Lost Time [1c/?]
anonymous
April 11 2010, 08:35:42 UTC
Doh. Just noticed LJ is fucking up the paragraph spacing. DAMMIT. Pretend there's more space there.
Colombia was relieved. February 16th was almost over, and when the date finally rolled around to the 17th, the aching gap in him where his twin brother should have been would go back to aching only once in a while, and life could resume its usual course for another year. As he waited for the day to change, he sat on the edge of a too-large bed and watched the leaves of the trees and the grass of the lawn dance in the soft breeze and ran a hand through his bear’s fur.
There was a loud crash in the living room. Matthew stood abruptly, tumbling Kumajirou off his lap and onto the floor, and dashed down the stairs and around the corner before skidding suddenly to a halt. The United Kingdom of Great Britain was picking himself up off Colombia’s living room floor.
For a moment, his mind was blank. Then, with a feral cry -why today, of all days!- Matthew launched himself at the former empire.
England didn’t even manage to look up fully before Matthew smashed into him, knocking him back onto the floor. Arthur let out a hoarse cry of his own as the small of his back smashed against the hardwood flooring. He vaguely registered Matthew above him, violet eyes full blazing hatred and face flushed with rage, before the former colony started scratching at his eyes.
Arthur threw out his hands to defend his face and felt Matthew’s nails dig into the skin, almost drawing blood. Desperate and more than a little confused Arthur yelled, “Wh-what the bloody hell?! Matthew, what are you-! Canada! It’s me!” And Matthew stopped for a moment.
Colombia looked down at England, holding out his hands to defend his face, and calling him Canada. No one had called him that in... Since...
“I know who you are.” England opened his eyes slightly, and looked at Matthew in confusion. And fear. Colombia spent a moment relishing in the fact that the former British Empire had the decency to be at least a little bit afraid. Coming here, to this house... “Mattie! What the hell?!”
Colombia jolted. It was more than impossible... But... That voice...
Slowly, Matthew looked up, past England to the figure standing behind the couch.
Eyes wide in terror, Colombia shrank away from England and skittered back to the corner. Because this wasn’t possible, and if it wasn’t real, then something was very, very wrong with him.
Because his dead brother was standing behind the couch, staring at him in alarm.
I know I flipped tenses at least once up there. *facepalm* Also, I depressed myself immensely. God, the Colombia!Matt universe kills me. I am convinced that alot of that bit at the end is full of fail. *hides*
Re: Lost Time - Part One Notes
anonymous
April 11 2010, 08:38:04 UTC
February 16th, 1815 was the day that America ratified the treaty ending the War of 1812, so, sticking with the original author’s ironic use of real historical dates, I used that for New Colombia’s confederation a.k.a. the anniversary of Arthur’s douche-baggery at the end of ‘Every Generation’.
I feel the need to apologize for the fail!narration at what Arthur’s spell was supposed to do. OTL And I totally hijacked the idea from the “Loop” card in Cardcaptor Sakura. XD Except it’s like... anit-loop or something. I donno, I just find the image of poor Francis being like ‘WHY CAN’T I GET TO THE DOOR!? D:’ epically funny.
I also decided to steal borrow the idea of having part of a quote for the title. XD I’m original, shut up. And browsing quotes made me cry. orz Emotional Author!Anon fails just a little. The full quote is Lost time is never found again, quoting Benjamin Franklin.
And yes, Al tuning out the flight attendant is totally me being too lazy to think of a logical reason. Massive OTL.
Re: Lost Time - Part One Notesgeministar01April 11 2010, 16:45:42 UTC
I had a stop-over in Canada last time my family went to Europe. Forget why though. (Also, given my relationship to the original prompt, I thought it might be best to de-anon myself, just this once. Hope you don't mind. :3)
Love it so far. Arthur's plot to keep Francis out is a hoot, and you totally get bonus points for actually explaining what he was trying to do with the spell and why it would mess up this way instead of just saying, "He was doing magic and poof! It messed up."
And, oh, Columbia. I just love him here, especially how England dropping into his house on that particular day just completely sets him off. It's pretty much perfect, and I can't wait to see how they're going to handle this.
*points and squeaks* You.. You.. *brainslode* Thankyou, you just made my day. And I am very, very glad the stopover thing was logical. XD I pulled that outa my butt and decided ten miutes later that it really had to be there for something at the end. I am flattered and slightly intimidated by your de-anon. Of COURSE I don't mind, it's your universe!!
I'm still trying to figure out how they get from here to where I know they are at the end. OTL Random bits here and there, but... >.<;; Would you mind terribly if I put this on fanfication.net?
*happy fangirl squeal* You're so fast! This is awsome! Though you forgot to post it in the Fill List. Don't worry, I fixed that for you. :)
Ah, I don't know where to start with why I love this. Colombia's personality, right down to his attacking England for showing up on *that day*? The nice little touches that coincide with the original story? The bits of humor? (Loved Arthur's plot to magically trick Francis, BTW, that's ingenious.) There's just so much here that's good, it's hard to believe it's your first fic!
Re: OP (here comes author!anon)
anonymous
April 11 2010, 17:40:05 UTC
The next bits probably won't be so fast. And thank you for fixing that. It was almost three up here when I posted. OTL In case you didn't notice, my brain has been thoroughly eaten by this prompt.
Everyone seems to love the whole 'anti-loop' thing. XD I still don't know where that came from. It was just THERE all of a sudden. I should ponder these things in the bathtub more often. Apparently I'm a genious in the tub. XD
Re: Lost Time - Part One Notes
anonymous
April 11 2010, 17:02:20 UTC
That is a glorious image indeed.
But dang, from Columbia's reaction, I can't help but wonder when the last time he and Arthur met face to face was. Also insanely curious as to how him and Alfred are going to react to each other.
Colombia was relieved. February 16th was almost over, and when the date finally rolled around to the 17th, the aching gap in him where his twin brother should have been would go back to aching only once in a while, and life could resume its usual course for another year. As he waited for the day to change, he sat on the edge of a too-large bed and watched the leaves of the trees and the grass of the lawn dance in the soft breeze and ran a hand through his bear’s fur.
There was a loud crash in the living room. Matthew stood abruptly, tumbling Kumajirou off his lap and onto the floor, and dashed down the stairs and around the corner before skidding suddenly to a halt.
The United Kingdom of Great Britain was picking himself up off Colombia’s living room floor.
For a moment, his mind was blank. Then, with a feral cry -why today, of all days!- Matthew launched himself at the former empire.
England didn’t even manage to look up fully before Matthew smashed into him, knocking him back onto the floor. Arthur let out a hoarse cry of his own as the small of his back smashed against the hardwood flooring. He vaguely registered Matthew above him, violet eyes full blazing hatred and face flushed with rage, before the former colony started scratching at his eyes.
Arthur threw out his hands to defend his face and felt Matthew’s nails dig into the skin, almost drawing blood. Desperate and more than a little confused Arthur yelled, “Wh-what the bloody hell?! Matthew, what are you-! Canada! It’s me!” And Matthew stopped for a moment.
Colombia looked down at England, holding out his hands to defend his face, and calling him Canada. No one had called him that in... Since...
“I know who you are.” England opened his eyes slightly, and looked at Matthew in confusion. And fear. Colombia spent a moment relishing in the fact that the former British Empire had the decency to be at least a little bit afraid. Coming here, to this house...
“Mattie! What the hell?!”
Colombia jolted. It was more than impossible... But... That voice...
Slowly, Matthew looked up, past England to the figure standing behind the couch.
Eyes wide in terror, Colombia shrank away from England and skittered back to the corner. Because this wasn’t possible, and if it wasn’t real, then something was very, very wrong with him.
Because his dead brother was standing behind the couch, staring at him in alarm.
I know I flipped tenses at least once up there. *facepalm* Also, I depressed myself immensely. God, the Colombia!Matt universe kills me. I am convinced that alot of that bit at the end is full of fail.
*hides*
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I feel the need to apologize for the fail!narration at what Arthur’s spell was supposed to do. OTL And I totally hijacked the idea from the “Loop” card in Cardcaptor Sakura. XD Except it’s like... anit-loop or something. I donno, I just find the image of poor Francis being like ‘WHY CAN’T I GET TO THE DOOR!? D:’ epically funny.
I also decided to steal borrow the idea of having part of a quote for the title. XD I’m original, shut up. And browsing quotes made me cry. orz Emotional Author!Anon fails just a little. The full quote is Lost time is never found again, quoting Benjamin Franklin.
And yes, Al tuning out the flight attendant is totally me being too lazy to think of a logical reason. Massive OTL.
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Love it so far. Arthur's plot to keep Francis out is a hoot, and you totally get bonus points for actually explaining what he was trying to do with the spell and why it would mess up this way instead of just saying, "He was doing magic and poof! It messed up."
And, oh, Columbia. I just love him here, especially how England dropping into his house on that particular day just completely sets him off. It's pretty much perfect, and I can't wait to see how they're going to handle this.
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I'm still trying to figure out how they get from here to where I know they are at the end. OTL Random bits here and there, but... >.<;;
Would you mind terribly if I put this on fanfication.net?
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Ah, I don't know where to start with why I love this. Colombia's personality, right down to his attacking England for showing up on *that day*? The nice little touches that coincide with the original story? The bits of humor? (Loved Arthur's plot to magically trick Francis, BTW, that's ingenious.) There's just so much here that's good, it's hard to believe it's your first fic!
Still waiting excitedly for the next part!
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Everyone seems to love the whole 'anti-loop' thing. XD I still don't know where that came from. It was just THERE all of a sudden. I should ponder these things in the bathtub more often. Apparently I'm a genious in the tub. XD
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But dang, from Columbia's reaction, I can't help but wonder when the last time he and Arthur met face to face was. Also insanely curious as to how him and Alfred are going to react to each other.
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T-this anon eagerly awaits the next part. *A*
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