Smoking - Chapter 30

[heavenlyxflames]

Title:: Smoking
Genre:: Drama
Fandom:: RPS Vam, Villinde, Dugera, Lindunn, others.
Rating:: R
Summary:: A story, reaching back to the beginning like a twisted, curling whisp of smoke from a slow burning fire.
Disclaimer::Most characters are property only of themselves; I own the storyline and the writing. This is a work of ficiton; treat it as such

Comments

[mm_mm4]

Oh god, I do not have time to comment this properly, I don’t think any comment could do this justice. However, let it be known that this is the most glorious story ever to grace the Internet. Seriously this is amazing, as Nerakrose said, it could be published. I love the way that this has twisted around, it’s like Ville’s sins have come back to haunt him in the form of Linde. As if Linde was some kind of butterfly, or maybe moth would be more apt, that’s slowly developed a harsh, bitter cocoon, and it’s all Ville’s fault. I adore the repetition in Linde’s not so little soliloquy, for me it created such a sense of hostility and pain. Your writing’s like poetry, like a dramatic monologue in that Linde reveals far more than he meant to, pure poignancy in that while he may not mean to express it, he knows how he feels.

God, I adore the way that Linde has treated Bam in exactly the manner Ville treated him. All the images of harsh, purely physical lust underlined by Bam’s innocence. “I’ll never forgive him for not intervening.” This story’s called ‘smoking’, and this line made me realise how apt the title is, it made me see Ville as some kind of poisonous gas, slowly diffusing, corrupting, tainting everything it touches. Poor Bam.

Oh this is so tragic, I so wanted Ville to end up with Linde and it doesn’t look like he will now. Seems like their relationship has fallen too far. Amazingly written, this storyline is too intricate for me to comprehend, let alone think about being able to write myself, you have such a lot of talent,

Don’t leave Vam please!
X

[heavenlyxflames]

<3

i could type a proper reply but im swamped with work. thank you though, this really just. made my day. that you took the time out to put so much into your comment really makes me feel warm and fuzzy. thank you. *hugs*

i wont leave vam, but im not going to be doing anymore writing, i dont think. im pretty much over it now. but i'll stick around... i like being the moderator way too much. ;) and i think i owe the place the loyalty of sticking around. *nods*