Where Do We Go (2/2)

[her_pseudonym]

Title: Where Do We Go (2/2)
Pairing: Lightman/Foster
Rating: NC-17
Summary: A man from Cal's past is bent on revenge and finds it during one late night at the Lightman Group building. Will his actions drive Cal and Gillian apart, or will they find a way to move forward together?
CONTENT WARNING: This story deals with dark themes and

Comments

[starfirefic]

Hey there - I'm really glad you posted this somewhere I could comment - I went and read it on FF.net after reading and loving Late Nights, and I'm not in the slightest surprised to discover you have a non-fic writing career, given the calibre of your writing in both fics.

This one is another amazingly-written piece: you write "harrowing" extremely well, and then you go on to write "sweet" beautifully too. My one piece of concrit (well, I mean it as concrit anyway - I hope it comes out that way) is that for me personally, the "sweet" comes way too quickly after the "harrowing".

My feeling as that, after what they went through, I can absolutely see Cal & Gillian trying to deal with it in the way they have in Part 2, and I can even see what they do going on to partially heal some of the damage that had been done earlier in the evening. But I can't quite buy the full healing I read it as being written as - for me, that's too much, too soon. (Incidentally, I can also see Torres going off to have some kind of anonymous sex, just to prove to herself that *she's* the one in control now, and having that be dark follow-up fic to this one as she gets more and more self-destructive)

Timeframes aside, though, I did find Where do we Go a brilliant wee fic. It was dark and sweet and hot, and as with Late Nights, it made me absolutely itch to read whatever you write next in the fandom (FWIW, if you take requests, I would seriously *love* to see more of Cal talking dirty the way he did towards the end of Late Nights. Because seriously. Dayum, that was *HOT*!)

Thanks for sharing this over here in LJ-land

Starfire

[her_pseudonym]

Thanks so much for your comments. I really appreciate that you took the time to share your thoughts.

I understand your concerns about the timeframe, and it was definitely something I thought about. To be honest I didn't really intend for the ending to signal that everything was all right and resolved and forgotten, as much as I wanted to end on a note of hope that everything would be all right. I completely see that if it's taken as "all better now", it feels too fast. Realistically I see them all dealing with the fallout for some time after the events of the story, but, honestly, I wanted to write a one-shot. lol. But in my mind, I see issues raised by that night coming up for Cal and Gillian in the future, perhaps in ways they could never anticipate (hey...maybe a thought for a future one-shot).

And never fear...in my interpretation of these characters, Cal likes to talk dirty. Because with that accent, he'd damn well better. ;)

Thanks again for your comments. I do appreciate them.