.”
France grunted appreciatively, still smirking at the screen. Japan didn’t say anything.
She leaned forward and turned off the central recording device. A blissful grin spread across her face as she watching the red light blink and fade out. Oh, the wonders of technology.
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anonymous
January 6 2011, 21:25:10 UTC
That was both strangely and strangely hot; I knew the cliche ending was coming, but that doesn't make it bad! Heh, and their bemused reactions were freaking hilarious. <3<3<3 And France's crazed grinning? LOL
And I'll be the one saying: epilogue/sequel/moar pls!
anonymous
January 6 2011, 22:53:04 UTC
Their bickering was spot on, and it felt truly strange and still funny and sexy the way they went through the motions of sex, and bloody hot sex at that.
Would love to read something more!! Oh goodness the following days would be so awkward, especially for America I believe. I find it oddly satisfying that the one to be on the receiving end was Alfred precisely. Because he seemed to have the upper-hand with all his witty comebacks, but still is the one who allowed England to take him *drools a bit*
SO MOAR!!! Epilogue with And then What? pls!! Serves the silly boys right to belately realize what good chemistry they have (at least in the bedroom LOL) If this would take them to start love-hate dates I wound't complain XDDDD
Awesome! ::G:: I don't know what's better; their fantastic bickering, or the fact that they were bickering about the letter "u" and so on while having mindblowing sex. Oh, maybe it's that America yells "the wrong side of the road" during his climax. Or the realization, which was perfecto. The cliche ending included all the usual suspects. Right on the money, anon!
Very cleverly done! Anon, I'm grinning from ear to ear. And, er, it was hot, too. Thank you! SO MUCH, SERIOUSLY.
Re: Wait, What? (6/6) - with SUPER ULTRA CLICHÉ ENDING for your pleasures
anonymous
January 8 2011, 22:58:04 UTC
That was strangely erotic. Somehow, the fact that they didn't want this or even acknoelwedged it made it hotter, and I'm very glad the cliched ending wasn't what I, at first, thought: that they would magically realise their attraction and get together. I think you have something really good going on, and I second the sequel request; a lot can be done with these two after this happened against their wills and for the first time.
MORE MORE WRITE MOREEEE!!
anonymous
January 12 2011, 04:54:54 UTC
The masses have spoken!!! (like the 5 commenters but HEY WE LOVE THIS SO IT HAS TO COUNT!!)
Top!England hell yes, that was damn hot!!
Write more pretty please!! They've just GOT TO TALK IT OUT!! Oh gosh England would be so damn embarrassed instead of being smug, I can see it so perfectly, and then they would start suspecting at least of France LOL LOL
Holy shit, this is the funniest non-crack fanfiction I've ever read in my life. I loved every single hilarious second of it. The in-fic invoke of PWP and narrative acknowledgement of it is the best thing ever.
And by god if I go back and read ONLY the dialogue it plays out like just another one of their cute arguments and that is so many levels of AWESOME.
Bookmarked forever, recommended to as many Hetalia friends as I have (though it's a pathetically small number but that's not my fault) and probably put into the Pimp List if it's not there already.
Holy mother of god I've never laughed so loudly while reading PWP.
He had two choices. He could either go to the meeting, hand over the paper and pray that he wouldn’t be forced to acknowledge England’s existence in any way, or he could find the nearest closet and hide in it forever.
Somehow, against everything his mind was screaming at him, he chose the former - even knowing that he could never look his ally in the face again, and that he would have to sit there for hours knowing that England’s come was still inside him.
He just had to wait for his feet to unglue themselves from the ground.
-----
In the back of an unmarked van parked inconspicuously across the street, three figures huddled around a glowing monitor. A set of speakers crackled softly.
“Glad I entertain you so much, mister Judgmental Asshole,” said the man on the screen, just before the lights went out.
After a long stretch of silence, Hungary turned to her companions. France was grinning like a maniac, and Japan was shielding his face, leaving just enough space to peek between his fingers.
The plan had not gone exactly as they had anticipated.
“So…that was weird,” she said, interrupting the quiet.
France grunted indifferently, still smirking at the screen.
Japan didn’t say anything.
“At least it worked. Kind of.”
France grunted appreciatively, still smirking at the screen.
Japan didn’t say anything.
She leaned forward and turned off the central recording device. A blissful grin spread across her face as she watching the red light blink and fade out.
Oh, the wonders of technology.
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Would love to read something more!! Oh goodness the following days would be so awkward, especially for America I believe. I find it oddly satisfying that the one to be on the receiving end was Alfred precisely. Because he seemed to have the upper-hand with all his witty comebacks, but still is the one who allowed England to take him *drools a bit*
SO MOAR!!! Epilogue with And then What? pls!! Serves the silly boys right to belately realize what good chemistry they have (at least in the bedroom LOL) If this would take them to start love-hate dates I wound't complain XDDDD
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Very cleverly done! Anon, I'm grinning from ear to ear. And, er, it was hot, too. Thank you! SO MUCH, SERIOUSLY.
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Oh my god, I love America's orgasm line XDDD
I love how you have them having ridiculously hot sex while having a totally ordinary argument XDD
Terrific, A+, quality entertainment 8DDDDDDD
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AND HOLY SHIT, FUCK YEAH TOP!ENGLAND <3<3<3<3<3
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Top!England hell yes, that was damn hot!!
Write more pretty please!! They've just GOT TO TALK IT OUT!! Oh gosh England would be so damn embarrassed instead of being smug, I can see it so perfectly, and then they would start suspecting at least of France LOL LOL
Please come back dear writer!anon!!!!!
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*glimmer of hope*
I absolutely adored this, there's little else to say. England topping, snarky, snappy arguments between hot sex... utterly marvelous.
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And by god if I go back and read ONLY the dialogue it plays out like just another one of their cute arguments and that is so many levels of AWESOME.
Bookmarked forever, recommended to as many Hetalia friends as I have (though it's a pathetically small number but that's not my fault) and probably put into the Pimp List if it's not there already.
Holy mother of god I've never laughed so loudly while reading PWP.
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I wrote the dialogue separately to make it feel disjointed. It was bizarre putting everything together, but now I'm glad I did it that way. :D
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