Needles (2b)
anonymous
October 13 2010, 21:08:09 UTC
“S-Suck it!” The other demanded, overwhelmed, one hand vainly trying to hold onto the sofa's chocolate-stained side and the other clutching the table leg with incredible force. His hips jerked slightly as Arthur breathed over the cooling chocolate, not planning to let it solidify. That wouldn't be fun. He nipped playfully at the other's balls before complying, pulling the chocolate off with aggressive suction before licking it like a greedy child. His eyelids fluttered, oblivious to the howling encouragements Alfred gave him, focusing solely on the large, hot head in his mouth, sweet and bitter and strong, pulsing against his tongue, holding back all of that lovely come. He used a hand to blindly scoop for more chocolate, smearing it across the other's cock, letting go of the tip to lap it off, catching the drips and groupings as they slid down, occasionally giving in and giving the head a moment of attention. Arthur allowed the precome and chocolate to fall on his face, getting in his eyelashes and the tips of his hair, making loud, obscene noises with every lick of the large dick. “F-Fuck!” He was almost too late, a spurt of come landing on his cheek as he swallowed the cock again, looking up at Alfred, dirtied with chocolate and the other's release as the erection gave out into his mouth. Alfred, unable to control his hips, bucked up into the other's mouth, making Arthur gag, pulling back to catch his breath and only managing to get more of the semen on his face. There were a few minutes during which they sat in silence, both sticky and soiled. The Englishman gave Alfred a naughty look. “I'm not quite finished yet.” The larger blonde groaned. “But I'm tired!” “Don't worry, pet, you won't do much.”
Re: Needles (2b)
anonymous
October 14 2010, 04:24:10 UTC
Author!Anon, I really enjoy your fill but maybe you can space the paragraphs? It's hard to read when it looks like a block of text. I'm suggesting this as someone who enjoys your writing and would like to enjoy it even more.
AuthorAnon on the run!
anonymous
October 14 2010, 10:35:58 UTC
Sure thing; I'm not used to styling with these screen-wide paragraphs in mind. On Word, it looks a lot easier to read. I'll be sure to double-space between paragraphs next time. Thank you!
Re: Needles (2b)
anonymous
October 15 2010, 09:15:16 UTC
I suggest putting spaces between them:
The larger blonde groaned
"Dont worry.."
etc
Besides that this was hot and it seems that although Arthur is the one servicing he is still in control! heheh at this rate Arthur will be the one to Dp Alfred (Perhaps with dildos though so he can still suck him off?) and then ride him.
suggestions!anon
anonymous
October 15 2010, 18:31:22 UTC
Wow! I'll...have to try that at some point *hides away*
That was really really hot, author anon. I like how lighthearted it started, and you made the transition really smooth into sexy and a little desperate. Like another reviewer said, I like how deviously you convey that Arthur's still in charge, lol (and I also like when little traits of the characters show through little things, like Arthur's anal retentive personality cutting the pearsXD). But I have to confess that Alfred being unable to control his bucking when he came made me damned hot, this anon has a strong forceful blowjob kink
I'm glad you liked my suggestions, and in case you don't look above to my reply to your replyXD...post this to the Fills Page!
He used a hand to blindly scoop for more chocolate, smearing it across the other's cock, letting go of the tip to lap it off, catching the drips and groupings as they slid down, occasionally giving in and giving the head a moment of attention. Arthur allowed the precome and chocolate to fall on his face, getting in his eyelashes and the tips of his hair, making loud, obscene noises with every lick of the large dick. “F-Fuck!”
He was almost too late, a spurt of come landing on his cheek as he swallowed the cock again, looking up at Alfred, dirtied with chocolate and the other's release as the erection gave out into his mouth. Alfred, unable to control his hips, bucked up into the other's mouth, making Arthur gag, pulling back to catch his breath and only managing to get more of the semen on his face. There were a few minutes during which they sat in silence, both sticky and soiled. The Englishman gave Alfred a naughty look. “I'm not quite finished yet.”
The larger blonde groaned. “But I'm tired!”
“Don't worry, pet, you won't do much.”
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The larger blonde groaned
"Dont worry.."
etc
Besides that this was hot and it seems that although Arthur is the one servicing he is still in control! heheh at this rate Arthur will be the one to Dp Alfred (Perhaps with dildos though so he can still suck him off?) and then ride him.
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That was really really hot, author anon. I like how lighthearted it started, and you made the transition really smooth into sexy and a little desperate. Like another reviewer said, I like how deviously you convey that Arthur's still in charge, lol (and I also like when little traits of the characters show through little things, like Arthur's anal retentive personality cutting the pearsXD). But I have to confess that Alfred being unable to control his bucking when he came made me damned hot, this anon has a strong forceful blowjob kink
I'm glad you liked my suggestions, and in case you don't look above to my reply to your replyXD...post this to the Fills Page!
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THANK YOU! <333
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