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Happy H/D Holidays Fireelemental79

Jun 20, 2007 00:01

Author: kestrelsparhawk
Recipient: Fireelemental79
Title: In Which Harry Potter Discovers a River In Egypt (3/3)

( A River In Egypt, part three )

[long/chaptered fic], rated: nc-17, [fic], round: summer 2007

Comments 107

red_rahl June 19 2007, 15:11:11 UTC

What a tour de force! I must admit that I thoroughly enjoyed myself throughout the entire story! The plot was very interesting and the characters were believable and vastly entertaining! And for some reason, I really adore that Harry fixated on the undone bow on Draco's pants.

I like how the owl letters are interwoven throughout the story. They did a really fantastic job of presenting Draco's thoughts (so wonderfully snarky) without getting them muddled with Harry's narrative. Again, wanted to say this was an awesome, highly enjoyable story! *adores your Mill*

kestrelsparhawk July 14 2007, 03:06:52 UTC

Thank you! Loved your work as well! I'm glad you liked the fixation -- I think of it as just the sort of thing we do to focus off thinking about important things...

Glad you liked the letters -- it was all going to be Harry's POV, but that didn't work well, so I cheated the least I could.

ffahmed June 19 2007, 15:28:50 UTC

I agree with the above comment. The plot was incredibly interesting and the letters were great in the story, without being incredibly sappy/incongruous/OOC like a lot of letter-stories. Even though it's slightly AU, I loved all your characters. Oh and:

“My god, why all the clothes?”

Ahahahhahaha that was great. Draco slipping out of the rent-boy act for a second..ahahahaa

kestrelsparhawk July 14 2007, 03:08:27 UTC

I'm glad you liked it! I gather you (and others) were clear it was Draco? We worried a little about that...

and, of course, Draco WOULD get distracted by Harry's peculiar dressing style.

electricandroid June 19 2007, 18:57:44 UTC

genius. thank you. great read.

kestrelsparhawk July 14 2007, 03:09:31 UTC

Thank you! *purrs*

vickevire June 19 2007, 20:17:09 UTC

This was hot, intriguing, and throughtly amusing. Seriously, SO FUNNY! Gosh. I love it. =DDDD The macabre air dance and the motion sickness... hahaha!! Harry afraid of getting his foot stabbed by the 3 inch heels, knicker fetich... Harry drunk...! LOL So many great parts. The ending just kills me too! Perfect. I love Mill in it.

I didn't really get why Draco was working as a prostitute (if not for the money). Hm. Maybe I missed something? Or, right... he wasn't a sex worker, he just spotted Potter checking out rentboys and decided to disguise as a prostitute to trick Harry into going home with him...? Or not...? Need to reread. Fortunately, that won't exactly be a tedious thing to do :P Love, love, love the story! :D

kestrelsparhawk July 14 2007, 03:11:56 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you found it funny. That was one of Fire's specifications I thought I COULD fulfill, so I tried! I liked the air dance too. I'd so love to see that as a theatrical bit...

Yes, Draco was just trying to get an excuse to find out what Harry knew about Mill. He definitely doesn't need the money, although Harry still thinks he does.Did it make more sense the second time? (I'm trying to rewrite a little before I post it on lj.)

vickevire July 14 2007, 14:16:50 UTC

Yeah, I think what confused me was that Draco wrote that when Potter was out on the streets that first time he didn't look at Draco because Draco was disguised as a girl, so I thought he WAS a prostitute, and then I thought he wasn't and then I got doubtful again... LOL. Then I read it again and figured that you really don't know that first time what Draco actually does, why he's out there. Which leaves me insanely curious!

Two things I carve more of in this story is a) to know more about Draco's life and b) sex (because it was so hot and I want some where Draco's wearing his own face). I do think the story is absolutely delightful as it is, and I don't mean that you should cram in another sex scene in the story, it's just... I like the characters and this universe you've created, and, as the insatiable beast that I am, I carve more. I bet you know the feeling ;)

kestrelsparhawk July 14 2007, 14:54:03 UTC

To start at the end -- I know exactly how it feels! I try not to read WIPs as a result, though I foolishly began a couple by one writer who isn't updating just now. Not to mention we're all craving JKR's next...

I am working on a sequel -- as I noted, there's a lot of plot leftover -- but I don't guarantee you'll get Draco's face in the sex scene(s) because I love UST and am trying to learn how to write it well. OTOH, I'm also trying to learn how to write sex scenes well, so you never know. ;) )

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raelinschaos June 19 2007, 20:19:29 UTC

Absolutely wonderful. I loved your Draco he was very in character he was snarky and snooty and just brilliantly sexy (loved the knicker fetish). Harry was great as well trying hard to do a job he believed was the best way for him to help people, when really he was held back from being of any real use.

Loved the outcome Harry and Draco starting their own agency and trying for a relationship.

kestrelsparhawk July 14 2007, 03:14:02 UTC

Thank you! I love it when readers address the characters as people; I think of them as such, myself. I have a lot of sympathy for Harry, and I do think in the canon wizarding world, he'd have an awfully hard time working for the Ministry.

Glad you loved the outcome. I made enough plot to have written several stories, so I'll be (I hope) producing more about H, D, Mill and Lilac.