Prison Break FanFiction: Falling Away

[halfshellvenus]

Author: HalfshellVenus
Category: Michael’s POV (Genfic)
Rating: PG
Summary: Michael tries to remember his mother even as the memories slowly slip away.
Author’s Notes: Written for the prisonbreak100 challenge, where I have the Gen pairing of Lincoln and Michael. This is for prompt #85, “She.”

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[wentworth801]

There was one question he had asked only once: “Do you think Mom misses us right now as much as we miss her?” He could feel his brother’s body stiffen behind him, before a careful reply was given. He never knew what was wrong about that, whether it was him forgetting that Lincoln wasn’t supposed to miss her so much-or remembering that he did.
That's so sad.

If Lincoln had been the younger brother, their lives would have followed a different path.
Hmm...possible idea for an AU fanfic?

Now that Lincoln is in prison, Michael sees him every week.
I tend to forget that Lincoln has been in prison for a while.

Her eyes, so like Lincoln’s, would forgive him for starting to forget.
Great last line. This whole fic was great. I liked how Lincoln and Michael switched roles.

[halfshellvenus]

I tend to forget that Lincoln has been in prison for a while.
I think it's approximately 6 years on this murder stint, which is a long, dispiriting time...

Great last line. This whole fic was great. I liked how Lincoln and Michael switched roles.
Thank you so much :)

I think Michael is exactly the kind of younger brother who would understand that, at some point, each of us has to be the grown-up in turn. He'd see that need, and rise to it-- he's not self-centered enough (thank goodness) to expect to be babied forever.

Thanks for your comments. It's nice to be hearing from you so regularly on my Gen pieces. Glad you enjoyed this one too. :)

[lissa_bear]

Her eyes, so like Lincoln’s, would forgive him for starting to forget.

Why do you do these things to me? Break my heart in such a beautiful way?

[halfshellvenus]

Why do you do these things to me? Break my heart in such a beautiful way?

:) You know I try...

I want you to feel what Michael feels, to become him as you read the story.

I want you to miss his mother like he does...

[lissa_bear]

Well, for me, you've absolutely hit the mark!

[halfshellvenus]

:) My work here is done, then. I love your sentimental, feeling side, Elissa. It is so much like my own.

Read the Supernatural one I just posted? I think it will knock your socks off :0

[thelana]

Ah, so much sadness on so many levels. And so beautiful :(

The world moves on without Lincoln, and that life is a tale from someone else’s book.

*wibbles*

He thinks that his mother’s eyes, if he could see her right now, would look very much the same. He has studied them in so many photographs, trying his utmost to remember who she was.

That is so true. How often we remember events just because there are photographs of it. And you sometimes wonder if these are really real memories, or if you only remember them because of the photographs or if you really remember what was *real* or if you just remember what the photograph tells you.

[halfshellvenus]

How often we remember events just because there are photographs of it. And you sometimes wonder if these are really real memories, or if you only remember them because of the photographs or if you really remember what was *real* or if you just remember what the photograph tells you.

And when the person in the photograph is gone, this creates such guilt because you feel you should remember on your own and it's devastating to wonder if you don't.

I'm glad you like this one. I hoped to catch some of that desire to cling to every memory of her even as he loses precious little bits. Those details that a child thinks are important-- childlike things that are so different from what adults focus on. Those little things are what catch us by surprise. Not always what someone thought about important issues, but the tilt of their smile in a certain light...

[thelana]

Randomly, there is one thing I would like to mention.

Muscular lap?

(not that I'm complaining or anything...)

Just saw that tofu posted another WIP, seems to be the church porn that you wont like. Looks seriously unfinished though (with like author notes and such).

[halfshellvenus]

Randomly, there is one thing I would like to mention.
Muscular lap?
I went back and forth on the wording. Originally, I had "unsoft", but soft is repeated later in that paragraph.

It's hard to find a euphemism for a man's lap not being comfy-soft which doesn't lead to a double-entendre of... you know. That was the best I could come up with. "Sinewed lap" seemed too out-there to even consider. I don't want to draw that much attention to it.

Mainly, it's for contrast. It's a comforting lap, but still... not the same. Never the same as his mother's. :(

You know you are hell on my tissue box!

[dawnstarrising]

But his brother’s fierce love helped him to survive, and he can’t deny that when it cost Lincoln so much. There was no-one to give Lincoln the care he gave to Michael.

Beautiful and heart breaking as always.

Re: You know you are hell on my tissue box!

[halfshellvenus]

There was no-one to give Lincoln the care he gave to Michael.
Lincoln saved Michael when he couldn't save himself. It's the one thing in his whole life he did most right.

I'm very glad you liked this one. :)

There's so much that is destroyed and lastingly tragic when a child loses a parent. I wanted to bring that out, painful as it is...

[clex_monkie89]

I love this a lot. Especially... everything really.

[halfshellvenus]

Thank you, Clex :)

Doing my best to make Mama Scofield so worth missing...

[clex_monkie89]

You know what there needs to be? A Mama Scofield Fic-A-Thon. Because she was obviously a worthy person and there's not enough fic about her out therte.

[thelana]

You know, it would help if we, you know, knew her name. Or like anything about her before we do one of those :D