Comments | halfshellvenus: Prison Break Gen Fiction: "Seeking Answers In The Midnight Sky"' (Michael, Angst, PG)

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Prison Break Gen Fiction: "Seeking Answers In The Midnight Sky"' (Michael, Angst, PG)

Aug 13, 2010 01:15

Title: Seeking Answers In The Midnight Sky
Author: HalfshellVenus
Characters: Michael (Gen, Drama)
Rating: PG
Summary (S1): The night is a desperate time of new planning and self-doubt.
Author's Notes: Day 8 of the Bleeding Cuticles Roadkill Challenge.
Also for prisonbreak100 and writers_choice, this is "Moon."

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( Contingencies and endless recalibrations... )

my_fic, bleeding_cuticles, pb_gen

Comments 5

clair_de_lune August 13 2010, 13:12:48 UTC

I like the way you wrote Michael's late night ruminations. Given how his mind works, of course he would play and replay every detail of his plan. And this:
Sleep stole the few precious hours he had left
Indeed. Sleeping probably felt like an obnoxious waste of time.

halfshellvenus August 13 2010, 17:48:30 UTC

Given how his mind works, of course he would play and replay every detail of his plan.
Especially when parts of the plan aren't working just yet-- he thought he'd covered every possibility, but the reality was that a lot of desperate improvising was necessary the farther into the timeline they got.

Sleeping probably felt like an obnoxious waste of time.
It's terrible when you're racing a deadline that could end with your brother being killed. Sleep is a weakness that stands in your way, then.

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halfshellvenus August 13 2010, 17:49:49 UTC

Thank you! Funny how trying to write a complete story every night is actually producing more stream-of-consciousness language that's more vivid than a lot of what I've been writing in the last year or so.

msgenevieve August 15 2010, 10:49:37 UTC

In the loneliness of night, he felt the remaining days slip away as the lunar cycles waxed and waned.

God. We've come so far since S1, but whenever I read something like this, it pulls me straight back there. Beautiful writing.

halfshellvenus August 16 2010, 06:51:00 UTC

I'll always love S1 the most, for the mood and the possibilities, for the race against time and the audacity of Michael's mission, and for those wonderful secondary characters we both enjoy.

That S1 Michael-- and his lonely quest to save Lincoln-- is still my favorite Michael of all. There's such a richness to his character and to the basic setup that it's hard, even after all this time, to leave it alone!