Supernatural Slash Drabble: Under Cover Of Night (PG-13)

[halfshellvenus]

Title: Under Cover Of Night
Author: HalfshellVenus
Characters: Sam/Dean (Wincest)
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Drabble on "Secrets beneath the blankets" for deadbeat_nymph.

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"I've done this before," Sam says, the words falling in a whisper between breaths.

"Done what? This?" Dean emphasizes his words with a tight thrust and twist that makes Sam moan

Comments

[deanshot]

You're very good at the drabble type fic.
I love the title you picked for it.
It was like poetry itself as I read it.
Thanks for sharing.

[halfshellvenus]

I love the title you picked for it.
It's a common phrase for military uses, but it really fit with deadbeat_nymph's prompt-- and the idea of sneaking in both secrets and lies in the dark.

Glad you liked it! Thank you. :)

[runedgirl]

Dean rides to the poetry of sweet agony on Sam's face, remembering to reach down and help him along to the end.

Even as Sam is hurting him, Dean *still* takes care of him and covers up his own pain. Such love.

Kat

[halfshellvenus]

Even as Sam is hurting him, Dean *still* takes care of him and covers up his own pain. Such love.
And Sam doesn't even realize that he's telling Dean something Dean doesn't want to know. So typical, and so "ouch."

Love the icon. :)

[stormcloude]

Oh that's lovely.

[halfshellvenus]

Thank you very much! :)

[deadbeat_nymph]

Like always, you say so much in so few words. I feel that Dean loves Sam just a little bit more than Sam loves him, that he's more attached, at least. I get a sense of that here, that slight imbalance, that longing for something you already have. That feeling of intoxication, like the loved one's love is never enough. Even in canon I think it's clear: Sam could live without Dean, could survive, but Dean couldn't without Sam. Which is, of course, why life without Sam would be a worse hell for Dean than, well, Hell. And so, Sam is Dean's 'waiting darkness', regardless of what happens.

And I love the diction. I love the effect of the ess alliteration here: Sam's gasps soon swallow . Alliteration is a tricky thing; sometimes it sounds contrived, but here it really works. And, Dean rides to the poetry of sweet agony on Sam's face, is just lovely.

Actually, as I re-read it, the diction is really impressive overall. Every line has an aesthetic quality that seduces me.

Thank you for my drabble. :D

[halfshellvenus]

I feel that Dean loves Sam just a little bit more than Sam loves him.
I've thought that since Season 1, even with just the most basic fact that Sam could leave Dean but Dean couldn't leave him. Not to mention cutting Dean off for several years. :(

that longing for something you already have.
I love this phrasing, because I know that exact feeling, and when you're the one who loves more it's very real. Sam's here now, but why and for how long?

is a tricky thing; sometimes it sounds contrived, but here it really works.
I love alliteration far too much, but in this case it was entirely accidental. The words came out really quickly on this one-- hardly any wordsmithing or the usual forcing up or down to 100 words. That's pretty rare!

Every line has an aesthetic quality that seduces me.
Eeeee! \o/

Thank you for my drabble. :D
With feedback like this, the pleasure was all mine! ♥

[dove95]

Your drabbles are why I love them so much :)

Did you get to take a peek at the ones I wrote recently for lj gifts? They're kinda schmoopy to me, but I like 'em.

Happy holidays to you!

[halfshellvenus]

I missed those-- probably saw the post and then immediately forgot, because my brain is like a leaky bucket. Moreso this time of year. I'll peek at them!

Glad you liked this one. Merry Christmas!