Rotten in the inside (aaaaand... part 5!)

[hannahdoo]

 Title: Rotten in the inside
Author: Hannahdoo
Characters/Pairings: Sam/Jo
Rating: R
Summary: Jo and Sam are dealing with the consecuences of BUaBS. Angst. 
Complete: YESSSS!

"Sentences written like this"  are  dialogue
(Sentences written like this) are thoughts (Jo's thoughts, as this chapter is Jo's POV)

He was serious about the shower thingy. When we

Comments

[dani_blondy]

Nice Ending and if you want more I wouldn't say no Tee Heee.

I like the Normalcy of them in this ficcy it's loverly :)

More More Please hehe

[hannahdoo]

Glad u liked it. Right now I'm half-way through another SamJo ficcie, but might consider starting a sequel when I'm done with that :) Thanks for your review!

[quiet_elle]

I liked how you ended the fic. I loved the little flashback and the quick insert of how she got fired form the bar - that was a nice touch.
My favourite line "It was much easier in bars, when I didn’t have time to think he was Sam Winchester. Brother to Dean Winchester. Son to John Winchester. " I dont know why but i loved it.

Theres just a little thing - this isnt my favoutire chapter and please dont be mad at me, but i dont think you wrote as well here as you have previously done. I cant put my finger on it exactly yet. For me this is different than the other POV's youve done, it feels different if you read it and then read the eariler Jo chapter.

I would also like to ask if you wouldnt mind me friending your journal so i can see other stuff you do.

[hannahdoo]

Thanks a lot for your review, Is silence, specially for telling me what you didn't like. I mean, it's really helpful to know what people who read one's fics don't like. Keeps one from repeating mistakes!
So yeah, there IS something I don't completely like about this chapter, too. Could be that my writing gets worse in the last chapters ;) or (most probably) that I'm not used to writing first person POV and it feels kind of weird.

Once again, thanks a lot, and feel free to friend my journal, though I don't have much more things to see in my LJ yet.

[meg_dallen]

This whole story has such a great idea and this chapter was beautiful :)

[hannahdoo]

Thanks a lot for your review :)I'm really glad you liked the story. Hope to give you some more fanfic you'll enjoy in the future.

[sweetlittlefire]

i've just gotten into supernatural this year and now i'm catching up on all the fanfiction. i was intrigued by the sam/jo pairing and i'm starting to like those two characters together! with this fic, i like them even more! :P

i like this fic a lot. it's written so well. it's dramatic/angsty in the right spots and fully as hell when dean turns up.

i agree with Is_Silence. The best part: "It was much easier in bars, when I didn’t have time to think he was Sam Winchester. Brother to Dean Winchester. Son to John Winchester. " That section stood out to me as well. It was really striking and memorable, and i approve!

great job, thanks for sharing this.
--ryan