Beautiful World 5a/?
anonymous
November 2 2010, 06:43:59 UTC
“Are ye deaf?!” Sean thunders, glaring furiously at her and the burning heat in his eyes unfreeze her. “I said run yer stupid bimbo bitch!”
Alice runs.
She twists her ankle on her way out the door and she feels someone grab her from behind. She stabs them in the stomach without even looking at them, her hands itching to hurt someone as much as she’s hurting, anyone. An eye for an eye, that’s how her brothers had raised her. Then she’s running. She runs and she runs and she runs until she feels her feet bleed and blister and there are cuts on her face and something wet running down her cheeks and her brothers’ names are stuck in her throat and-
“Woah there!”
-and then she’s falling. Her face is wet, her hands bloody. When two strong, large hands grab her around the waist and pull her up to her feet, she snarls at them, striking at them with her knife. The other curses, low and surprised. Still, the hands on her hips are relentless.
Alice resorts to her fists when her knife is taken from her, then her legs when the man-clearly a man, tall and big, as strong as the amber-eyed man and she feels her skin crawl-envelopes her in his arms, pushing her back against his chest.
“Jesus, you’re a mean one aren’t ya?” the man laughs, panting from the struggle, his breath hot on the back of her neck. “Got me good in the stomach, too.”
He ends up having to shove her down on the ground to stop her from kicking him. They roll around in the dirt, Alice scratching at his face in an attempt to gouge out of his eyeballs, fighting like wildcat until she runs out of steam. Her anger is so much that she feels her eyes fill with hot tears again.
Blurry as her sight is, she is blinded by spun gold and the prettiest blue she’s ever seen.
She also sees the man smile, and that frightens her more than anything else.
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Orz orz, I hope the OP likes. Sorry about any mistakes, it's two in the morning over here.
I am in love anon. Two fills appear in the space of a day and both are amazing! You guys rock, seriously :D
Now this one, oh this one I adore it. The complete build up from the start that tells of desperation and the sorry-state the world is in. Most of all, I think I came out of this adoring Alice's brothers most, I love seeing the UK!sibs written as actually caring about each other and here it was portrayed so heartbreakingly, I really hope Rome didn't kill them :x (and the mention of an older sister... Ireland? ouch! D: )
Poor fem!UK, hopfully America will be um... kind? ysefgus *waits so eagerly for next part*
Re: Beautiful World 5a/?
anonymous
November 2 2010, 17:40:19 UTC
You know what this setting reminds me of OP? The Fallout game series, with the long ago nuclear war and mutated animals and lack of safe water, which is awesome. This promises to be very interesting :]
Re: Beautiful World 5a/?
anonymous
November 4 2010, 20:28:42 UTC
OMGGG
I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE the fill sooo much!!!! From UK sibs sticking to each other, to creepy, creepy Rome who can tell just with a glance that arthur is actually alice, the description of the two women/slaves (bowing their heads, implying that they're not of the same level), alice's frantic, panicked escape. When you so much as wrote 'the man laughs', i kinda guessed it's alfred. then the blue eyes gave it away. And the last phrase made me inhale sharply and dread.
The descriptions and the tone are just right.
I would very much hope for a semi-happy ending. That alfred ended up deciding to keep her for himself (or only share with matt?) and not sold her to a life of being pregnant with strangers' children before losing the babies straight after she gave birth. losing her womb due to miscarriage may probably be the best ending there is...she could still be alive and not have to go through so much of such pain...
i'm being morbid. the point is...i love this fill so much!! Awaiting updates faithfully!
Alice runs.
She twists her ankle on her way out the door and she feels someone grab her from behind. She stabs them in the stomach without even looking at them, her hands itching to hurt someone as much as she’s hurting, anyone. An eye for an eye, that’s how her brothers had raised her. Then she’s running. She runs and she runs and she runs until she feels her feet bleed and blister and there are cuts on her face and something wet running down her cheeks and her brothers’ names are stuck in her throat and-
“Woah there!”
-and then she’s falling. Her face is wet, her hands bloody. When two strong, large hands grab her around the waist and pull her up to her feet, she snarls at them, striking at them with her knife. The other curses, low and surprised. Still, the hands on her hips are relentless.
Alice resorts to her fists when her knife is taken from her, then her legs when the man-clearly a man, tall and big, as strong as the amber-eyed man and she feels her skin crawl-envelopes her in his arms, pushing her back against his chest.
“Jesus, you’re a mean one aren’t ya?” the man laughs, panting from the struggle, his breath hot on the back of her neck. “Got me good in the stomach, too.”
He ends up having to shove her down on the ground to stop her from kicking him. They roll around in the dirt, Alice scratching at his face in an attempt to gouge out of his eyeballs, fighting like wildcat until she runs out of steam. Her anger is so much that she feels her eyes fill with hot tears again.
Blurry as her sight is, she is blinded by spun gold and the prettiest blue she’s ever seen.
She also sees the man smile, and that frightens her more than anything else.
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Orz orz, I hope the OP likes. Sorry about any mistakes, it's two in the morning over here.
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Now this one, oh this one I adore it. The complete build up from the start that tells of desperation and the sorry-state the world is in. Most of all, I think I came out of this adoring Alice's brothers most, I love seeing the UK!sibs written as actually caring about each other and here it was portrayed so heartbreakingly, I really hope Rome didn't kill them :x (and the mention of an older sister... Ireland? ouch! D: )
Poor fem!UK, hopfully America will be um... kind? ysefgus *waits so eagerly for next part*
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I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE the fill sooo much!!!! From UK sibs sticking to each other, to creepy, creepy Rome who can tell just with a glance that arthur is actually alice, the description of the two women/slaves (bowing their heads, implying that they're not of the same level), alice's frantic, panicked escape. When you so much as wrote 'the man laughs', i kinda guessed it's alfred. then the blue eyes gave it away. And the last phrase made me inhale sharply and dread.
The descriptions and the tone are just right.
I would very much hope for a semi-happy ending. That alfred ended up deciding to keep her for himself (or only share with matt?) and not sold her to a life of being pregnant with strangers' children before losing the babies straight after she gave birth. losing her womb due to miscarriage may probably be the best ending there is...she could still be alive and not have to go through so much of such pain...
i'm being morbid. the point is...i love this fill so much!! Awaiting updates faithfully!
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to be honest i want to see her get through this forced pregnancy
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