Comments | heroes_flashfic: Gravity, by La Onza

la_onza in heroes_flashfic

Gravity, by La Onza

Feb 19, 2007 09:36

Gravity
350 words, for the "Daddy Issues" challenge.
Eden, Mr. Bennet, PG-13

( He had the gravity of a father. )

Comments 12

22by7 February 19 2007, 15:47:32 UTC

this literally took my breath away for the duration of my reading it. so compact and powerful, not a word or image wasted.

la_onza February 19 2007, 17:02:07 UTC

So glad you think so, thanks very much!

snowpuppies February 19 2007, 17:02:09 UTC

Wow.

That's Lovely.

la_onza February 19 2007, 17:15:43 UTC

Thank you!

technosage February 20 2007, 21:59:15 UTC

I really like this a lot. It fits well with what we know of Eden's dad from the comics and it makes sense she'd have developed a crush on him for while. Nicely done.

la_onza February 21 2007, 01:41:24 UTC

Thank you! I didn't care much for Eden at first, but she grew to interest me.

thekatebeyond February 21 2007, 06:17:45 UTC

Oh-so-brilliant! I love the observation of HRG as being a sort of walking anachronism. And for the first time, it makes sense how Eden went from out of control to submissive. Just great!

la_onza February 22 2007, 01:32:20 UTC

Thanks very much! That's exactly what I was trying for. :)

sheepfairy February 22 2007, 01:14:23 UTC

Oh, that was very nice. I love her observations about HRG as being the kind of guy from an earlier time, and the contrast between him and her own father.

la_onza February 24 2007, 16:53:57 UTC

Thank you!