Title: Smile, You’re on Camera
Team: Team EWE
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bewarethesmirkPrompt:
The DevilWordcount: ~14,000
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: A bit of Harry/Ginny but nothing serious or explicit.
Summary: Harry Potter has lost sight of what it means to listen to himself-he’s depressed and confused, moving through life only to please the Ministry and the press and his
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First of all:
"Honestly, I'm not sure, but what's important to remember about the Devil is that it's more about you and what you need to overcome."
I think you just put everything into perspective there. I particularly like your interpretation of The Devil because this one, I personally can somehow relate to it.
And then...
Kreacher waved an impatient, gnarled hand. "I is not caring about that! Kreacher wants to desecrate them to smithereens!"
Kreacher is absolute LOVE. <3 I will never tire of Kreacher!
What Harry had read in Malfoy's eyes earlier was back again. "You fell in love with me." and "Oh, God," Harry whispered. "Oh, God."I love these to pieces as well. So adorable ( ... )
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That being said, this fic was written as well as I could in a rush. I'm working with some great betas to edit what I have and to write more plot and a more satisfactory ending for both Harry and Draco, for me, and hopefully, the readers. :)
I was amazed at how much humor turned up in this fic. I meant to sneak in a few funny lines, but some of the characters (Kreacher, Luna, for ex.) took over!
I'm glad you felt attached to Harry; I did, too. I <3 Harry. And I'm also glad you liked my take on The Devil. The Devil in my prompt was that bit of us we all have--some people more than others. :P
Thanks for your thoughtful observations! If you'd ever like to keep track of my fic, or the updated version of this fic, feel free to friend me. My journal is f-locked. :P
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But I am anticipating your edits! I'm in love with the story so, yes, of course, I want to know what new changes are made to it. And I'd be interested to see what other fics you write. I'll leave you a comment and ask to friend you, as I friend you back. :) I'm also glad to know that I've made you happy with my rec post somehow. I tried to do my best to support team EWE! This team rocks. <3
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You're more than welcome to go ahead and friend me, and I'll friend you. You're always welcome to leave a comment, too, of course. ♥
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This fic was rushed, and I'm taking the time to slash (heh) the ending and write more, while editing the rest of the fic. I'm taking your comments, in particular, into account, particularly:
- think you were too explicit in stating Harry's serving of others. The situation spoke for itself, but you kept repeating what was going on...
Definitely. Classic show vs. tell problem.
-I found his sudden knowledge about Draco's love (though I very much enjoyed his response), and his confidence in asking for the blow job, a bit too quick of a turnaround.
Thanks so much for reading and your wonderful words. ♥
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I loved Kreacher and I wish we could have seen more of him (especially once he found out Draco was the one behind it :))
Harry's understanding of Draco's feelings for him was a bit sudden, but considering what it led to, I can't complain :)
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I'm planning a major edit and rewrite of this fic, so your questions will be very useful to say the least.
...but I wondered a bit about Lucius disinheriting him. Was it because he quite the job, or did he find out about him being gay?
When I was writing the fic, I was imagining it being because of Draco's sexual orientation, but that seems a bit cliche to me. I may make that part of the reason, but in the edit I'll provide more backstory about why Lucius disinherited Draco. Or I might cut that altogether. Lucius cares too much about maintaining the Malfoy line.
I agree with you that Harry's recognition of Draco's feelings were too soon, as well as Harry so easily forgiving Draco's stalking of him. I skipped about 10,000 words of making up and UST and Draco worming his way into Harry's heart. ♥
Thanks!
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That's great! I was worried I was the only one ^_^ And I'd really like to see more of this world, and 10.000 words of UST sound wonderful :)
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Harry ... is so lovable, clueless, and desperate not to follow along like a sheep (baaah), but he tries so hard NOT to be someone he's not that he simply becomes another person he's not. Yay for Draco showing him the way.
Go Team EWE!
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Yeah, Harry at the end caught me off guard, too, in retrospect. Which is why I'm re-editing and rewriting much of the fic and esp. the ending.
Thanks so much for reading and for sharing honest comments.
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