Eternity's Pool

[gryfeathr]

This is the beginning of an idea I wrote several weeks ago late at night. Any thoughts an opinions are very much appreciated; feel free to pick it apart.

Comments

[thecurtain]

...very very interesting. I disagree with Colin, though; I don't think the man was taking his eternity for granted--I felt it was bogging him down, dragging him under. Killing him on the inside, if not physically. And yet every time he wanted to change something, it felt as if he was "not allowed." As if that were beyond his rights to do. To me, that was the most fascinating part of all.

Aside from the "streatch/stretch" thing and other typos, I had only one problem with this. In all your wonderful imagery about things not changing, we get this:

But this forest never ended, the same pathways never the same twice. He'd tried, and restlessly would move from place to place, never finding the same stone or river bend again.

It seems like too much change to me, in such a universe. It seems like every time the man goes into the woods, he should find the same things. The above would be a treat for him, a new thing to look at every day, which doesn't quite flow with the rest of it.

But like I said, that's the only thing. This is some wonderful stuff, and you need to write more *_*