Destiny's Savage Heart by danceswithgary (Part 1 of 2)

[teot]

Title: Destiny's Savage Heart (Part 1 of 2)
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 21,492
Cover: Cover #2
Summary: The sky. The sea. Their destiny.

Written for the 2007 SV Harlequin Challenge

Notes: This story is very loosely based on the legends surrounding the colonization of Roanoke Island, Virginia in the late 1600's and my interpretation of Native

Comments

[jakrar]

Fantastic! I love this first half, with Alex/Itahu and K'El welcomed so easily and lovingly by their new parents and the tribe, and coming to bond so completely with each other in their new and happy lives. You give us a great view of their time with the tribe, with K'El's physical gifts and Itahu's keen intelligence allowing them to contribute to the well-being of the people who took them in, making them valued members of the group despite their differences. Beautiful scene where the brothers make love for the first time, and I had to grin at Itahu being jealous of K'El's attentions to others. Nice touch, too, to include versions of Lana and Whitney and Cassandra and Ryan. But, inevitably, Lionel appeared to tear our fated lovers apart, and take away Alex's memory and apparently (only apparently, right?) K'El's life. *growls at Lionel* Can't wait to read the rest!

One thing: You have Alex getting back to England in December of 1586, but at his mother's and brother's funeral in March of 1586. Shouldn't the return to England take place in December of 1585? Or am I figuring the timeline wrong?

[jakrar]

I'm glad you're enjoying some of my favorite parts.

And good grief yes, It's supposed to be 1585. I thought I cleaned all those up when I re-did my timeline. I'll have to fix it when I post to my LJ and SSA, I'm sure teot won't want to fix my mistakes here. Darn.

Thanks!