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Rocky Mountain Search and Rescue - Chapter 16

Apr 21, 2013 11:27

Title: Rocky Mountain Search and Rescue
Author: gwylliondream
Genre: AU
Pairing: Alma/Ennis, Ennis/Jack
Rating: NC-17
Words: 60K in 16 chapters
Warnings: Major character death (not Ennis or Jack), child abuse, religious persecution, homophobia, under-aged non-consensual kissing and groping, indecent exposure, attempted rape, unreliable narrator.
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rocky mountain search and rescue, brokeback mountain, au, nanowrimo

Comments 38

morrobay1990 April 21 2013, 17:21:19 UTC

I've written stories shorter than this comment!

It’s almost impossible to clearly state my feeings about this story…even though I beta’d it, I was surprised that it made a much greater impact when I read it as it posted week after week.

Of all the chapters, even though it includes the death of someone I came to see as sad and pathetic, this is my favorite, in terms of the writing itself. As for Alma...

I’ve turned a 180 on her...previously, I’d lose patience, want to shake her and say “Wake up! Do something with your life! Don’t depend on a man to make you whole, turn to yourself!”

But now I see that she was doing the best she could, and I believe her trip down the one-way, dead-end (so to speak) street was caused by her complete and total isolation. Simply put, she had no one. Even though she could get through, however narrowly, a day, a conversation, her daily tasks, I believe that her mental capacity was stunted and dulled.

Ok, now the parts I loved about this chapter...

...and then you had fellas like Ennis who kept ( ... )

gwylliondream April 23 2013, 02:56:20 UTC

Thanks so much for your lovely reminiscings of what you liked about this story. This was such a difficult story to tell because Alma is so universally viewed as a wedge that keeps Ennis from Jack. Most readers want Alma out of the picture right away so Jack and Ennis can have their happy ever after. I'm so pleased that I took up the challenge to portray her in a different light and as a character worthy of sympathy.

Yes, Jack and Ennis are together at the end of the story, but will readers feel pleased with that? Or will Alma's sad past make them think more about what was going on in the minds of the female characters who we push aside in favor of slash?

Thanks for all your help!

nosunlight April 21 2013, 19:22:02 UTC

Congrats. :)

gwylliondream April 23 2013, 02:56:46 UTC

Thank you!

argentine65 April 21 2013, 20:43:17 UTC

Wonderful story and wonderful end! In both cases there was heat but in Jack it was going to be to a new life with the love of his life and in Alma, she felt she was going to hell and Archangel Michael’s spear. You described so well the two sceneries: the mountain and the snow and the suicide and the lonesomeness. Thank you so much for sharing. Marvellous. Martha

gwylliondream April 23 2013, 02:58:15 UTC

Thank you, Martha, for being such a loyal reader. Your comments always make me smile. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story!

chamilet April 22 2013, 02:04:05 UTC

Yeah, that was about what I figured would be the end of Alma. She was pretty hopeless.

Now I'm hoping for a sequel with Jack and Ennis' life:D

gwylliondream April 23 2013, 02:59:12 UTC

No sequel! Brat!

Thanks so much for reading!

XO

chamilet April 23 2013, 04:55:53 UTC

No sequel? But Jack and Ennis just found one another again...

I'm going to hold my breath until you do...

morrobay1990 April 23 2013, 12:33:50 UTC

Me, too!

Sad joetheone April 22 2013, 02:40:42 UTC

Well, life continues on in one part of the world and life ends in another. I'm happy that the boys finally found each other and it looks like they will be reunited. As for Alma this tells a deep dark story of a woman tormented in so many ways coming to terms in getting rid of the many demons inside of her. To have her end her life in such a way is hard to witness and those of us who have come so close to doing what Alma did in this end can understand it to a degree. I'm glad you wrote this because I think it helped you set yourself free of some demons that needed to be set free and I am glad you wrote it instead of doing it. May every tormented soul have an outlet to express these feelings and to overcome them without having to do what she did. Joe

Re: Sad gwylliondream April 23 2013, 03:03:57 UTC

Thanks so much for sticking with it, Joe! This is one fic that was so difficult to write. I had to do it in 30 days for NaNoWriMo, because it would have been pure torture for me to have Alma running around in my brain for any longer than she needed to be. I'm glad I was able to put it all out there.

It's been wonderful to read your heartfelt comments and to have you with me on this journey in fiction. I hope you have a wonderful summer!

XO