Re: Law [2e/2] [end]
anonymous
August 28 2010, 06:39:08 UTC
NOT OP says this::
How dare you apologize for such a a...an incredible fill it was so great I'm not ashamed to say that it left me a bit breathless. The drama was just right and the characterizations...even with the characters so incredible different their (at least I did not) not viewed as OOC because their traits were still there and you stayed true to the Au AND the canon. America needs approval and went mad without others (he is a very sociable person even if he isn't well liked). You fit him perfectly and how he most likely would have acted if he were a demon. A sign of a good writer is staying true to canon but being able to shape that character into who they /would/ be if in a certain universe where there not for example a super power who is supposed to be a hero and anything but evil (even though he can totally be poor hero sighs).
I think the reason evil 'triumphed' here was because of the utter loneliness he discovered he'd be feeling throughout his eternal life and the resentment he felt towards Arthur...and that corrupted love of course. Alfred was evil and these things just tipped him over the edge...am I wrong on this??? Please do tell!
Omake: I wouldn't say make a omg flllluffff!! Omake (unless its during when he was a kid still in B!Angel's care since I have a feeling that at least some of his actions were not completely demonic) because it would sorta ruin this...I think...it may take away something out of it...but I would definitely adore more added to this because it was such a wonderful fill and although the ending was indeed appropriate it...seemed like there's just more and I would love to see what that more is...after all Arthur basically has to live with this demon he raised who nearly kill him for the rest of eternity or runaway, be lonely, and most likely get tracked down throughout the world (I doubt Al would kill the only companion he'll ever have...unless a certain French men adopts someone...god now I'm thinking about incubus!France and who the hell Prussia would be what w his already red eyesDXXX)
Im very very very happy this wasn't fluff. This story wasn't meant to be short and sweet, it was meant to pack more punch and 'whoosh' then that which it did and was very
Also I could see the 'corruption' Al talked about leaking through at the end. They both left such deep marks on one another ;A;
So are you making an omake?? Or feeling that other demon/angel thing I saw floating around here? And did you have other stories if so pllllease (if you want of course ! :) link me to your wonderful fills filled with wonderfulness??
aquance incubus, lol captcha niiiice it agrees with me...wait aquance...acquaintance?? O.o!! >)
Re: Law [2e/2] [end]
anonymous
August 28 2010, 07:09:54 UTC
Oh man, I love answering questions about themes and shit :D
First off, thanks for the comment! I'm glad you enjoyed, and the bit about characteriation really perked me up despite how fucking tired I am, lol (2:55 am where I am right now).
You also asked about how evil "triumphed", and I'll try to get you the answer you want.
Demons, in this fic, are very instinctual, as you could (hopefully) tell from the context in the beginning. Alfred's instincts were knocked around a bit from his upbringing, which should have been explained. I suppose how I explained this was a lot about instincts, and how difficult they are to suppress. Demons will always have evil within them, just like how the angels will have good in them. Arthur tried his damndest to raise Alfred as good as could be, but the evil couldn't go away. If you know anything about Ecology, Environment, stuff like that, you could take a look at "Energy". A law of energy states that it can not be created, and it can not be destroyed. Transform that energy into the "good" and "bad" in the angels and demons, and it brings up the idea that the good and evil can never disappear (can not be destroyed), and that it will always be there. The angel or demon may supress it, but it never leaves them completely. When I wrote it, I honestly believed that the evil would always be there. It would not be suppressed for the duration of his life. However, because of his conflicted upbringing, he lost control earlier than he would have with other demons, and as a result, almost killed his guardian.
And at that point in time, he was left to essentially fend for himself, because no one was willing to take him.
I am planning on a sequel/omake, and in that, there will be more on how corruption works, how the relationship turns out, stuff like that. I find it harder and harder to write fluff as time goes on, so yeah.
And other stories. I don't have the links to all of the kink meme fills, but I have most of my stories and kink meme fills posted on my journal (I have an index here: http://semebay.livejournal.com/2547.html).
And I haven't actually seen the other angel/demon fill. I don't know where it is. I haven't actually been watching part 14 or 13, and some friends kinda convinced me to fill this because no one was taking on the bonus in art form.
Re: Law [2e/2] [end]
anonymous
August 30 2010, 03:18:41 UTC
Err sorry for the fail English I usually know how to write complete sentences..-_-;
Yah what you put (instinctual) and then that whole raise by good thing and such pushed him over the edge. Thanks for that whole energy ex. too (I hated studying that but I still remember!!!) it helped and let me get it more!
He had no friends in hell ...no wonder he was so lonely. Arthur was at least let back in I take in Alfred's re-entrance must have been harsh. How old was he when he went back to hell (and had his mind warped this badly)? But seriously how'd he think Arthur would take nearly being killed and then him never coming back to apologize (or at least not until 100 years or so) ?
Oooh thanks for the link!
I think your friends should convince you to write more (ESP. those darker angstier request since... damn!) ^^ Your an insane writer (no for real you are!) and I have a strong feeling that even if I didn't like the characters in the fic you'd make me like them.
Re: Law [2e/2] [end]
anonymous
August 30 2010, 19:57:41 UTC
lol. I noticed no fail!English!
And no problem about the energy thing. We're doing it in college right now, so yeah. And all of your questions are going to be answered in the sequel, promise! (and I have so many ongoing fics right now that anymore would kill me, tbch. But I know that I'll get roped into something somehow, lol)
Thanks for the comments, seriously <3 I love people telling me what they think, good or bad.
How dare you apologize for such a a...an incredible fill it was so great I'm not ashamed to say that it left me a bit breathless. The drama was just right and the characterizations...even with the characters so incredible different their (at least I did not) not viewed as OOC because their traits were still there and you stayed true to the Au AND the canon. America needs approval and went mad without others (he is a very sociable person even if he isn't well liked). You fit him perfectly and how he most likely would have acted if he were a demon. A sign of a good writer is staying true to canon but being able to shape that character into who they /would/ be if in a certain universe where there not for example a super power who is supposed to be a hero and anything but evil (even though he can totally be poor hero sighs).
I think the reason evil 'triumphed' here was because of the utter loneliness he discovered he'd be feeling throughout his eternal life and the resentment he felt towards Arthur...and that corrupted love of course. Alfred was evil and these things just tipped him over the edge...am I wrong on this??? Please do tell!
Omake: I wouldn't say make a omg flllluffff!! Omake (unless its during when he was a kid still in B!Angel's care since I have a feeling that at least some of his actions were not completely demonic) because it would sorta ruin this...I think...it may take away something out of it...but I would definitely adore more added to this because it was such a wonderful fill and although the ending was indeed appropriate it...seemed like there's just more and I would love to see what that more is...after all Arthur basically has to live with this demon he raised who nearly kill him for the rest of eternity or runaway, be lonely, and most likely get tracked down throughout the world (I doubt Al would kill the only companion he'll ever have...unless a certain French men adopts someone...god now I'm thinking about incubus!France and who the hell Prussia would be what w his already red eyesDXXX)
Im very very very happy this wasn't fluff. This story wasn't meant to be short and sweet, it was meant to pack more punch and 'whoosh' then that which it did and was very
Also I could see the 'corruption' Al talked about leaking through at the end. They both left such deep marks on one another ;A;
So are you making an omake?? Or feeling that other demon/angel thing I saw floating around here? And did you have other stories if so pllllease (if you want of course ! :) link me to your wonderful fills filled with wonderfulness??
aquance incubus, lol captcha niiiice it agrees with me...wait aquance...acquaintance?? O.o!! >)
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First off, thanks for the comment! I'm glad you enjoyed, and the bit about characteriation really perked me up despite how fucking tired I am, lol (2:55 am where I am right now).
You also asked about how evil "triumphed", and I'll try to get you the answer you want.
Demons, in this fic, are very instinctual, as you could (hopefully) tell from the context in the beginning. Alfred's instincts were knocked around a bit from his upbringing, which should have been explained. I suppose how I explained this was a lot about instincts, and how difficult they are to suppress. Demons will always have evil within them, just like how the angels will have good in them. Arthur tried his damndest to raise Alfred as good as could be, but the evil couldn't go away. If you know anything about Ecology, Environment, stuff like that, you could take a look at "Energy". A law of energy states that it can not be created, and it can not be destroyed. Transform that energy into the "good" and "bad" in the angels and demons, and it brings up the idea that the good and evil can never disappear (can not be destroyed), and that it will always be there. The angel or demon may supress it, but it never leaves them completely. When I wrote it, I honestly believed that the evil would always be there. It would not be suppressed for the duration of his life. However, because of his conflicted upbringing, he lost control earlier than he would have with other demons, and as a result, almost killed his guardian.
And at that point in time, he was left to essentially fend for himself, because no one was willing to take him.
I am planning on a sequel/omake, and in that, there will be more on how corruption works, how the relationship turns out, stuff like that. I find it harder and harder to write fluff as time goes on, so yeah.
And other stories. I don't have the links to all of the kink meme fills, but I have most of my stories and kink meme fills posted on my journal (I have an index here: http://semebay.livejournal.com/2547.html).
And I haven't actually seen the other angel/demon fill. I don't know where it is. I haven't actually been watching part 14 or 13, and some friends kinda convinced me to fill this because no one was taking on the bonus in art form.
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Yah what you put (instinctual) and then that whole raise by good thing and such pushed him over the edge. Thanks for that whole energy ex. too (I hated studying that but I still remember!!!) it helped and let me get it more!
He had no friends in hell ...no wonder he was so lonely. Arthur was at least let back in I take in Alfred's re-entrance must have been harsh. How old was he when he went back to hell (and had his mind warped this badly)? But seriously how'd he think Arthur would take nearly being killed and then him never coming back to apologize (or at least not until 100 years or so) ?
Oooh thanks for the link!
I think your friends should convince you to write more (ESP. those darker angstier request since... damn!) ^^ Your an insane writer (no for real you are!) and I have a strong feeling that even if I didn't like the characters in the fic you'd make me like them.
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And no problem about the energy thing. We're doing it in college right now, so yeah. And all of your questions are going to be answered in the sequel, promise! (and I have so many ongoing fics right now that anymore would kill me, tbch. But I know that I'll get roped into something somehow, lol)
Thanks for the comments, seriously <3 I love people telling me what they think, good or bad.
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