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Jan 30, 2007 14:57

Title: Contrasts
Author: LillithJ
Rating: G
Team: Spy for the Death Eaters
Word Count: 100
Author's Note: Page 197, The Prize, by Daniel Yergin. I apologize for picking on Ron.

The contrast between the two men seemed enormous in almost every respect.Severus had congratulated her on the offer of apprenticeship with Teagle. Ron had been furious. Her ( Read more... )

page 197 challenge, lillithj

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greyeyedpixie January 30 2007, 20:10:05 UTC

Loved it!

lillithj January 31 2007, 14:43:18 UTC

Thanks. Glad you did.

septentrion1970 January 30 2007, 20:30:44 UTC

the way you describe it, Ron had it come, and Severus deserved it.

lillithj January 31 2007, 14:50:15 UTC

Which I why I apologized for picking on Ron. He's a very difficult character to write well, and a very easy character to use as a scapegoat.

dacian_goddess January 30 2007, 20:56:10 UTC

Ooh, excellent use of the challenge! The stark contrast between the two men was brilliantly done! Loved it.

And if this hadn't seemed so in character for Ron, that apology may even have been called for. ;o)

lillithj January 31 2007, 14:52:05 UTC

Thank you. Glad you found it well done.

Ron is difficult. He has excellent points -- like his ability as strategist, but that's overshadowed by teenage boy angst. It's the angst that makes him an easy target, IMO.

shalimar1981 January 30 2007, 21:50:52 UTC

Very nice! The contrast between the two was brilliantly done. And Snape's campaign to win her was good in its subtlety.

Shal

lillithj January 31 2007, 14:52:56 UTC

Yes, quiet support wins they day. Many people don't understand that for some of us know it alls, you have to win the mind first.

Thanks for reading.

bambu345 January 30 2007, 21:51:20 UTC

Taking a break in my frantic need to finish my exchange piece, I strolled over to see your progress, but instead I found this delightful little drabble.

I love this! Love, love, love.

This is exactly the difference between the two men and why Ron would never work in the long-run for Hermione.

lillithj January 31 2007, 14:57:34 UTC

You and me both! This was written whilst I was stuck on the exchange piece.

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.

I tend to agree that Ron probably wouldn't work, but we see such a limited view of him that I'm reserving judgment as to how he'd be as an adult; hence, the apology because as he is now, he's such an easy target.

We've talked about how Ron is difficult to write well.

bambu345 January 31 2007, 15:41:25 UTC

I understand reserving judgment, and you know I write a fairly sympathetic Ron. However, given his canon character, I can only think of two ways in which the two could be together. One is that he's a youthful indiscretion; and two, that they don't see one another for a decade and then meet up again.

Frankly, the canon characterization of Ron doesn't deserve her. Yes she can be bossy, but she's also an extremely intelligent, sensitive, and loyal little thing, and he doesn't really respect her -- despite his willingness to have her do his homework for her.

Snape, on the other hand, may be outwardly prickly, but he does appear to be highly intelligent and sensitive and perhaps very loyal (we don't yet know.) He's a much, much better choice for her because he would not only respect her, but he would understand her.