EDIT!!!
I made some changes to the last few pages and added two more pages that complete issue #1. I think you'll like the meeting between Angela and David in this version than in the previos entry.
“Dual Complex” by Michelle Poust
Page 1
P1 - Establishing shot of a field. The focal point is a huge tree and nearby is a lake. There is a little girl with ponytails (Angela, Age 5) wearing a makeshift robber’s mask. She’s carrying a bag and looking as if she’s on the lookout.
P2 - Medium shot of Angela looking both left and right standing in front of tree.
P3 - Birds eye view from someone (David, Age 6) sitting on top of a branch looking down on Angela. Panel shows feet dangling from where David is sitting with a toy gun. Angela has no idea there’s someone on the limb watching her.
P4 - Medium shot of Angela standing next to the tree sighing in relief.
P5 - Same shot only we now see leaves rustle and fall behind her. She is startled as she hears a voice (off-panel) coming from above her in the tree.
Voice: (off-panel above) Got ya!
Angela: Huh?!
Page 2
P1 - Extreme shot looking up from the ground. Angela is looking up in the trees over her shoulder. We see David jumping down from the limb coming down on her.
David: YAHHHHHHHH!!!!!
Angela: AHHHHHHHHH!!!!
P2 - Full shot of David sitting on top of the Angela who is struggling to get away from under him.
David: Thought you could get away, huh?
Angela: Oww!! Get offa David! You’re… HEAVY!!!
P3 - David gets off of her. He is sitting next to her with his arms crossed looking annoyed. Angela is getting up brushing off her clothes while trying to catch her breath.
David: You’re no fun…
Angela: Says who? I wanna play the hero and you never let me!
P4 - Medium shot. Side view of Angela crossing her arms with a “humph!” expression. David stands proudly behind her with his thumb pointing at him.
David: I told you before. I’m the hero because I say so!
Angela: I’m not playing anymore!
P5 - View changes so “camera” is in front of Angela. She looks over her shoulder at her brother looking as though she’s being somewhat forgiving. He has his hand over his heart and one hand behind his back.
David: Oh come on Angie! It’s just a game. Look, I’ll even let you play the hero next time, ok?
Angela: Really..?
David: Cross my heart!
P6 - Back view of David. Angela is hugging him, happily. David has his fingers crossed behind his back.
Angela: You’re the bestest brother ever!
David: I know!
Inset Panel - Close up of Angela looking him dead in the eye accusingly.
Angela: You have your fingers crossed, don’t you?
David: Eh-heh…
Page 3
P1 - The two are sitting by the lake looking up at the sky. Angela is sitting with her arms wrapped around her legs and David is lying down next to her.
Angela: David?
David: Yeah?
Angela: Can I ask you a question?
David: What?
P2 - Shot of Angela looking down at her feet.
Angela: If I were in big trouble… would you protect me?
P3 - close up on David looking over at Angela, confused.
David: Wha’ kinda question is that?
P4 - Side view. David is sitting up looking at Angela who is still looking at her feet. She wraps herself up tighter.
Angela: Would you?
David: ‘Course I would!
Angela: You’re not crossing your fingers are you?
P5 - David stands up and Angela looks up at him, confused.
Angela: Where’re you going?
P6 - Shot of David placing his hand over his heart and one hand in the air with a scout’s honor gesture.
David: I promise you, Angela May Richards, I will always protect you, no matter what!
Inset Panel - Close up of David smiling while winking.
David: Happy?
Page 4
P1 - Close up of Angela smiling.
Angela: yeah…
P2 - Transition. Same view only Angela is now an adult in a police uniform and is wearing a headset. She has a determined look on her face.
Angela: All right guys! We’re moving in! Cover me!
P3 - Wide shot of Angela leading a team of officers about to charge into a huge warehouse. There are police cars hidden between buildings. There’s also disguised armored van with an antenna sticking out of it.
Angela: Team A, take the left! Team C, the right! My team we go in through the front, Alright?!
All: YES MA’AM!
P4: Long full shot of Angela loading her gun smiling, looking to the readers’ right.
Angela: Let’s do this!
Page 5
P1 - Establishing shot of Angela’s group surrounding the front door. She stands with her back to the door ready to bust in.
P2 - Close up on her face looking at the door.
Angela: On the count of 3… 1… 2…
P3 - Wide shot of Angela busting the door open, pointing her gun at a group of criminals. Her team is also stands ready to fire behind her. They look like they might work for a mafia type group, but they’re NOT sophisticated or in suits, nor do they look that intelligent. They wear pants, shirts, jackets that are dark colored, maybe wear skullcaps. They look like someone you don’t want to mess with on the streets.
Angela: 3!
P4 - Shot of several criminals shocked and scrambling. The criminal closest to the front is their leader. He is bigger than the others.
Leader: Shit! Cops!
Thug: RUN!
P5 - Downward shot of Angela still having the gun aimed.
Angela: I suggest you make it easier on yourselves and give up! We’ve got you surrounded!
P6 - Shot from behind the leader, he is reaching for a gun. Angela still has the gun pointed at him looking annoyed.
Leader - What happen ta readin’ our rights?!
P7 - Close up on Angela’s eye that widens in suspense.
Angela: EVERYONE DOWN!!!
Page 6
P1 - Shot of leader shooting an automatic weapon (probably a TMP) at the officers. Angela ducks behind a nearby crate. Officers are taking cover, but one officer gets caught in the crossfire.
Officer (on who got hit): AHHhhhhh!!!
SFX: (What ever the sound of a TMP makes.) Rattatatatatatata… or something along those lines…
P2 - Angel is hiding behind a crate looking angry.
Angela: Why do they always make things difficult?
P3 - Shot of leader yelling to his comrades. The criminals scatter.
Leader: Ya like that, huh?! / ALL RIGHT MEN MOVE OUT!!!
Thug: Yes Boss!
P4 - View of Angela running behind a row of crates, trying to get some safe distance. She’s talking into her radio.
Angela: TEAM A! TEAM C! Move in! / Connor, I have a man down, get a medic here as soon as things are clear!
Connor (voice coming from headset): Hear ya' loud and clear Ang! Medics are on the way! About how many are there?
Angela: 20, give or take!
P5 - Angela is crouched on the ground, looking around a corner of a wall; we now see a shadow of a figure above her.
Connor: (voice coming from her headset) Gotcha! You know what to do!
P6 - Angel looking up in slight surprise.
Page 7
P1 - camera changes view to look up at leader who is on top of a crate, pointing his gun at Angela.
Leader: miss me baby?!
P2 - Shot of Angel rolling out of the way, just barely clipping the shoulder of her jacket. Shots hit the wall where she was a second ago.
P3 - Angel takes aim, and shoots.
SFX: BANG! BANG!
P4 - Angel’s shot hits the leader’s gun, knocking it out of his hand, and makes him fall backwards a little.
Leader: AHH!!!
Page 8
P1 - Leader holds hand in pain.
Leader: FUCKING BITCH! Who the hell do you-?
P2 - Angela is jumping at him smacking him across the face with the butt of her gun.
SFX: SMACK!
P3 - Angela roundhouse kicks him in the stomach and knocks him off the crate falling down to the ground floor.
Angela: YAHHH!!!!
P4 - Leader in on the ground holding his stomach. Angela lands on her feet next to him. Readers only see her legs and an enveloping shadow over the leader. He stares at her feet, scared.
Angela: Now then…
SFX: Ta-tap (sound of her shoes hitting the ground as she lands)
P5 - Shot of Angela pointing the gun at the leader.
Angela: You’re going to tell me everything I want to know… Who’s your provider, where to find him, his plans, yadda yadda yadda! Oh yeah, and the name of your tailor you’ll be paying to fix my favorite coat!
Page 9
P1 - Side view, leader looking up at Angela, yelling.
Leader: NO WAY! I AIN’T SQUELLIN’! ‘Specially not to some two-bit bitch cop!
P2 - Angel shoves the gun into his nose. The leader looks at the gun cross-eyed.
Angela: Oh, I think Mr. Magnum says you will.
Leader: You can’t do that! You’re a cop!
P3 - Same view with Angela cocking the gun. Leader is freaking out.
SFX: (Gun cocking) Ka-chink!
Angela: And not a very nice one, either.
P4 - Close-up Angela is smirking. Over her shoulder is someone with a knife standing behind her, getting ready to stab her.
Leader: GREEVES! HIS NAMES GREEVES!!!
Angela: Now we’re talking…
P5 - Small panel, close up of a handgun firing.
SFX: BANG!
P6 - Man who was behind Angela drops knife. He holds his bloody hand in pain. Angela is turning around in surprise.
Man: Ahhhhhh!!!!!
Angela: What the hell?!
P7 - Angela looking up on a walkway/second floor of the warehouse. She looks shocked.
Angela: Who’s up there?!
Page 10
Splash page - Back view of Angela looking up at the second floor of the warehouse. On the second floor of the warehouse there is a man in a black jacket with blue trim and a pair of sunglasses, looking down at her. It looks like an older version of David.
Inset panel a closer/ clearer image of the man.
Page 11
P1 - View from the second floor, the man begins to run away. Below we see Angela yelling at him.
Angela: Freeze! Police!
P2 - view is at Angela’s level. She points her gun at the man, but he is ignoring her. He is running toward a window with a lock on it.
Angela: STOP OR I’LL SHOOT!
P3 - Mid-range view of man shooting his gun in front of him.
SFX - BANG! BANG!
P4 - View of the lock on the window getting hit and broken off.
SFX - (I’ll get back to you on that one…)
P5 - Close up of Angela firing her gun.
SFX - BANG!
P6 - View of the man jumping through the window. We see the shot of Angela’s bullet hit the frame of the window.
SFX: KRRRSHHHHH!!!!!
Page 12
P1 - On the other side of the window, we see the man jump onto a roof a building next to the warehouse.
P2 - Side view of Angela still holding her gun in the air. We see the leader at her feet trying to get away.
Angela: Dammit…
P3 - View of the Leader scared stiff in his tracks.
Angela: And where do you think you’re going?!
P4 - Over the shoulder view pf Leader looking up from the ground. Angela stands with her gun pointing at him again. She looks at him with a snide look. Behind her we see cops handcuffing criminals. One officer is taking care of the guy the man shot.
Angela: You’ve got some talking to do.
Page 13
P1 - Angela is sitting at her desk. She seems a little dazed. On her desk is a pile of paperwork in front of her, a phone, and a few pictures on her desk. One of her family, maybe one of her wedding, one of her daughter and particularly one of her and David when they were kids from the beginning of the story.
P2 - ¾ view of Angela looking a little surprised (or rather, just waking up from her daze) as a newspaper is thrown on her desk.
Connor (voice from off-panel): Congrats, Officer!
Angela: Ah-!?
P3 - Connor sits on the edge of Angela’s desk. He is dressed in a police uniform and has sandy blonde hair that is slicked back. He also has bright blue eyes and looks very friendly. He smiles as Angela looks up at him.
Angela: Oh, Connor. It’s just you... / What’s up?
Connor: Only me? I’m hurt. / Have you seen the news? Your bust made the front page! We’re one step closer to figuring out who the big Kahuna of this underground organization is and shutting them down permanently! / How do you feel?!
P4 - Side view of Angela slumping back in her chair looking exhausted. Connor looks at her with concern.
Angela: Exhausted…
Connor: You okay? You haven’t been yourself since the bust. What’s on your mind?
Angela: It’s nothing…
P5 - Mid-shot of Connor crossing his arms in pride looking smug.
Connor: Yeah right! You can’t fool a Grade A+ Police interrogator!
P6 - Angela looking down at the newspaper. Her hands are holding her head up.
Angela: You too damn good for your own sake.
Connor: (off-panel) Naturally.
Angela: Let’s just say, I thought I saw that I think I knew before…
Connor: (off-panel) Who?
Inset panel: Close up on Angela’s face. Something has caught her eye on the newspaper.
Page 14
P1 - Shot looking down over her shoulder at the newspaper. Be sure to get picture of her and her brother as kids included in the panel. Image on the newspaper is in front of the warehouse of offices taking criminals out. Angela is one of the main officers on the page. Next to the warehouse is the building the man from the bust jumped onto.
Inset panel: Close-up on the top of the neighboring building, we see the man from the bust.
Angela: That’s him!
P2 - View from the newspaper looking up at Angela and Connor looking down at the paper. Angela is looking off to the side where the pictures on her desk would be.
Connor: You know him? / I didn’t see him at the scene.
P3 - View changes to behind Angela. She is staring at the picture of her and her brother. The phone starts to ring.
SFX: BRRRRIIIINNNNNGGGGG….. BRRRRIIINNNNNNGGGGG!!!!
P4 - Close-up on the image of her and her brother. Phone is still ringing.
Angela (thought): David…?
SF:BRRRRIINNNNNGGGG…. BRRRRRRIIIIIINNNNNGGGG!!!
Page 15
P1 - Angela is entranced by the photo and completely disregards the phone. Connor answers the phone for Angela.
Connor: City Police Dep- Oh hey! / Yes she’s right here. One moment please. / Hey Angie?
P2 - Connor hands the phone to Angela as he gets up to leave. Angela is brought back into reality with a bit of a “Wha..?!” expression on her face. Connor looks playful having awoken Angela from her little “daydream”.
Connor: AnnNNnnnggg…. PhooOOOoneee!!
Angela: Oh! Sorry Connor!
Connor: Take it easy, ok?
Angela: Thanks…
P3 - Close of Angela talking on the phone. She looks relieved, and smiles.
Angela: This is Officer- Oh! James! How are you, honey?
P4 - On the other side of the phone line. Angle looking down on a man, Angela’s husband, standing behind a stove cooking a dinner, probably spaghetti. He’s tall, kind of lanky, clean-cut with sandy blonde hair. Dresses nicely and wears glasses, so he looks intelligent. He looks down at his side at their daughter tugging on his pants leg holding a doll. She looks a bit like Angela when she was a child only she has her father’s hair color. You can tell Angela is blessed with a loving family.
James: Fine! Fine! Rachael and I just got home from daycare and-
Rachael: -Dadddddddddyyy! I wanna talk to mommy!
James: Hold on, Rachael wants to talk to her mommy!
P5 - Mid shot of Rachael happily talking on the phone now.
Rachael: Hello Mommy!
Angela: (voice coming from phone) Hello sweetheart, How are you?
Rachael: Goood! I drew you a picture for you today! I want to show you!
Page 16
P1 - Angela is starting to straighten things on her desk obviously planning on leaving soon. Her head tends to look in the direction of the picture of her and her brother unconsciously.
Angela: Why thank you sweetie! I’ll be home soon to see it, ok?
Rachael: (voice coming from phone) Ok!
Angela: Let me talk to daddy and I’ll be home soon. I love you!
Rachael: (from phone) I love you too, mommy! Bye! Bye!
P2 - Shot of James talking on the phone while Rachael plays with her doll.
James: She’s excited. Congratulations on making the cover story, dear.
Angela: Thanks…
James: You don’t sound too thrilled about it. Is something wrong?
P3 - Angela is putting the newspaper away in her messenger bag, she looks a little down. She rests the phone on her shoulder as she talks into it.
Angela: Everything’s fine… it’s just… / I think I saw someone I haven’t seen in a really long time.
James: (on phone) Who?
P4 - Angela holds the picture of her and her brother in her hands.
Angela: My brother…
P5 - Angela puts the picture in her bag and looks like she wants to end the phone conversation like NOW.
Angela: I know! I know! I haven’t seen him since I was 10, but… / Can we talk about this when I get home?
James: Of course! But, would you mind picking up some bread on your way home?
P6 - Angela is putting on her coat getting ready to leave.
Angela: Sure. I’ll be home soon. / I love you. Bye.
P7 - Angela waves goodbye to other officers as she leaves the building through double doors.
Angela: (thought) But I just can’t shake the feeling that something big is about to happen.
Page 17
P1 - Establishing shot of a small sidewalk grocery store. The streets are filled with people passing by. In the foreground we see the close-up from the shins down of someone wearing blue jeans and black shoes.
P2 - Medium shot of Angela standing in the checkout lane behind an elderly old woman who has slot of groceries still being scanned. The cashier is a middle-aged man. Angela is minding her own business and stares off into space.
Angela: (thought) Was that really you, David?
P3 - Close-up on Angela who is still staring off in space.
Angela: (thought) But what connection would you have to the bust? For your sake I hope that wasn’t you…
P4 - Same shot only something has caught her attention.
P5 - Shot behind Angela. She is looking outside the window. We see the figure of “David” from the night of the bust. He is obviously staring straight back at her.
Inset panel: Closer view of the man.
Angela: It’s him!
P6 - The man begins to turn and walk away. He knows he’s been seen, but doesn’t rush off yet.
Angela: Oh no you don’t! Not today!
Page 18
P1 - Angela takes her groceries starts making her way past the register and the elderly woman.
Woman: How rude!
Cashier: Hey! You gonna pay for that or am I callin’ the police?!
P2 - Angela drops money off in front of the cashier. He’s a bit stupefied.
Angela: I am the police. / Keep the change.
P3 - Angela is standing outside the grocery store and is looking to her left (reader’s right) as the man ignores her calling and rushes past people.
Angela: Wait! I just want to talk to you!
P4 - Angela starts chasing after him. They’re both weaving in and out between people. He’s further ahead than she is.
Random person: Hey watch it!
Angela: Excuse me.
Random person 2: The nerve!
Angela: Pardon me!
P5 - Angela sees him ducks into an alley. She is irritated.
Angela: (thought) Well aren’t you creative in escape routes.
Page 19
P1 - Angela makes it around the corner only to see that he’s jumped over a gated road block.
Angela: Dammit!
P2 - Angela makes it over the fence. She leaves her bag behind on the other side of the fence.
Angela: What’s he playing? Cat and mouse?
P3 - Angela starts running again. She pulls out her gun out of her jacket while doing so.
Angela: (thought) Better play it safe. Never know if he’s leading me into a trap.
P4 - She comes to a four way alley. It looks deserted and junked up. On the sides of the buildings are stairways that lead to different floors of the buildings. Angela looks confused and angered. She holds her gun close to her and looks alert.
Angela: Damn… Where did he go?!
Page 20
P1 - The man sneaks up on her standing about 3 feet behind her. She knows he’s behind her.
Angela: Alright you, enough games.
P2 - Angela turns around and points the gun at him. She has a stern look and he is calm.
Angela: Who are you? And what were you doing at the warehouse that night? Cause if you have info I want, you better spill it.
P3 - The man, who actually IS David, stays completely still, unphased by her words. He grabs her wrist tightly squeezing her hard enough she drops the gun. Angela refuses to give in. and has a hand over his fist.
David: You really shouldn’t point guns at someone unless you’re really intent on shooting them.
Angela: Errr!!
P4 - Angela throws a punch at his face with her free hand but misses as his head tilts out of the way.
Angela: Eee-YAHHHH!!!
P5 - Medium shot of David spinning her around and has her in a neckhold. She claws at his arm to try to break free. She is angered while he still remains calm.
Angela: Let… Go… of me!!!
P6 - Close up of David speaking in her ear. He has a slight smirk on his expression. She looks at him out of the corner of her eye, obviously wanting to beat the daylights out of him.
David: I’ll let go when you settle down, young lady.
Page 21
P1 - David releases his hold on her. She starts to fall forward and her hands instinctively go to her throat to catch her breath.
Angela: *cough! Cough!*
P2 - Angela is on the ground still recovering with her eyes shut tight. David looks at her, his expression is kind of sad looking. Maybe he feels bad for nearly suffocating her.
Angela: What were you trying to do? KILL ME?!
P3 - Close up shot of Angela, she is shocked by what David is telling her.
David: You and your family need to get out of here…/ now…
Angela: What…?
P4 - Angela looks up at him, but he’s already walking away.
Angela: Why are you telling me this?
P5 - Shot changes so that we see David in the foreground but we see Angela starting to get up behind him. Her head still faces the ground.
Angela: Where are you going?! You still haven’t told me why you were at the warehouse. But more specifically-
P6 - Close up on the back of David’s head.
Angela: (off panel) -who are you?!
P7 - Same shot only David is looking over his shoulder at her.
Page 22
P1 - Side view of Angela. Close-up on her face which is shocked, not by his words but she now knows for sure that this man is in fact David. Her head is still tilted down.
David: Get out of here now, Angie. / Or else…
Angela: (quietly) David?
P2 - Angela sticks her hand out like she’s reaching for something that’s just out of her range. She calls out of her brother.
Angela: DAVID! WAIT!
P3 - Shot changes to over her shoulder looking in front of her. David has disappeared.
Angela: No!
P4 - She runs forward a little looking around.
P5 - She stops in her tracks, looking down empty alleys seeing no trace of him.
Angela: He’s gone…
End of Issue 1
-Michelle
“Dual Complex” by Michelle Poust
Page 1
P1 - Establishing shot of a field. The focal point is a huge tree and nearby is a lake. There is a little girl with ponytails (Angela, Age 5) wearing a makeshift robber’s mask. She’s carrying a bag and looking as if she’s on the lookout.
P2 - Medium shot of Angela looking both left and right standing in front of tree.
P3 - Birds eye view from someone (David, Age 6) sitting on top of a branch looking down on Angela. Panel shows feet dangling from where David is sitting with a toy gun. Angela has no idea there’s someone on the limb watching her.
P4 - Medium shot of Angela standing next to the tree sighing in relief.
P5 - Same shot only we now see leaves rustle and fall behind her. She is startled as she hears a voice (off-panel) coming from above her in the tree.
Voice: (off-panel above) Got ya!
Angela: Huh?!
Page 2
P1 - Extreme shot looking up from the ground. Angela is looking up in the trees over her shoulder. We see David jumping down from the limb coming down on her.
David: YAHHHHHHHH!!!!!
Angela: AHHHHHHHHH!!!!
P2 - Full shot of David sitting on top of the Angela who is struggling to get away from under him.
David: Thought you could get away, huh?
Angela: Oww!! Get offa David! You’re… HEAVY!!!
P3 - David gets off of her. He is sitting next to her with his arms crossed looking annoyed. Angela is getting up brushing off her clothes while trying to catch her breath.
David: You’re no fun…
Angela: Says who? I wanna play the hero and you never let me!
P4 - Medium shot. Side view of Angela crossing her arms with a “humph!” expression. David stands proudly behind her with his thumb pointing at him.
David: I told you before. I’m the hero because I say so!
Angela: I’m not playing anymore!
P5 - View changes so “camera” is in front of Angela. She looks over her shoulder at her brother looking as though she’s being somewhat forgiving. He has his hand over his heart and one hand behind his back.
David: Oh come on Angie! It’s just a game. Look, I’ll even let you play the hero next time, ok?
Angela: Really..?
David: Cross my heart!
P6 - Back view of David. Angela is hugging him, happily. David has his fingers crossed behind his back.
Angela: You’re the bestest brother ever!
David: I know!
Inset Panel - Close up of Angela looking him dead in the eye accusingly.
Angela: You have your fingers crossed, don’t you?
David: Eh-heh…
Page 3
P1 - The two are sitting by the lake looking up at the sky. Angela is sitting with her arms wrapped around her legs and David is lying down next to her.
Angela: David?
David: Yeah?
Angela: Can I ask you a question?
David: What?
P2 - Shot of Angela looking down at her feet.
Angela: If I were in big trouble… would you protect me?
P3 - close up on David looking over at Angela, confused.
David: Wha’ kinda question is that?
P4 - Side view. David is sitting up looking at Angela who is still looking at her feet. She wraps herself up tighter.
Angela: Would you?
David: ‘Course I would!
Angela: You’re not crossing your fingers are you?
P5 - David stands up and Angela looks up at him, confused.
Angela: Where’re you going?
P6 - Shot of David placing his hand over his heart and one hand in the air with a scout’s honor gesture.
David: I promise you, Angela May Richards, I will always protect you, no matter what!
Inset Panel - Close up of David smiling while winking.
David: Happy?
Page 4
P1 - Close up of Angela smiling.
Angela: yeah…
P2 - Transition. Same view only Angela is now an adult in a police uniform and is wearing a headset. She has a determined look on her face.
Angela: All right guys! We’re moving in! Cover me!
P3 - Wide shot of Angela leading a team of officers about to charge into a huge warehouse. There are police cars hidden between buildings. There’s also disguised armored van with an antenna sticking out of it.
Angela: Team A, take the left! Team C, the right! My team we go in through the front, Alright?!
All: YES MA’AM!
P4: Long full shot of Angela loading her gun smiling, looking to the readers’ right.
Angela: Let’s do this!
Page 5
P1 - Establishing shot of Angela’s group surrounding the front door. She stands with her back to the door ready to bust in.
P2 - Close up on her face looking at the door.
Angela: On the count of 3… 1… 2…
P3 - Wide shot of Angela busting the door open, pointing her gun at a group of criminals. Her team is also stands ready to fire behind her. They look like they might work for a mafia type group, but they’re NOT sophisticated or in suits, nor do they look that intelligent. They wear pants, shirts, jackets that are dark colored, maybe wear skullcaps. They look like someone you don’t want to mess with on the streets.
Angela: 3!
P4 - Shot of several criminals shocked and scrambling. The criminal closest to the front is their leader. He is bigger than the others.
Leader: Shit! Cops!
Thug: RUN!
P5 - Downward shot of Angela still having the gun aimed.
Angela: I suggest you make it easier on yourselves and give up! We’ve got you surrounded!
P6 - Shot from behind the leader, he is reaching for a gun. Angela still has the gun pointed at him looking annoyed.
Leader - What happen ta readin’ our rights?!
P7 - Close up on Angela’s eye that widens in suspense.
Angela: EVERYONE DOWN!!!
Page 6
P1 - Shot of leader shooting an automatic weapon (probably a TMP) at the officers. Angela ducks behind a nearby crate. Officers are taking cover, but one officer gets caught in the crossfire.
Officer (on who got hit): AHHhhhhh!!!
SFX: (What ever the sound of a TMP makes.) Rattatatatatatata… or something along those lines…
P2 - Angel is hiding behind a crate looking angry.
Angela: Why do they always make things difficult?
P3 - Shot of leader yelling to his comrades. The criminals scatter.
Leader: Ya like that, huh?! / ALL RIGHT MEN MOVE OUT!!!
Thug: Yes Boss!
P4 - View of Angela running behind a row of crates, trying to get some safe distance. She’s talking into her radio.
Angela: TEAM A! TEAM C! Move in! / Connor, I have a man down, get a medic here as soon as things are clear!
Connor (voice coming from headset): Hear ya' loud and clear Ang! Medics are on the way! About how many are there?
Angela: 20, give or take!
P5 - Angela is crouched on the ground, looking around a corner of a wall; we now see a shadow of a figure above her.
Connor: (voice coming from her headset) Gotcha! You know what to do!
P6 - Angel looking up in slight surprise.
Page 7
P1 - camera changes view to look up at leader who is on top of a crate, pointing his gun at Angela.
Leader: miss me baby?!
P2 - Shot of Angel rolling out of the way, just barely clipping the shoulder of her jacket. Shots hit the wall where she was a second ago.
P3 - Angel takes aim, and shoots.
SFX: BANG! BANG!
P4 - Angel’s shot hits the leader’s gun, knocking it out of his hand, and makes him fall backwards a little.
Leader: AHH!!!
Page 8
P1 - Leader holds hand in pain.
Leader: FUCKING BITCH! Who the hell do you-?
P2 - Angela is jumping at him smacking him across the face with the butt of her gun.
SFX: SMACK!
P3 - Angela roundhouse kicks him in the stomach and knocks him off the crate falling down to the ground floor.
Angela: YAHHH!!!!
P4 - Leader in on the ground holding his stomach. Angela lands on her feet next to him. Readers only see her legs and an enveloping shadow over the leader. He stares at her feet, scared.
Angela: Now then…
SFX: Ta-tap (sound of her shoes hitting the ground as she lands)
P5 - Shot of Angela pointing the gun at the leader.
Angela: You’re going to tell me everything I want to know… Who’s your provider, where to find him, his plans, yadda yadda yadda! Oh yeah, and the name of your tailor you’ll be paying to fix my favorite coat!
Page 9
P1 - Side view, leader looking up at Angela, yelling.
Leader: NO WAY! I AIN’T SQUELLIN’! ‘Specially not to some two-bit bitch cop!
P2 - Angel shoves the gun into his nose. The leader looks at the gun cross-eyed.
Angela: Oh, I think Mr. Magnum says you will.
Leader: You can’t do that! You’re a cop!
P3 - Same view with Angela cocking the gun. Leader is freaking out.
SFX: (Gun cocking) Ka-chink!
Angela: And not a very nice one, either.
P4 - Close-up Angela is smirking. Over her shoulder is someone with a knife standing behind her, getting ready to stab her.
Leader: GREEVES! HIS NAMES GREEVES!!!
Angela: Now we’re talking…
P5 - Small panel, close up of a handgun firing.
SFX: BANG!
P6 - Man who was behind Angela drops knife. He holds his bloody hand in pain. Angela is turning around in surprise.
Man: Ahhhhhh!!!!!
Angela: What the hell?!
P7 - Angela looking up on a walkway/second floor of the warehouse. She looks shocked.
Angela: Who’s up there?!
Page 10
Splash page - Back view of Angela looking up at the second floor of the warehouse. On the second floor of the warehouse there is a man in a black jacket with blue trim and a pair of sunglasses, looking down at her. It looks like an older version of David.
Inset panel a closer/ clearer image of the man.
Page 11
P1 - View from the second floor, the man begins to run away. Below we see Angela yelling at him.
Angela: Freeze! Police!
P2 - view is at Angela’s level. She points her gun at the man, but he is ignoring her. He is running toward a window with a lock on it.
Angela: STOP OR I’LL SHOOT!
P3 - Mid-range view of man shooting his gun in front of him.
SFX - BANG! BANG!
P4 - View of the lock on the window getting hit and broken off.
SFX - (I’ll get back to you on that one…)
P5 - Close up of Angela firing her gun.
SFX - BANG!
P6 - View of the man jumping through the window. We see the shot of Angela’s bullet hit the frame of the window.
SFX: KRRRSHHHHH!!!!!
Page 12
P1 - On the other side of the window, we see the man jump onto a roof a building next to the warehouse.
P2 - Side view of Angela still holding her gun in the air. We see the leader at her feet trying to get away.
Angela: Dammit…
P3 - View of the Leader scared stiff in his tracks.
Angela: And where do you think you’re going?!
P4 - Over the shoulder view pf Leader looking up from the ground. Angela stands with her gun pointing at him again. She looks at him with a snide look. Behind her we see cops handcuffing criminals. One officer is taking care of the guy the man shot.
Angela: You’ve got some talking to do.
Page 13
P1 - Angela is sitting at her desk. She seems a little dazed. On her desk is a pile of paperwork in front of her, a phone, and a few pictures on her desk. One of her family, maybe one of her wedding, one of her daughter and particularly one of her and David when they were kids from the beginning of the story.
P2 - ¾ view of Angela looking a little surprised (or rather, just waking up from her daze) as a newspaper is thrown on her desk.
Connor (voice from off-panel): Congrats, Officer!
Angela: Ah-!?
P3 - Connor sits on the edge of Angela’s desk. He is dressed in a police uniform and has sandy blonde hair that is slicked back. He also has bright blue eyes and looks very friendly. He smiles as Angela looks up at him.
Angela: Oh, Connor. It’s just you... / What’s up?
Connor: Only me? I’m hurt. / Have you seen the news? Your bust made the front page! We’re one step closer to figuring out who the big Kahuna of this underground organization is and shutting them down permanently! / How do you feel?!
P4 - Side view of Angela slumping back in her chair looking exhausted. Connor looks at her with concern.
Angela: Exhausted…
Connor: You okay? You haven’t been yourself since the bust. What’s on your mind?
Angela: It’s nothing…
P5 - Mid-shot of Connor crossing his arms in pride looking smug.
Connor: Yeah right! You can’t fool a Grade A+ Police interrogator!
P6 - Angela looking down at the newspaper. Her hands are holding her head up.
Angela: You too damn good for your own sake.
Connor: (off-panel) Naturally.
Angela: Let’s just say, I thought I saw that I think I knew before…
Connor: (off-panel) Who?
Inset panel: Close up on Angela’s face. Something has caught her eye on the newspaper.
Page 14
P1 - Shot looking down over her shoulder at the newspaper. Be sure to get picture of her and her brother as kids included in the panel. Image on the newspaper is in front of the warehouse of offices taking criminals out. Angela is one of the main officers on the page. Next to the warehouse is the building the man from the bust jumped onto.
Inset panel: Close-up on the top of the neighboring building, we see the man from the bust.
Angela: That’s him!
P2 - View from the newspaper looking up at Angela and Connor looking down at the paper. Angela is looking off to the side where the pictures on her desk would be.
Connor: You know him? / I didn’t see him at the scene.
P3 - View changes to behind Angela. She is staring at the picture of her and her brother. The phone starts to ring.
SFX: BRRRRIIIINNNNNGGGGG….. BRRRRIIINNNNNNGGGGG!!!!
P4 - Close-up on the image of her and her brother. Phone is still ringing.
Angela (thought): David…?
SF:BRRRRIINNNNNGGGG…. BRRRRRRIIIIIINNNNNGGGG!!!
Page 15
P1 - Angela is entranced by the photo and completely disregards the phone. Connor answers the phone for Angela.
Connor: City Police Dep- Oh hey! / Yes she’s right here. One moment please. / Hey Angie?
P2 - Connor hands the phone to Angela as he gets up to leave. Angela is brought back into reality with a bit of a “Wha..?!” expression on her face. Connor looks playful having awoken Angela from her little “daydream”.
Connor: AnnNNnnnggg…. PhooOOOoneee!!
Angela: Oh! Sorry Connor!
Connor: Take it easy, ok?
Angela: Thanks…
P3 - Close of Angela talking on the phone. She looks relieved, and smiles.
Angela: This is Officer- Oh! James! How are you, honey?
P4 - On the other side of the phone line. Angle looking down on a man, Angela’s husband, standing behind a stove cooking a dinner, probably spaghetti. He’s tall, kind of lanky, clean-cut with sandy blonde hair. Dresses nicely and wears glasses, so he looks intelligent. He looks down at his side at their daughter tugging on his pants leg holding a doll. She looks a bit like Angela when she was a child only she has her father’s hair color. You can tell Angela is blessed with a loving family.
James: Fine! Fine! Rachael and I just got home from daycare and-
Rachael: -Dadddddddddyyy! I wanna talk to mommy!
James: Hold on, Rachael wants to talk to her mommy!
P5 - Mid shot of Rachael happily talking on the phone now.
Rachael: Hello Mommy!
Angela: (voice coming from phone) Hello sweetheart, How are you?
Rachael: Goood! I drew you a picture for you today! I want to show you!
Page 16
P1 - Angela is starting to straighten things on her desk obviously planning on leaving soon. Her head tends to look in the direction of the picture of her and her brother unconsciously.
Angela: Why thank you sweetie! I’ll be home soon to see it, ok?
Rachael: (voice coming from phone) Ok!
Angela: Let me talk to daddy and I’ll be home soon. I love you!
Rachael: (from phone) I love you too, mommy! Bye! Bye!
P2 - Shot of James talking on the phone while Rachael plays with her doll.
James: She’s excited. Congratulations on making the cover story, dear.
Angela: Thanks…
James: You don’t sound too thrilled about it. Is something wrong?
P3 - Angela is putting the newspaper away in her messenger bag, she looks a little down. She rests the phone on her shoulder as she talks into it.
Angela: Everything’s fine… it’s just… / I think I saw someone I haven’t seen in a really long time.
James: (on phone) Who?
P4 - Angela holds the picture of her and her brother in her hands.
Angela: My brother…
P5 - Angela puts the picture in her bag and looks like she wants to end the phone conversation like NOW.
Angela: I know! I know! I haven’t seen him since I was 10, but… / Can we talk about this when I get home?
James: Of course! But, would you mind picking up some bread on your way home?
P6 - Angela is putting on her coat getting ready to leave.
Angela: Sure. I’ll be home soon. / I love you. Bye.
P7 - Angela waves goodbye to other officers as she leaves the building through double doors.
Angela: (thought) But I just can’t shake the feeling that something big is about to happen.
Page 17
P1 - Establishing shot of a small sidewalk grocery store. The streets are filled with people passing by. In the foreground we see the close-up from the shins down of someone wearing blue jeans and black shoes.
P2 - Medium shot of Angela standing in the checkout lane behind an elderly old woman who has slot of groceries still being scanned. The cashier is a middle-aged man. Angela is minding her own business and stares off into space.
Angela: (thought) Was that really you, David?
P3 - Close-up on Angela who is still staring off in space.
Angela: (thought) But what connection would you have to the bust? For your sake I hope that wasn’t you…
P4 - Same shot only something has caught her attention.
P5 - Shot behind Angela. She is looking outside the window. We see the figure of “David” from the night of the bust. He is obviously staring straight back at her.
Inset panel: Closer view of the man.
Angela: It’s him!
P6 - The man begins to turn and walk away. He knows he’s been seen, but doesn’t rush off yet.
Angela: Oh no you don’t! Not today!
Page 18
P1 - Angela takes her groceries starts making her way past the register and the elderly woman.
Woman: How rude!
Cashier: Hey! You gonna pay for that or am I callin’ the police?!
P2 - Angela drops money off in front of the cashier. He’s a bit stupefied.
Angela: I am the police. / Keep the change.
P3 - Angela is standing outside the grocery store and is looking to her left (reader’s right) as the man ignores her calling and rushes past people.
Angela: Wait! I just want to talk to you!
P4 - Angela starts chasing after him. They’re both weaving in and out between people. He’s further ahead than she is.
Random person: Hey watch it!
Angela: Excuse me.
Random person 2: The nerve!
Angela: Pardon me!
P5 - Angela sees him ducks into an alley. She is irritated.
Angela: (thought) Well aren’t you creative in escape routes.
Page 19
P1 - Angela makes it around the corner only to see that he’s jumped over a gated road block.
Angela: Dammit!
P2 - Angela makes it over the fence. She leaves her bag behind on the other side of the fence.
Angela: What’s he playing? Cat and mouse?
P3 - Angela starts running again. She pulls out her gun out of her jacket while doing so.
Angela: (thought) Better play it safe. Never know if he’s leading me into a trap.
P4 - She comes to a four way alley. It looks deserted and junked up. On the sides of the buildings are stairways that lead to different floors of the buildings. Angela looks confused and angered. She holds her gun close to her and looks alert.
Angela: Damn… Where did he go?!
Page 20
P1 - The man sneaks up on her standing about 3 feet behind her. She knows he’s behind her.
Angela: Alright you, enough games.
P2 - Angela turns around and points the gun at him. She has a stern look and he is calm.
Angela: Who are you? And what were you doing at the warehouse that night? Cause if you have info I want, you better spill it.
P3 - The man, who actually IS David, stays completely still, unphased by her words. He grabs her wrist tightly squeezing her hard enough she drops the gun. Angela refuses to give in. and has a hand over his fist.
David: You really shouldn’t point guns at someone unless you’re really intent on shooting them.
Angela: Errr!!
P4 - Angela throws a punch at his face with her free hand but misses as his head tilts out of the way.
Angela: Eee-YAHHHH!!!
P5 - Medium shot of David spinning her around and has her in a neckhold. She claws at his arm to try to break free. She is angered while he still remains calm.
Angela: Let… Go… of me!!!
P6 - Close up of David speaking in her ear. He has a slight smirk on his expression. She looks at him out of the corner of her eye, obviously wanting to beat the daylights out of him.
David: I’ll let go when you settle down, young lady.
Page 21
P1 - David releases his hold on her. She starts to fall forward and her hands instinctively go to her throat to catch her breath.
Angela: *cough! Cough!*
P2 - Angela is on the ground still recovering with her eyes shut tight. David looks at her, his expression is kind of sad looking. Maybe he feels bad for nearly suffocating her.
Angela: What were you trying to do? KILL ME?!
P3 - Close up shot of Angela, she is shocked by what David is telling her.
David: You and your family need to get out of here…/ now…
Angela: What…?
P4 - Angela looks up at him, but he’s already walking away.
Angela: Why are you telling me this?
P5 - Shot changes so that we see David in the foreground but we see Angela starting to get up behind him. Her head still faces the ground.
Angela: Where are you going?! You still haven’t told me why you were at the warehouse. But more specifically-
P6 - Close up on the back of David’s head.
Angela: (off panel) -who are you?!
P7 - Same shot only David is looking over his shoulder at her.
Page 22
P1 - Side view of Angela. Close-up on her face which is shocked, not by his words but she now knows for sure that this man is in fact David. Her head is still tilted down.
David: Get out of here now, Angie. / Or else…
Angela: (quietly) David?
P2 - Angela sticks her hand out like she’s reaching for something that’s just out of her range. She calls out of her brother.
Angela: DAVID! WAIT!
P3 - Shot changes to over her shoulder looking in front of her. David has disappeared.
Angela: No!
P4 - She runs forward a little looking around.
P5 - She stops in her tracks, looking down empty alleys seeing no trace of him.
Angela: He’s gone…
End of Issue 1
-Michelle