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HT100 Challenge #09: Workout - Gym Time

Aug 07, 2009 21:23

Title: Gym Time
Prompt: 09 - Workout
Word Count: 100 ( Read more... )

ch 009 workout, w: severina2001

Comments 8

ozsaur August 10 2009, 01:36:24 UTC

LOL Toby, you clever bastard!

You're really bringing some interesting insights into the characters with these drabbles.

severina2001 August 11 2009, 03:13:01 UTC

Thank you. I was/am really unsure about this one, actually, and was hoping that Keller didn't come off OOC. Still getting a handle on the voices.

nindevotee August 11 2009, 19:32:21 UTC

Hmm, with incentive like that who wouldn't grow to love gym time?
...Cute, sweet, hot & funny btw... :D

severina2001 August 13 2009, 01:55:40 UTC

I'd be willing to spend a few hours in the gym. ;) Thanks so much!

roguemarch August 12 2009, 21:49:44 UTC

OMG! That's awesome.

'Well. Huh.' --> that made me LOL!

severina2001 August 13 2009, 01:56:29 UTC

Awesome! I love hearing when something in particular works well for someone. Thank you!

trillingstar August 13 2009, 02:22:55 UTC

I think it's telling that Keller's system focuses on trade - this for that, bartering, bargaining, counter-offers. I'm not entirely sold on your voice for him here, but I do like the flavor you've given him.

severina2001 August 13 2009, 19:27:44 UTC

Nope, I agree with you. I debated on it for a while, especially that first line. This one almost got scrapped, but in the end I went for it. I'm not hearing them very well here. I liked the idea, though. :)