for youniqorn

[hephapsantamod]

Title: Two Quarters (and a Heart) Down
For: youniqorn
Pairing: Jaehyo/Kyung
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 1219
Summary: Maybe it is or maybe it isn't, but it's time to figure it out.
Notes/Warnings: Dear recipient, I apologize in advance. But if you want, get in touch with me afterwards, because this story literally got a universe all its own.

Comments

[youniqorn]

honestly i just want to quote the entire kiss scene under the bleachers, but i won't. instead i will proceed to just tell you how much i love the scene you've set. i adore the silent anticipation coming from kyung, and how he takes action when jaehyo almost chickens out. the little details like kyung's damp hair and the music in the background is lovely too, and i love how you've managed to capture the place where they are and how they technically don't have time for a confession or a kiss because they should be back on the bleachers, not under. and it's just lovely how even though you've kept the setting present and there in the scene, it's still something private and wonderful, the two of them away from it all, and i love how you've portrayed jaehyo's feelings, how much he's wanted to kiss kyung and how the world, not them, should stop in that moment ;______; the mix of the game's atmosphere and the privacy of their kiss was just something amazing to read, loud but quiet at the same time, and i have so many feelings for what you've written me, i can only hope i can get them across ok ;__;

“I’ll save you a seat on the bus. Remember bright and early,” Kyung says as he fiddles with the straps of his bibbers. Before he stumbles back into the light, he straightens Jaehyo’s jacket, pulling the cape over his shoulders and sliding his fingers over the sequins on his sash. “Don’t keep me waiting.”

Kyung pulls Jaehyo down for one more kiss, this one shorter but steadier. And maybe because they are already late, Jaehyo kisses him back.
i love these lines so much because of kyung's confidence, or supposed confidence really, because he still comes off as awkward to me as he fiddles with his bibbers (BIBBERS! ;A; i never got to wear them but oh wow, santa, how much thought you've put into writing marching band!au for me has me reeling ;~;). i also always love reading about moments post-kisses or sex or whatever, especially if there are affectionate moments, and kyung straightening out jaehyo's uniform has me gushing at the image in my mind ;____;

Jaehyo looks up at Kyung, who is all big eyes and big nose, sharp tongue but sharper wit.
;A; this is possibly my favourite line out of the entire fic. i have never been able to find a right and apt way to describe park kyung but this is perfect and lovely and YOU DID IT IN ONE SENTENCE. this is too cute. i love kyung, i love his big eyes and his big nose and his squishy face and his indecent tongue and his wit. i love you too, santa-anon ;__;

The boy doesn't know what he’s doing to him as he shakes around with Yukwon, his tenor saxophone rocking into his body with every movement.
!!!!!!! i shrieked with laughter somewhere around here because i imagined kyung's mental breaker teaser with kwon and them wiggling together ;___; throw that together with purple uniforms and the fact that kyung plays TENOR SAX OMG. it kind of fits kyung now that i think about it, in a cute way, because i myself used to play soprano and it was considerably large for me already (i am short! n_n) but the thought of kyung with a tenor sax wiggling around is too ridiculously adorable for words.

Jaehyo tilts his head. “What kind of experiment?” He wipes his hand, the one Minhyuk touched briefly, on Minhyuk’s pant legs.
jaehyo is wonderful tbh so is minhyuk JAEHYO DO YOU THINK HE HAS COOTIES BECAUSE HE DOESN'T but you tried, jaehyo, you tried n_n

Saturday, however, is another story as he slides into a back seat with Kyung flush against his body and hand laced in his own.
i love this so much.

all in all, thank you so much for this. i loved reading this so much, and i know it's just going to be something i'll read over and over again for a long time to come. ;u; WE HAVE TO BE FRIENDS if we're not friends already, really. you and i. we will be friends. i would love to see what kind of universe you've managed to create from just my prompt, in fact, i'm excited at the thought of talking about it!

;__; i'll be back at another time to comment on 'of grime and evil', santa-anon! wait for me ;_________;