Wild Fantasies 5/6
anonymous
September 2 2010, 00:12:30 UTC
As both reached their climaxes, Francis felt like their cries were music to his ears… and the picture ‘painted’ before him was just as lovely - His two friends, coated in sweat, semen, and saliva, and panting like dogs in a sauna, after their love session. The albino felt his body stiffen and the curve of his back arch more as he let out one last cry of pleasure, before making a mess on the table. Soon after, closed his eyes and felt Antonio spill his seed within him as well, and just stay still for a moment. Antonio’s relaxed and overly satisfied face pointed towards the ceiling as he stood there, before letting out a long sigh and pulled out of Gilbert. The two kissed for the last time, just before Francis closed his eyes for a moment, satisfied himself.
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So as the French teenager got back to reality, he didn’t realize that the very friends he was fantasizing about where standing right in front of him… inside one of the boy’s bathrooms. Francis almost jumped out of his seat in surprise, and a little bit embarrassed… they caught him, no, cornered him. Thinking dirty thoughts about them. And all the blonde could do was smile meekly about it, despite the odd looks he was getting. They caught him, but it probably wouldn’t be the first time they walked in on him during a ‘happy moment’ by himself. Though Francis knew that they would never let him live this down. Ever.
“Well now…” Antonio began, rubbing the back of his head, before the German next to him blurted for him.
“You sick, sick puppy.” Gilbert noted, giving his friend a slightly creeped out look, and yet he didn’t try to punch his French friend in the arm to let him know how much he thought so. But Antonio shook his head a little, backing up as Francis buckled his belt again after going pink in the face, as if it wasn’t already.
“Heh, eh… sorry guys.” The blonde spoke softly, feeling a little bit like running out of the bathroom, but then that would mean giving up! Besides, what was he apologizing for? He did nothing wrong, and if they would understand the feelings he had for them, as more than just friends… they’re bound to understand, right? … Right?
“So uh… She must have been really, really gorgeous then. For you to skip out on studying and homework, as well as hanging out with us, Francis.” The clueless Spanish teen joked, causing the boy next to him facepalm in his honor.
“You idiot, he wasn’t thinking about a woman… if you were paying attention, he spoke your name. … And mine too.” Gilbert corrected his friend, his ruby eyes leering at Francis, who just chuckled nervously, already knowing that the German was upset about all of this.
“Oooohhh… Well then, that makes everything different.” The brunette replied, crossing his arms casually. At least one of the two appeared to be pretty lax about it all, then the next thing he said made Gilbert want to slap him upside the head.
“Then why didn’t you just invite us with, ya know?”
Wild Fantasies 6/6
anonymous
September 2 2010, 00:15:45 UTC
“Tony, really? Really?” Antonio shrugs and smirks at Gilbert, who was still the only one really squicked about what kinds of things that were going on in their blushing French friend’s head.
“Why not? Come on… This is Francis we’re talking about.” The brunette noted, giving a light hearted laugh. Francis stood up straight and gave Antonio a sly look in return. “And what would you mean by that?” The blonde asked, watching the disturbed German teen roll his eyes, and raise his hands in the air, before he began to walk out of the bathroom.
“That it’s just typically you, player.” Antonio answered as he followed Gilbert out the door. But before moving out into the hallway, the Spanish student turned his head again, so that he could get a glimpse of Francis still standing there.
“… It’s going to take a little while for Gilbert.” And then the brunette left the room without another word, winking at his friend. Now Francis just stood there for a moment, trying to understand what the hell just happened, was... was Antonio messing with him, maybe as revenge? Or… was he really trying to flirt with him, encouraging him to ‘hang’ with him and Gilbert in a way friends shouldn’t? But at the moment, Francis was more concerned about getting them to forgive his dirty little mind, especially the albino.
“Hey, wait!” He called after them, swinging the bathroom door open and chasing down his two friends in hopes to clear up all the confusion.
… And hope that Antonio will be true to his word.
LE FIN
~~~~~~~ So, what did you all think? Any good? This isn't the first time I wrote a fic, but I did this fill all today, and I tried hard to finish it... for knowing me I would have not otherwise. Now... Onto my drawings! I'm still in the mood for some art. If I finish it (and not destroy it like I do almost all other drawings as of recent) I will post it here, as a kind of 'omake' for this small fill.
Re: Wild Fantasies 6/6
anonymous
September 2 2010, 02:13:20 UTC
This was very high on the sexiness scale. Highly enjoyable.
But I was wondering, do you mind some constructive crit to help some already awesome writing get even awesomer? I understand if you'd rather not, though.
Re: Wild Fantasies 6/6
anonymous
September 2 2010, 03:48:08 UTC
No problem. Now I'm gonna preface this with saying that some writers have their own style, so my nitpick may not be something you will change. Again, your writing is quite nice already, and I hate to sound like I'm trashing it, but it's just a suggestion for the future.
I notice you use a lot of epithets based on hair color (blonde, brunette, albino) in your fic, and for many people, it can distract from an otherwise fantastic fic. For one thing, Prussia's hair color kinda changes from silver to white to ashy gray-blond, so describing him solely by his hair color is not very enlightening.
I honestly think your writing is descriptive and accurate enough that you don't have to use that many epithets, especially those as "newbie" sounding as blond, brunette, albino. There are so many other ways to describe a character without referring to their hair color, which can change anyway. I try to use epithets only once every couple of paragraphs, if at all, and instead use dialogue or action to signify who I'm talking about. I write quite a few Bad Trio fics myself, and I know it can be hairy trying to differentiate between two guys, much less three, but I think you can do it!
Re: Wild Fantasies 6/6
anonymous
September 2 2010, 04:06:13 UTC
Ah, I have noticed that I've been using those three words a lot, but I really didn't have any clue on how to describe them differently, so that people know who I'm talking about.
Thank you very much for all that. It'll definitely help me in the future. :3
Re: Wild Fantasies 6/6
anonymous
September 2 2010, 14:04:56 UTC
not op LOVED THIS so so so much. Spain/Prussia is one of her otps and this totally HOT fill is just what she needed. And I can't wait for the art fill too *q* I hope you will writw/draw more of them in the future, this was flaming sexy.
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So as the French teenager got back to reality, he didn’t realize that the very friends he was fantasizing about where standing right in front of him… inside one of the boy’s bathrooms. Francis almost jumped out of his seat in surprise, and a little bit embarrassed… they caught him, no, cornered him. Thinking dirty thoughts about them. And all the blonde could do was smile meekly about it, despite the odd looks he was getting. They caught him, but it probably wouldn’t be the first time they walked in on him during a ‘happy moment’ by himself. Though Francis knew that they would never let him live this down. Ever.
“Well now…” Antonio began, rubbing the back of his head, before the German next to him blurted for him.
“You sick, sick puppy.” Gilbert noted, giving his friend a slightly creeped out look, and yet he didn’t try to punch his French friend in the arm to let him know how much he thought so. But Antonio shook his head a little, backing up as Francis buckled his belt again after going pink in the face, as if it wasn’t already.
“Heh, eh… sorry guys.” The blonde spoke softly, feeling a little bit like running out of the bathroom, but then that would mean giving up! Besides, what was he apologizing for? He did nothing wrong, and if they would understand the feelings he had for them, as more than just friends… they’re bound to understand, right? … Right?
“So uh… She must have been really, really gorgeous then. For you to skip out on studying and homework, as well as hanging out with us, Francis.” The clueless Spanish teen joked, causing the boy next to him facepalm in his honor.
“You idiot, he wasn’t thinking about a woman… if you were paying attention, he spoke your name. … And mine too.” Gilbert corrected his friend, his ruby eyes leering at Francis, who just chuckled nervously, already knowing that the German was upset about all of this.
“Oooohhh… Well then, that makes everything different.” The brunette replied, crossing his arms casually. At least one of the two appeared to be pretty lax about it all, then the next thing he said made Gilbert want to slap him upside the head.
“Then why didn’t you just invite us with, ya know?”
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“Why not? Come on… This is Francis we’re talking about.” The brunette noted, giving a light hearted laugh. Francis stood up straight and gave Antonio a sly look in return.
“And what would you mean by that?” The blonde asked, watching the disturbed German teen roll his eyes, and raise his hands in the air, before he began to walk out of the bathroom.
“That it’s just typically you, player.” Antonio answered as he followed Gilbert out the door. But before moving out into the hallway, the Spanish student turned his head again, so that he could get a glimpse of Francis still standing there.
“… It’s going to take a little while for Gilbert.” And then the brunette left the room without another word, winking at his friend. Now Francis just stood there for a moment, trying to understand what the hell just happened, was... was Antonio messing with him, maybe as revenge? Or… was he really trying to flirt with him, encouraging him to ‘hang’ with him and Gilbert in a way friends shouldn’t? But at the moment, Francis was more concerned about getting them to forgive his dirty little mind, especially the albino.
“Hey, wait!” He called after them, swinging the bathroom door open and chasing down his two friends in hopes to clear up all the confusion.
… And hope that Antonio will be true to his word.
LE FIN
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So, what did you all think? Any good? This isn't the first time I wrote a fic, but I did this fill all today, and I tried hard to finish it... for knowing me I would have not otherwise. Now... Onto my drawings! I'm still in the mood for some art. If I finish it (and not destroy it like I do almost all other drawings as of recent) I will post it here, as a kind of 'omake' for this small fill.
Hope you all enjoyed it! Especially you, OP.
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YOU, AUTHORNON, WIN THE INTERNET. <3
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But I was wondering, do you mind some constructive crit to help some already awesome writing get even awesomer? I understand if you'd rather not, though.
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I notice you use a lot of epithets based on hair color (blonde, brunette, albino) in your fic, and for many people, it can distract from an otherwise fantastic fic. For one thing, Prussia's hair color kinda changes from silver to white to ashy gray-blond, so describing him solely by his hair color is not very enlightening.
I honestly think your writing is descriptive and accurate enough that you don't have to use that many epithets, especially those as "newbie" sounding as blond, brunette, albino. There are so many other ways to describe a character without referring to their hair color, which can change anyway. I try to use epithets only once every couple of paragraphs, if at all, and instead use dialogue or action to signify who I'm talking about. I write quite a few Bad Trio fics myself, and I know it can be hairy trying to differentiate between two guys, much less three, but I think you can do it!
I'm gonna refer you to a discussion thread here about epithets, hopefully it can give you some help.
http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/11073.html?thread=49374273#t49374273
Once again, excellent job, I love reading great Bad Trio fics and this one is no exception.
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Thank you very much for all that. It'll definitely help me in the future. :3
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Thank you <333
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I wouldn't mind fanart of this either if you have the time. But even without that it was great and thank you again for filling! <3
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