Smile, You're on Camera - Team EWE

Apr 08, 2008 07:39

Title: Smile, You’re on Camera
Team: Team EWE
Author: bewarethesmirk
Prompt: The Devil
Wordcount: ~14,000
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: A bit of Harry/Ginny but nothing serious or explicit.
Summary: Harry Potter has lost sight of what it means to listen to himself-he’s depressed and confused, moving through life only to please the Ministry and the press and his ( Read more... )

nc-17, round i, fic, team ewe, prompt: the devil

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tomatoe18 April 8 2008, 16:13:15 UTC
WOW. So, so entertaining. Funny as hell, too. I haven't been able to stop giggling since the first word. :D

First of all:
"Honestly, I'm not sure, but what's important to remember about the Devil is that it's more about you and what you need to overcome."

I think you just put everything into perspective there. I particularly like your interpretation of The Devil because this one, I personally can somehow relate to it.

And then...

Kreacher waved an impatient, gnarled hand. "I is not caring about that! Kreacher wants to desecrate them to smithereens!"

Kreacher is absolute LOVE. <3 I will never tire of Kreacher!

What Harry had read in Malfoy's eyes earlier was back again. "You fell in love with me." and "Oh, God," Harry whispered. "Oh, God."I love these to pieces as well. So adorable ( ... )

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bewarethesmirk June 1 2008, 20:26:59 UTC
Early on, rospberry linked me a rec you made in your LJ that made me very happy. :) Nervous as I was about posting this fic, it was wonderful to have such a great response.

That being said, this fic was written as well as I could in a rush. I'm working with some great betas to edit what I have and to write more plot and a more satisfactory ending for both Harry and Draco, for me, and hopefully, the readers. :)

I was amazed at how much humor turned up in this fic. I meant to sneak in a few funny lines, but some of the characters (Kreacher, Luna, for ex.) took over!

I'm glad you felt attached to Harry; I did, too. I <3 Harry. And I'm also glad you liked my take on The Devil. The Devil in my prompt was that bit of us we all have--some people more than others. :P

Thanks for your thoughtful observations! If you'd ever like to keep track of my fic, or the updated version of this fic, feel free to friend me. My journal is f-locked. :P

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tomatoe18 June 2 2008, 02:01:08 UTC
That was written in a rush? I wouldn't have been able to tell! That shows just how awesome you are. :D

But I am anticipating your edits! I'm in love with the story so, yes, of course, I want to know what new changes are made to it. And I'd be interested to see what other fics you write. I'll leave you a comment and ask to friend you, as I friend you back. :) I'm also glad to know that I've made you happy with my rec post somehow. I tried to do my best to support team EWE! This team rocks. <3

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bewarethesmirk June 2 2008, 02:03:52 UTC
Aww, you're just so nice. On behalf of Team EWE, we appreciated all your support. ;-)

You're more than welcome to go ahead and friend me, and I'll friend you. You're always welcome to leave a comment, too, of course. ♥

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allika April 8 2008, 17:51:42 UTC
I loved this story. Soo well written, and your Harry was absolutely perfect. That little "g-gay" and "not, not, not" was just so charming. Ginny's "I know" was wonderful, too, the double meaning Harry couldn't understand. I liked how Draco was almost two people, knowing and confident, and honest and vulnerable. Just a couple of itty bitty quibbles. I think you were too explicit in stating Harry's serving of others. The situation spoke for itself, but you kept repeating what was going on (though I did love that "bitch" line). Also, keeping in mind Harry's bewilderment throughout the story, I found his sudden knowledge about Draco's love (though I very much enjoyed his response), and his confidence in asking for the blow job, a bit too quick of a turnaround. But overall, I very much enjoyed your story. It was a very nice read, with a good plot, and wonderful characterizations.

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bewarethesmirk June 1 2008, 20:45:24 UTC
I love received comments from people on my f-list. *g* Thank you for your insightful feedback, both kind and observant and intelligent in its concrit.

This fic was rushed, and I'm taking the time to slash (heh) the ending and write more, while editing the rest of the fic. I'm taking your comments, in particular, into account, particularly:

- think you were too explicit in stating Harry's serving of others. The situation spoke for itself, but you kept repeating what was going on...

Definitely. Classic show vs. tell problem.

-I found his sudden knowledge about Draco's love (though I very much enjoyed his response), and his confidence in asking for the blow job, a bit too quick of a turnaround.

Thanks so much for reading and your wonderful words. ♥

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khateh April 8 2008, 18:56:53 UTC
I never thought of Draco as a paparazzi, but you made it work. Him quitting his job because he didn't like it was very Draco-like, but I wondered a bit about Lucius disinheriting him. Was it because he quite the job, or did he find out about him being gay?
I loved Kreacher and I wish we could have seen more of him (especially once he found out Draco was the one behind it :))
Harry's understanding of Draco's feelings for him was a bit sudden, but considering what it led to, I can't complain :)

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bewarethesmirk June 3 2008, 04:54:36 UTC
Forgive me being so late in replying to hd_worldcup comments. ♥ I'm trying to catch up!

I'm planning a major edit and rewrite of this fic, so your questions will be very useful to say the least.

...but I wondered a bit about Lucius disinheriting him. Was it because he quite the job, or did he find out about him being gay?

When I was writing the fic, I was imagining it being because of Draco's sexual orientation, but that seems a bit cliche to me. I may make that part of the reason, but in the edit I'll provide more backstory about why Lucius disinherited Draco. Or I might cut that altogether. Lucius cares too much about maintaining the Malfoy line.

I agree with you that Harry's recognition of Draco's feelings were too soon, as well as Harry so easily forgiving Draco's stalking of him. I skipped about 10,000 words of making up and UST and Draco worming his way into Harry's heart. ♥

Thanks!

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khateh June 3 2008, 10:27:30 UTC
I'm planning a major edit and rewrite of this fic
That's great! I was worried I was the only one ^_^ And I'd really like to see more of this world, and 10.000 words of UST sound wonderful :)

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sesheta_66 April 8 2008, 19:26:10 UTC
Heh. I really enjoyed this story. Your (or rather Luna's) interpretation of the card set it up well, and I love how the store clerk had a devil tattooed on the back of her head (nice touch). That one moment when Draco spoke to Ginny, and she acknowledged what he said? Very nice. Even in the midst of disliking each other, Ginny heard what he had to say, even if Harry didn't.

Harry ... is so lovable, clueless, and desperate not to follow along like a sheep (baaah), but he tries so hard NOT to be someone he's not that he simply becomes another person he's not. Yay for Draco showing him the way.

Go Team EWE!

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bewarethesmirk June 3 2008, 04:55:49 UTC
Thanks so much for your kind comments. I'm particularly glad you liked my Luna's interpretation of the Devil.

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romaine24 April 8 2008, 20:29:15 UTC
A lot of fun to read. Somewhat clueless Harry is a treat and Draco w/glasses always is. The wearing of the robes to work was hilarious. I enjoyed it a lot, but Harry at the end caught me off guard. I really didn't expect him to order Draco to go down on him right after accepting that he might just be gay. Not that it wasn't hot.

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bewarethesmirk June 3 2008, 04:56:51 UTC
Yeah, I had to include glasses!Draco. :-P

Yeah, Harry at the end caught me off guard, too, in retrospect. Which is why I'm re-editing and rewriting much of the fic and esp. the ending.

Thanks so much for reading and for sharing honest comments.

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