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HT100 Challenge #11: One To Grow On -- Hold On

Aug 08, 2009 21:27

This challenge was to expand on a previous drabble. The drabble I chose to expand/continue was "Change of Heart" which was written for the 'Change Canon' prompt, in which Beecher successfully calls off the hit on Hank.

Here's the continuation...

Title: Hold On
Prompt: 11 - One To Grow On
Word Count: 100

( Hold On )

ch 011 one to grow on, w: severina2001

Comments 6

ozsaur August 11 2009, 14:46:24 UTC

You nailed Toby's emotions perfectly. Wonderful descriptions!

severina2001 August 11 2009, 17:24:48 UTC

Oh. OH! Thank you! Because I really want to believe that no matter how angry Chris was, he'd take one look at Toby's face and just... everything would be okay. *believes*

trillingstar August 11 2009, 18:04:50 UTC

I really like this one, how you take us directly inside Toby's brain and you've written his turmoil so well. And, you know, DAWWWW.

severina2001 August 13 2009, 01:59:49 UTC

Woo! Thank you so much. I used to say that first person is my "cheat" because it's a lot easier to write. For that reason, I try not to use it much... but sometimes it just works.

roguemarch August 12 2009, 21:50:57 UTC

Oh you got Toby spot on!

severina2001 August 13 2009, 02:00:46 UTC

Yay! It's so amazing for you to say so. Thank you so much!

Also? YOUR ICON. Yummmm.