Title: Songs Like Ghosts Fandom: Original Fiction Author: HalfshellVenus Rating: G Summary: Roads not taken. Author's Notes: For writers_choice and writerverse, and the prompt of "Radio
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the first couple lines sound like song lyrics. and this is so sad, but it has some logic to it - you might really want to leave, and know you might stagnate if you stay, but you still have very valid reasons (you love your mom, your sisters) for not going.
Sometimes people get trapped in places they don't really want to be, and then it becomes too late to leave. Striking out on your own at 20 is one thing, but if you wait another 15-20 years then a whole new cycle of life comes around that may only make the decision harder.
The melancholy in this is almost overwhelming. It's beautifully done, the desire to escape against the loyalty to home and family. There's a sense that they're trapped by love as much as duty, which makes it even harder to escape, but it's preventing them from living their own lives and chasing their own dreams. Neither option is a good one…
There's a sense that they're trapped by love as much as duty, which makes it even harder to escape That's completely true-- the combination of the two makes for a very solid prison, where self-doubts are the only things that ever get free. But I think the saddest thing in all of this is that we understand, and we know why it seems there's only one choice to make.
I think that's my drabble background coming through. Sometimes, my short stories are surprisingly dense in terms of the emotion/action in them. I thought this one would become longer, but it turned out that it was always intended to be very short.
There's a definite sense of feeling stuck, the days running together, not feeling like she can leave even if she wants to. It's a very relatable piece, with the character feeling bound to a place where she can't see a future for herself and yet she feels it would be too big of a personal sacrifice for her to leave her family. The sadness of the situation is conveyed very well.
with the character feeling bound to a place where she can't see a future for herself and yet she feels it would be too big of a personal sacrifice for her to leave her family. Thank you-- I really wanted to capture that sense of her being stuck and yet being at war with herself over the fact that leaving might come at far too high a cost.
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That's completely true-- the combination of the two makes for a very solid prison, where self-doubts are the only things that ever get free. But I think the saddest thing in all of this is that we understand, and we know why it seems there's only one choice to make.
Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
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I think that's my drabble background coming through. Sometimes, my short stories are surprisingly dense in terms of the emotion/action in them. I thought this one would become longer, but it turned out that it was always intended to be very short.
Thanks for reading!
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Thank you-- I really wanted to capture that sense of her being stuck and yet being at war with herself over the fact that leaving might come at far too high a cost.
Thanks for reading and commenting!
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