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What Could Have Been (And What Was) - Team Fanon

Apr 03, 2008 07:57

Title: What Could Have Been (And What Was)
Team: Fanon
Author: amanuensis1
Prompt: Judgment
Wordcount: Just under 7,000 (MS Word says 6826 without the headers)
Rating: R
Warnings: Infidelity
Summary: Neither epilogue-compliant nor EWE; seven separate demonstrations that you can't stop the signal.
Author’s Note: The prompt for this story was the tarot ( Read more... )

r, prompt: judgment, round i, fic, team fanon

Comments 102

jamie2109 April 3 2008, 12:23:38 UTC

This is so absolutely gorgeous. That last section really made my heart sing! I love how you've added those little bits in between each section while you're telling us the story, that indicate that it's not quite right yet. I think you've really covered the prompt well.

absynthedrinker April 3 2008, 12:37:13 UTC

Well this has a something for everyone. Malfoy's mouth and smile running as a thread throughout I thought was dead clever. This is extremely well done. Thanks so much

Bubba

norton_gale April 3 2008, 12:50:30 UTC

I love what you've done with this. Draco and Harry could get together at any time of their lives; what is inevitable is that they will. Beautifully told.

devian_11 April 3 2008, 13:35:35 UTC

Your writing was captivating, beautiful and well-flowing.
Very well done.

outofthisplace April 3 2008, 14:01:47 UTC

And Harry's telling himself this right up to the day they leave their lunch table at the London Muggle hotel they've dined at three times before and this time go upstairs to one of its rooms and spend three hours fucking each other into the mattress, consummating Harry's fascination with Draco Malfoy's mouth and pretty much every other part of him, and both of them go from being "Draco" and "Harry" back to "Malfoy" and "Potter" for every minute of it because there's nothing polite and nothing of new-found friendship in it-
Ok, I just love this whole delicious run on sentence and it's blunt hotness and.... oh, deliciousness. Just love.

I like the details carrying over between the vignettes, like Draco's charity work. And the hotel-fucking :-D. And... the hotel-fucking.

I really like the going back in time so they get together earlier and earlier and earlier!

(I am totally down for the Ginny/Neville, I think it makes plenty of sense!)

And the last one is just Perfect :)