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Between the Devil and the Deep Blue Sea - Team Fanon

Apr 08, 2008 07:41

Title: Between the Devil and the Deep Blue Sea
Team: Fanon
Author: faynia
Prompt: The Devil
Wordcount: 14,066
Rating: R
Warnings: AU, non-graphic dubious consent
Summary: Draco Malfoy always gets what he wants. Only, this time, what he wants is someone he can never have.
Author's Note Thanks to my betas J, S and L. Some text was lifted from DH pg. 458. ( Read more... )

r, round i, fic, prompt: the devil, team fanon

Comments 31

yura_slash April 8 2008, 16:21:39 UTC

i really like this story, and i like how the dub-con and torture aspects are handled. they're not too graphic, but the emotions surrounding them are intense. oh- and the ending is superb ^_^

very nice use of the prompt, as well. veela lust is definitely all about losing control over one's actions.

allika April 8 2008, 16:37:01 UTC

I very much liked this story; your take on Veela was very unique, and I enjoyed your premise. I did think some of your phrasing was awkward, though, and I was a bit confused in places, as if you'd hurried through some parts of the story aewnd not given a full explanation. In some aspects, I found Draco's behavior and thoughts to be...off, and I found it strange that Harry, though such a focus of Draco's, seemed distant, not really there, not really himself. But again, I really did like this story; just work on your sentence structure and word choice.

gina87 April 8 2008, 18:05:54 UTC

Really liked the beginning of the story. It was a very unusual way to write a veela story.

sesheta_66 April 8 2008, 18:30:35 UTC

And ... the Veela entry for Team Fanon! :D

I liked your take on the Veela angle, with the out-of-control aspect not being specifically related to just the mate. Draco's struggle with the feelings of lust worked very well into your interpretation of the card. And eeeewww! When he gives in, even knowing that the thought disgusts him, because his body betrays him? My heart wrenched for him and his pain. And how he aches and feels so guilty about Harry.

And bastard!Lucius. Yup, yup. The end? BAH! Now what?! Inquiring minds want to know. :)

alaana_fair April 8 2008, 19:04:14 UTC

Oh, I really liked this darker Veela side. A very interesting take on the Veela/Mate aspect of things. I thought Draco's turmoil, while painful to read, was incredibly succinct. Great job, hon!